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  1. NuScorpii
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    Complete A Cadmean Victory by DarknessEnthroned - M

    What he hell did I just read? Duel by monologue?
    Post by: NuScorpii, Feb 15, 2016 in forum: Almost Recommended
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    Complete A Cadmean Victory by DarknessEnthroned - M

    I'm not denying 1 and 2, you know. When I said the next day, I meant in the sense that it wouldn't take years or decades for it to happen. The author could easily skip to a point of time few months ahead with maybe a chapter in between and get to a newly resurrected Voldemort. My gripe is more about point 3, where the author just fucked it up. It'd have been better if he hadn't introduced that plot at all.
    Post by: NuScorpii, Feb 14, 2016 in forum: Almost Recommended
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    Complete A Cadmean Victory by DarknessEnthroned - M

    The reason he didn't get resurrected the first time was likely because of several factors such as him not having thought the possibility of his death, his followers not trying to resurrect him and him not having a readily available method for resurrection. I doubt it had anything to do with the absence of Harry's blood. He tried to come back using the philosophers stone before he tried the blood. If it was just about Harry's blood, that's what he would have gone for in the first place. So...
    Post by: NuScorpii, Feb 14, 2016 in forum: Almost Recommended
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    Complete A Cadmean Victory by DarknessEnthroned - M

    Sure it could. Voldemort comes back the next day and kills Fleur, and Harry realizes his idiocy. Or, the locket wasn't the fake Horcrux, and Harry ended up destroying the real one in the cave. At least it would be better than the useless plot point that the author created.
    Post by: NuScorpii, Feb 14, 2016 in forum: Almost Recommended
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    Complete A Cadmean Victory by DarknessEnthroned - M

    What a fucking waste of a chapter. When Harry believed he destroyed that locket in the cave, there was a possibility of a good plot where his stupidity comes to bite him later. Instead, we have an annoying Hermione, the locket is conveniently found and destroyed just in time. What was the point? There were far easier ways to get rid of Hermione who isn't even really all that important in this story. Harry still blames everyone but himself for every mistake he does. Fleur is still alive and...
    Post by: NuScorpii, Feb 14, 2016 in forum: Almost Recommended
  6. NuScorpii
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    Complete A Cadmean Victory by DarknessEnthroned - M

    jfc, do we get spoilers in email notifications? I just got this one :(
    Post by: NuScorpii, Feb 2, 2016 in forum: Almost Recommended
  7. NuScorpii
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    Complete A Cadmean Victory by DarknessEnthroned - M

    I'm a little confused about it all. What Harry saw with legilimency seems to suggest that Draco might have targeted Katie. Perhaps, it was in a bid to try to kill Dumbledore, but Draco in this story is a bit more competent than canon. He actually would have managed to kill canon Harry, since Harry didn't even realize that he was being poisoned until later. Then again, he also failed in trying to kill Dumbledore.
    Post by: NuScorpii, Feb 2, 2016 in forum: Almost Recommended
  8. NuScorpii
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    Complete A Cadmean Victory by DarknessEnthroned - M

    I liked he last two chapters. The plot itself is getting interesting, despite the poor characterization. I have, however, noticed myself subconsciously skimming over any scene that includes Fleur. I don't understand why Draco would actually kill Katie though. Not long ago, Draco seemed to believe Harry killed Snape. Why would he think he'd be any safer if he killed Katie while he still had to live at Hogwarts? It'd probably make some sense if he did it close to the year end.
    Post by: NuScorpii, Feb 2, 2016 in forum: Almost Recommended
  9. NuScorpii
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    Complete A Cadmean Victory by DarknessEnthroned - M

    I'm not sure if this has been mentioned before, but has anyone noticed how the author seems to lack subtlety at times and over analyzes the characters instead of showing what's going on and leaving it to the reader. For instance, in the latest chapter we have: There's several instances like this where Fleur seems to immediately and accurately guess each and every little thing. This has happened with Harry's POV too.
    Post by: NuScorpii, Jan 21, 2016 in forum: Almost Recommended
  10. NuScorpii
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    Complete A Cadmean Victory by DarknessEnthroned - M

    We're talking both about how people refer to others in canon and how they're perceived in return. While Harry doesn't know Hagrid or Dumbledoree, if you look at how Hagrid introduces himself and Dumbledore to Harry, you'll see that he quickly grows in familiarity with them. You see the same with Sirius too. That is very much unlike Fudge, Slughorn or Snape. The irony is that both Snape and Slughorn, with their connection to Harry's parents, could have done the same.
    Post by: NuScorpii, Jan 4, 2016 in forum: Almost Recommended
  11. NuScorpii
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    Complete A Cadmean Victory by DarknessEnthroned - M

    He probably would, but from their perspective he's familiar. So it is understandable that they'd refer to him as such. He would probably still feel weird, but once he realized their familiarity it should make sense to him. There is nothing of the sort with Snape though, so he has no excuse.
    Post by: NuScorpii, Jan 4, 2016 in forum: Almost Recommended
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    Complete A Cadmean Victory by DarknessEnthroned - M

