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Manatheron
04-29-2010, 12:40 PM
Title:Mandatory Marriage Contract Fic
Author: Itsme66
Rating:Unknown
Genre: Unknown
DLP Category:Unknown
Pairing: H/MM (I suspect)
Status: Complete Oneshot
Summary:AU post 5th year. A bunny that wouldn't let go. Harry is set up in a marriage contract, but things don't go as planned. Rated for language and blatant - if non-desciptive - sexuality.
Link: Link (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5695032/1/The_Mandatory_Marriage_Contract_Fic)

I dug up the original post for the sake of correct formatting. Before it gets deleted, I'd feel better if it at least *looked* like a For Review thread.

So, everyone: please note Manatheron's no longer recommending this fiction.

- Tinn.




I posted it for no reason other than this paragraph

Next morning, Harry was just contemplating how his luck seemed to have changed, when he got final proof. An owl, unknown to him, arrived, carrying a letter, and since he was still deep in thought, he opened it without care. The letter read:

Potter, I don't know what you did, but the Master has been in his chambers since yesterday afternoon, screaming himself hoarse. No Death Eater who wants to live will go near him under these circumstances, since those who've come too near all dropped dead, and nobody will ever believe in his superiority again. Act fast, and you'll win.

The Dark Lord Voldemort's house is located twenty yards due south of Little Hangleton Cemetery.

My debt is paid.
Peter

The letter was signed in blood, and Harry was speechless for all of ten seconds.

Edit Indeterminate:

Thank you Tinn. Now that I've finished it, Here's the closing comments

Not bad on the whole. The romance was rather slipshod and plebeian, especially toward the end, but it did have a healthy dose of Political Harry, and is a Manipulative Dumbledore fiction bordering on the extreame.

It's not a complete disaster of 'L337' proportions, but it's not all that good either. On the whole i'd say it rates a pretty solid 2. More of a 'guilty pleasure' fic than anything as the underlaying story is good even if the execution leaves quite a bit to be desired.

2/5

Seratin
04-29-2010, 12:49 PM
Uhh... What the fuck? >_>

The Wizard
04-29-2010, 12:55 PM
Agreeing with Seratin. Wut?

Blaise
04-29-2010, 01:00 PM
http://pix.motivatedphotos.com/2008/6/28/633502095110658970-Facepalm.jpg

Manatheron
04-29-2010, 01:12 PM
Ya, Did it right to start with, but...

-shrugs-

At a second glance it wasn't worth posting, and I'd be quite happy if someone would take a moment to delete the thread.

Tehlaziboi
04-29-2010, 02:11 PM
What part of that needed a second glance to tell it wasn't even worth posting? :|

mknote
04-29-2010, 02:37 PM
Wait, what was it?

Manatheron
04-29-2010, 03:25 PM
-Snorts-

I liked the fact that peter paid off his debt as nobody ever uses that. I hadn't gotten any further when I posted it, and I removed the recommendation five paragraphs later. It's not bad for a guilty pleasure fic, but in no way library, or even recycling bin material.

Besides, It seems I've done too good a job shooting down other peoples recommendations even if I only give a truly negative review to maybe 1 in 50. As soon as I post something people start looking for reasons to kill it even if they'd give it a chance if it came from some of the older members.

Or perhaps (and I doubt this) my choices in stories just differ that greatly from the average reviewer around here, who can tell. Regardless, I've little else to say on this subject.

So, summery in a nutshell: I liked an aspect, I posted the story, I read further and realized I'd made a mistake, I retracted it. Finis

The Wizard
04-29-2010, 03:28 PM
Or perhaps (and I doubt this) my choices in stories just differ that greatly from the average reviewer around here, who can tell. Regardless, I've little else to say on this subject.
It's this. No one cares enough to shoot down a story because you recced it.

Manatheron
04-29-2010, 04:40 PM
It's this. No one cares enough to shoot down a story because you recced it.

HA! ya, cause if you or vash posted something similar there's so many people here who would be the first to dare rate it below a 3?

The Wizard
04-29-2010, 04:45 PM
Yes. I am such a prolific and well respected poster on this forum that no one would dare cross me. Take the stick out of your ass.

Tinn Tam
04-29-2010, 04:55 PM
Besides, It seems I've done too good a job shooting down other peoples recommendations even if I only give a truly negative review to maybe 1 in 50. As soon as I post something people start looking for reasons to kill it even if they'd give it a chance if it came from some of the older members.

I really, honestly don't think so.

Feel free to prove me wrong though; but in PMs please.


Back on topic, I've brought back from the dead your original post. If the story is so bad, it'll get deleted. If no one else feels like reviewing it, since you say it's not Library worthy, it'll get deleted. In the meantime, I like it better with the usual formatting.

