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WIP It Could Only Happen to Harry by Hoos Your Daddy - NC-17

Discussion in 'Restricted Section' started by Skeletaure, Aug 1, 2009.

  1. scaryisntit

    scaryisntit Death Eater

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    Was thinking the same thing as I read it. Don't know I gave the other one a 3... mustn't have absorbed what I was reading.

    This on the other hand, was excellent. Great writing alone makes it above 99% of adultfanfiction. Noticed a few jabs at cliche's in the genre (Parvati/Padma together, for instance). Wasn't a let down at all.

    Very interested in how Luna will turn out, given the nightmare she can be to write.
     
  2. Warlocke

    Warlocke Fourth Champion

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    I enjoyed the jab at people writing/saying 'Pavarti' instead of 'Parvati'. And, yes, it does remind me of Havarti cheese.

    As for Pavarti/Padma, every cliché needs poked at a bit, once it gets too prolific (even the ones people tend to like).
     
  3. ZeroTheDestroyer

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    Anyone up for some Pavarti Cheese? mmm.
     
  4. sirius009

    sirius009 Minister of Magic

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    this is my favorite line, disturbing, but classic.

    Fuck me,” Harry muttered, and Pomfrey arched an eyebrow at him.

    “It may come to that, Mr. Potter, if you don’t act quickly. Now go find Miss Granger. I’m afraid I must speak to the Headmaster about this.”
     
  5. AAli

    AAli High Inquisitor DLP Supporter

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    Chapter 6 is up.
     
  6. Khazad-Dumb

    Khazad-Dumb Loves the Gay Porn DLP Supporter

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    Well that was....weird. A good, albeit strange chapter. I like how the author wrote Luna, and I think he has a good point in his A/N's.
     
  7. ChaosGuy

    ChaosGuy Unspeakable

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    New chapter. It's Harry with Parvati and Parvati. It's like sex with twins... only better.
     
  8. Voice of the Nephilim

    Voice of the Nephilim Death Eater DLP Supporter

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    Pure win with the last chapter. I believe the AN to be correct, as in this is a pairing I've never seen before.
     
  9. Innomine

    Innomine Alchemist ~ Prestige ~ DLP Supporter

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    This guy really does do a terrific job.

    I bet Amer had such hope, before it was crushed. Harry/Harriet was just not to be!
     
  10. Blaise

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    I'm sorry, but when
    Parvati stuck her finger in his pooper before he climaxed
    I lulzed sooo hard.

    Awesome chapter.
     
  11. Red_Hourglass

    Red_Hourglass First Year

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    I’ve got a big surprise in store for Chapter Nine ;)
    Not really a spoiler, just a guess
    Spoiler (highlight to show):
    Winky?
     
  12. Scott

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    Winky sex? Ugh :eek: Anyway this was surprisingly good 4/5 from me. Tonks was pretty cool.
     
  13. esila

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    This overall is a good smut fic plus I got some laughs.

    The Tonks and Insane Veela Fleur porn was great but the rest weren't as good.
    Probably because it was so predictable: she does him, he does her, they do it together /and repeat/... The threesome was interesting though.

    Jab about writing/saying 'Pavarti' instead of 'Parvati' was really funny but by the fourth time it was repeated it stopped. And kind of started to annoy me.

    And Hermione is so out of character that it is a bit distracting.

    I'll give it 3/5 for the smut and will wait for next chapter.

    :D:D:D:D:D
     
  14. Stick97

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    yup. Time to go to sleep. I read this and thought it said "like a burst Clam"

    :awesome
     
  15. Nemrut

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    As a whole, the story was extremely entertaining and I laughed especially at the thought of Hermione getting off while reading Hogwarts: A History. The famous Tonks chapter was exactly what a smut scene with her should have been and the author managed to make the following chapters just as good.

    My real favorite was the Luna chapter since she had written her in a really convincing way and this time Luna was not some kind of exhibitionist nymphomaniac (which is fine too) but a more "realistic" take on Luna. It wasn't funny or hot but somehow charming if that is possible with such a story.

    As far as smut goes, this was one of the better stories.

    So all in all, 4/5, I docked a point because of the clichéd way of dropping Ron from the story for no more reason then the authors dislike for him and for the more major H/Hr pairing. It would have been more interesting (and funny) if Ron and Hermione were going out and while Ron wants to save Harry he does not necessarily want them to sleep together so he constantly knocks himself out or tries to obliviate himself in an humorous way or something. I don't know, it would have been better then "Ron decided to side with his whore of a sister and we dropped him like a used tissue".
     
  16. Marksbay

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    Made me smile. 5/5

    (USER WAS WARNED FOR THIS SHITPOST)
     
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  17. Nicks244

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    Nearly a decade later it's been revived with an update. Said he's back in the fandom now and expects to finish the story
     
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  18. pbluekan

    pbluekan Chief Warlock DLP Supporter

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    Well, this is a surprise. *unzips*

    The latest chapter was as technically well written as the rest of it, but I feel like he went a few steps too far in the smut in an effort to make it feel like romance. It comes off as cheesy rather than hot.
     
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  19. Johnnyseattle

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    Holy hell, the Tonks chapter is just as funny as I remember. For a basically PWP story, this is still one of the classics.
     
  20. IAmLordAether

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    Very funny. Good story, plot is quite light, and it doesn't just involve everyone rutting all the time.
    A good read. 5/5, but only because I can't score it higher.
     
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