    It matters to Hagrid and Dumbledore and explains why they'd call him by his first name.
    Post by: NuScorpii, Jan 4, 2016 in forum: Almost Recommended
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    Complete A Cadmean Victory by DarknessEnthroned - M

    Err... both were familiar with Harry as a baby even if Harry didn't know it. Very first chapter of PS.
    Post by: NuScorpii, Jan 4, 2016 in forum: Almost Recommended
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    Complete A Cadmean Victory by DarknessEnthroned - M

    Leaving aside the technicalities of usage of first names, Snape calling Harry by his first name was just creepy.
    Post by: NuScorpii, Jan 3, 2016 in forum: Almost Recommended
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    Complete A Cadmean Victory by DarknessEnthroned - M

    Dumbledore couldn't have been any other way, or else Harry would have been the one in real trouble. After all, there was no concrete evidence against Malfoy trying to kill people, but Harry cast sectumsempra on Malfoy who would likely have died without Snape's intervention.
    Post by: NuScorpii, Jan 1, 2016 in forum: Almost Recommended
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    Complete A Cadmean Victory by DarknessEnthroned - M

    It's not as simple as that. A good story is defined by its content and the pairing is a major part of this story. I'm don't know if the story would be more enjoyable if there was another pairing. The author could end up making another pairing just as boring as this one. I would certainly enjoy the story more if there wasn't a pairing at all. However, that takes away more than half the content of the story and it would't really be this story. Like someone mentioned before, the pairing...
    Post by: NuScorpii, Dec 14, 2015 in forum: Almost Recommended
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    Complete A Cadmean Victory by DarknessEnthroned - M

    Ditto, but I'm also concerned that it will end up being the love potion/curse trope
    Post by: NuScorpii, Dec 12, 2015 in forum: Almost Recommended
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    Complete A Cadmean Victory by DarknessEnthroned - M

    I don't think her characterization is awful at all. It's just that there's no chemistry between her and Harry.
    Post by: NuScorpii, Dec 11, 2015 in forum: Almost Recommended
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    Complete A Cadmean Victory by DarknessEnthroned - M

    Having abandoned this a while back, I decided to give it another try. The writing hasn't really improved from the earlier chapters, but it hasn't gotten worse either. I don't know what it is about Fleur that the author just can't seem to write any chemistry between her and Harry. I also don't get why the author is trying so hard at it. Harry and Katie have good chemistry. Worse, Harry and Tonks have better chemistry compared to Fleur, and Tonks barely even exists in the story. Overall,...
    Post by: NuScorpii, Dec 11, 2015 in forum: Almost Recommended
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    Complete A Cadmean Victory by DarknessEnthroned - M

    Sure it is, but given that it is a big enough sacrifice for Harry to fuel the wards, it would have made sense to see him try to figure out whether it was actually necessary, at least far more sense than some of those unnecessary fillers in the story.
    Post by: NuScorpii, Nov 17, 2015 in forum: Almost Recommended
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    Complete A Cadmean Victory by DarknessEnthroned - M

    If that was the case, I don't see how the situation is different from before, and why the need for blocking the Chamber arises. In any case, there could be any number of reasons why Voldemort might not have used the Chamber if he did know about it. However, nowhere in the story do we see Harry or Salazar giving any thought to any of this. They decide Voldemort could come through and that's it.
    Post by: NuScorpii, Nov 17, 2015 in forum: Almost Recommended
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    Complete A Cadmean Victory by DarknessEnthroned - M

    If that was the case Voldemort could have simply used the Chamber in sixth year instead of the possibility of Malfoy fixing a broken vanishing cabinet. Besides, Hogwarts had always been one of his goals. He was winning the first war until Halloween. I find it hard to believe that he would have known about the possibility of apparating into the Chamber and never used it to infiltrate Hogwarts. If he feared Dumbledore, he could have made sure Dumbledore was away.
    Post by: NuScorpii, Nov 17, 2015 in forum: Almost Recommended
  23. NuScorpii
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    Complete A Cadmean Victory by DarknessEnthroned - M

    Why is Voldemort entering through the Chamber an issue anyway? If Voldemort knew about the ability to apparate in/out of the Chamber, he would have done so during the first war. I don't recall anything about him learning anything new about the Chamber in any of the chapters so far.
    Post by: NuScorpii, Nov 17, 2015 in forum: Almost Recommended
  24. NuScorpii
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    Complete A Cadmean Victory by DarknessEnthroned - M

    Decent time waster, but the more recent chapters are worse than the earlier ones. While the fic is full of cliches, the one thing going for it is that the author doesn't spend too much time on them. There is no half a chapter thesis on the magical core, or an exposition on the power of the dual core wand or wand crafting that is often found in recent fics. They're mentioned. You read them, get annoyed for a second and move on. The sudden OOCness is a bit jarring, but I didn't find it...
    Post by: NuScorpii, Aug 24, 2015 in forum: Almost Recommended
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