Shinysavage
04-29-2010, 05:06 PM
Ok, I couldn't bear to get through the first chapter, but the OP's acknowledged the fail, so I won't elaborate. My reason for posting is: who the fuck is Morag MacDougal?

EDIT: @Oz: Cheers. After posting I did think to look her up in the Lexicon. Kudos to the author for an obscure pairing I guess...

The Wizard
04-29-2010, 05:10 PM
A Ravenclaw girl in Harry's year.

Innomine
04-29-2010, 06:32 PM
Morag... good lord, that name is even worse than Agnes.

Is it just me, or am I noticing a trend in Mana posting... questionable fics for review?

Myst
04-29-2010, 08:01 PM
Morag... good lord, that name is even worse than Agnes.

Is it just me, or am I noticing a trend in Mana posting... questionable fics for review?

Totally isn't just you. He posts shit faster than diarrhea.

Manatheron
04-30-2010, 12:16 AM
Totally isn't just you. He posts shit faster than diarrhea.

Love you too dear.

In case you didn't notice their both from the same author.

@Tinn: Ya, Over the top melodrama, I know. One of those days.

In my defense those few times I actually do find a fic worth posting I usually find someone's beaten me to it by about two hours or so. It's just...
Frustrating...
More than anything.

I do know that the stories I post tend to be borderline, but really? Really Really? I've seen some stuff I'd consider perfect crap get fours and fives from the first half dozen people to review it even when the OP warns you there's Cliche' and whatnot up the Ass.

-shrugs-

Like I said, Frustrating.

Andro
04-30-2010, 12:33 AM
If the writer's lazy with the title, you can pass instant judgment.

No exceptions.

Zennith
04-30-2010, 03:02 AM
If the writer's lazy with the title, you can pass instant judgment.

No exceptions.

This. True without fail. If anyone can think of a good story with no real title, I'll be stunned.

Random Shinobi
04-30-2010, 07:28 AM
Not bad on the whole. The romance was rather slipshod and plebeian, especially toward the end, but it did have a healthy dose of Political Harry, and is a Manipulative Dumbledore fiction bordering on the extreame.
The fic doesn't have Manipulator!Dumbledore, it has Incapable!Dumbledore. Since when can a rather stupid teenager outwit a genius with over a century of experience?

On the whole i'd say it rates a pretty solid 2.
You are being too generous here. It would get two stars if not for the absurd amount of character bashing and total OoCness of the characters.

1/5

Seratin
04-30-2010, 11:18 AM
So, summery in a nutshell: I liked an aspect, I posted the story, I read further and realized I'd made a mistake, I retracted it.

You know how to avoid this problem in the future, right? Finish reading the fic before suggesting it.

Anyway the fic itself is nothing we haven't seen done a thousand times before. Although it's particularly bad.

Warlocke
04-30-2010, 01:43 PM
You know how to avoid this problem in the future, right? Finish reading the fic before suggesting it.I suspect that's where the history of getting beaten to posting a story comes in.

It wasn't all that bad, really. In fact, it was more readable than a lot of the stuff I've seen posted here over the years. And Dumbledore was incapable because he was purposely written as someone who'd gone senile.

Or did you miss the part where he finally just tried to kill Harry with a Sectumsempra to the throat just for the fuck of it?

His senility basically put him on par with the rest of Wizarding Britain in their prime.

No, nothing terribly new, but not revolting either.

I'm actually glad to see Morag get some screen time in a fic. It seems like half the time she's used in a story A: it's just a passing mention and B: she gets mistaken by the author for a Slytherin student. She has managed to be a (semi) main character in at least two things I was writing (not that those count).

At the risk of pissing off women with the name and fans of the saint, Morag's name is certainly no worse than Dorcas. I suppose if I ever have to pray to the patron saint of sewing, I'll be sorry I dissed Dorcas. At least the chances of me running into a woman named Dorcas that could connect 'RL' me to this post are vanishingly slim (more so since I've no plans on visiting the Netherlands). :D

FYI: Morag means 'great' or Mor = great and ag = little, which comes out to 'great young one'. It's also associated with the sun and is sometimes translated as 'Sarah' :confused:

Then again, interpretations vary (greatly).

The Wizard
04-30-2010, 01:53 PM
Morag is also Scotland's second most famous monster. Morag doesn't sound quite as good as Nessy though.

Socialist
04-30-2010, 02:08 PM
FYI: Morag means 'great' or Mor = great and ag = little, which comes out to 'great young one'. It's also associated with the sun and is sometimes translated as 'Sarah' :confused:



So, Morag is Cthulhu when young then?

If so, that'd make this a subtle, subtle HP/Lovecraft xover.

