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Oneshot Oedipus Flower by Vash - NC17 - H/Lily/OC

Discussion in 'Restricted Section' started by Antivash, May 29, 2006.

  1. Pyromaniac

    Pyromaniac Third Year

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    I honestly don't know how the fuck I managed it. It's a horrible piece of writing, damned kinky, but horrible nonetheless.

    The last couple chapters are too rushed as well--somewhat disappointingish.
     
  2. peregrine1989

    peregrine1989 Third Year

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    This is a good story that has no usual cliche or anything. It is also a true bit of Vash's work. I didn't like how his plan seemed to collapses at the end like that, I mean he though this out very well and for it to fail like that is sad.

    I am honestly not sure what I am going to rate this so I shall go for 70/100 with an error of about 10%

    Great my reviews are getting paradox in them. I do far to much physics.
     
  3. Oz

    Oz For Zombie. Moderator DLP Supporter

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    And not enough Engrish. ;_; But yeah... you're right. Seems like things shouldn't have fallen to pieces so easily for Harry when he tried to kill James. Then again, he was pretty arrogant. And we have the sequel to look forward to at least.
     
  4. peregrine1989

    peregrine1989 Third Year

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    I agree with the excessive arrogance bit, although it made sense with the story, but I still think he would have thought to check the area out before he moved to kill James.

    Anyway moving on. I would like you to tell me what I did wrong with my last post Oz, or anyone else who is available. Other then the word cliche which should have been cliches, I can't spot my errors.

    Oh and I think I posted this before, somewhere else, this is not a complaint, I actually like getting my English and Grammar corrected, as I am more of a Maths person and never truly understood English properly.
     
  5. Oz

    Oz For Zombie. Moderator DLP Supporter

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    Should have 'too' instead of 'to'. 'To' is the preposition that indicates motion (moved to), contact (a punch to the...), limit of movement/extension (stretched to) and a shitload of other things I can't remember and/or can't be assed listing. 'Too' is used to indicate an excess of something (too much...). Hope that helped.
     
  6. cold burn

    cold burn Third Year

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    This is excellent, though we all knew that already or this would have had more than four "this is the horror of horrors! sheild thine eyes by removing them post haste!!!!" but I have only begun posting today so I believe that in homage to this excellent peice of plot driven smut I must deliver to Vash seven different form of kudos! or maybe just one or none if it's not possible to say kudos on this forrum.
     
  7. Moloch

    Moloch Groundskeeper

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    >_< Kid, the hardcore flamers are gonna be burning you for this necro hard.
     
  8. World

    World Oberstgruppenführer DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    Before all aforementioned hardcore kiddies come to get their jollies from said 'burning', I'll just lay it out:

    While it is said that there are no necros in the library, resurrecting an old thread to simply say "lol great" is still frowned upon.

    And your post, cold burn, while more longwinded, is basically that.
     
  9. Schrodinger

    Schrodinger Muggle ~ Prestige ~

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    Errr... Since it was necroed already, may I ask what happened to the sequel?
     
  10. Antivash

    Antivash Until we meet again... DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    I got stalled. >_>

    Ill have something more ... eventually.
     
  11. CompulsiveLiar

    CompulsiveLiar First Year DLP Supporter

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    Brilliant! I had actually given up hope on 'Inremeabilis' ever being finished!

    But, Vash, when exactly will 'eventually' arrive?
     
  12. Antivash

    Antivash Until we meet again... DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    Ill start when I get home tonight! Which means.. Chapter Two ETA; 2025.
     
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