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Old 06-13-2017, 08:43 PM   #61
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Just finished the story. Agree that the author should show more and tell less, but I was very entertained despite that. The action scenes had good tension, and Harry's big reset-advantage never seemed overpowering. Instead it felt necessary just to give him half a chance against Voldemort.

It's kind of borderline rating-wise for me, but I guess 3/5. Almost a 4.
Don't fear God,
Don't worry about death;
What is good is easy to get, and
What is terrible is easy to endure.

- Philodemus, Herculaneum Papyrus, 1005, 4.9-14

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Old 06-15-2017, 06:24 PM   #62
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I'm wondering why some people here didn't really appreciate how the writer managed to streamline the plot without truly damaging the plot, characterisation and emotional message. With >200k words this story never felt long at all as the S/N ration is so high.

I actually can't even recall any long story which is so compressed on the essentials without having far worse problems. There are lot "longer" stories which say a lot less. That makes it unique in a way.

P.S. The few chapters till the end worked fine for me. There's real tension and the action quite consistent and direct. This story achieves exactly what it tries to do but nothing more. Unfortunately some focus too much on the "nothing more".
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