Alexeyy
04-30-2010, 04:43 PM
I'm currently reading halfway through the first chapter. When I read shit like that -- when shit is being heaped on Harry Potter for no reason at all -- it never fails to get me riled up. The more I read, the more I get worked up in anger, feeling excessively sorry for the poor Harry Potter.

I understand that this story, for instance, is a crack. In other stories it could be that the author is silly, or overzealous in showing the reader that, hey! see, Harry Potter is miserable, just how fucked up is that? (The same could be said about the "abuse" stories.)

Anyway, I just wanted to ask whether you people read these kind of stories with laughter, or, like me, bubbling in anger? I can't help it, I always get worked up into so much righteous fury, that eventually I cannot read anymore and have this urge to break something.

Dirk Diggory
05-01-2010, 01:36 AM
If he'd chosen the name Daphne he'd be getting all 5 star accolades.

Still, Morag. Exceedingly poor choice. Could have at least gone with Tracy Davis for the random Mary Sue. I am disappoint.

Zennith
05-01-2010, 12:57 PM
If he'd chosen the name Daphne he'd be getting all 5 star accolades.



Sure as fuck hope not. This is a piece of shit.

Tasoli
05-01-2010, 01:51 PM
I don't know about 5 star but it would be at least get 3 star I believe.

I still give 3/5 it is noting new but writing isn't bad either.

Xiph0
05-02-2010, 06:43 AM
Saw MM. Was expecting McGonnagal. Was disappointed.

Warlocke
05-02-2010, 06:08 PM
Saw MM. Was expecting McGonnagal. Was disappointed.That I can sympathize with.

Kensington
05-03-2010, 01:49 AM
I read this puppy. I knew it was crappish - but it kept my interest throughout the story somehow. Seriously - the characterization is horrible, cliches are aplenty, yet it was good for a single read. I honestly can't remember the grammar however, but I think it was slightly below average.

2/5.

Warlocke
05-03-2010, 01:24 PM
I honestly can't remember the grammar however, but I think it was slightly below average.Below average for everything or below average for fanfic?

'Cause there's a difference

I don't remember raking my nails down my face or gibbering like a madman, so...

Kensington
05-03-2010, 04:06 PM
Below average for everything or below average for fanfic?

'Cause there's a difference

I don't remember raking my nails down my face or gibbering like a madman, so...

Below average for fanfic. I remember that it was a slight chore to read - but it wasn't bad enough for me to cringe or feel rage.

thapagan
05-03-2010, 04:24 PM
I think it was fine free entertainment. I have read it twice.

It may not be very good by itself, but It is at the top half of a lot of other works.

Including the last few bones episodes, boy has that show jumped the shark.

knothead
05-08-2010, 11:06 PM
When I saw H/MM, I was thinking why on earth would someone want to recommend a Harry/McGonagall story... I'm glad to see that it's not.

Edit to add: Over the top (which is to be expected in contract fics) but pretty good. 3 stars, given the genre.

Alludra Spica
05-17-2010, 03:53 PM
I had already read this..but one of the same author's fics Runaway (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5946526/1/Runaway), I think is much more oriented to the demographic on this site (its one of those stories when Harry decides marrying Ginny Weasley is NOT in his best interest)

There were a lot of funny parts, calling Mandy a broomstick wasn't at all original because I've read many fics that refer to Ginny as a broomstick. Its your typical Harry seeks revenge fic, although I have never read a fiction when his eyesight gets repaired after loss of the scar horcrux.

It was worth reading for this one part...

"I'm waiting, Granger," Harry barked, only to see her wilt further as she desperately looked around for help. Her reaction not only confirmed everything Harry had just put together, but it told him the rest too. "YOU UNMITIGATED BITCH!" he roared, his magic leaping unbidden to pin her to the spot.

overall 2.5/5

Zennith
05-17-2010, 05:03 PM
It was worth reading for this one part...

"I'm waiting, Granger," Harry barked, only to see her wilt further as she desperately looked around for help. Her reaction not only confirmed everything Harry had just put together, but it told him the rest too. "YOU UNMITIGATED BITCH!" he roared, his magic leaping unbidden to pin her to the spot.


Reeeallly. THAT was good enough for you to make the rest of the story worth reading?

Manatheron
05-19-2010, 02:36 PM
read that one start to finish in one sitting!


I couldn't help it, it had 'Trainwreck' all over it.

Anarchy
05-19-2010, 06:03 PM
I read this probably two months ago. I won't say it was a good story, but I will say it was entertaining. I am, however, disappointed with the pairing. I wanted to be the first to post a HP/Morag pairing on FF.net, but this story beat me to it before I could finish mine. I haven't worked on my HP/Morag story since I read this one actually. Mood killer :(

Captain Trips
05-30-2010, 04:56 PM
I find this story to be boring and badly written.
1/5