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Old 12-20-2016, 02:14 AM   #2501
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The sorting hat really is an interesting character and if it's vulgarity had been more restrained it would have been a great portrayal. Instead it comes off as a bad OC written my a teen trying to be clever or edgy.
It's vulgarity *is* extreme. That's because its life, and the restraints it has suffered, have been even more extraordinarily extreme. In a bad way.

Imagine being sentient, quite intelligent, but having no hands, no body, being only able to observe. And all you *can* observe, for 364 days a year, is the inside of the headmaster's office. You'd probably go bonkers. And, when you're finally released - allowed to go out into the world - you'd go overboard in trying to handle it all.

I think the Hat's character is a mix of several things - he's got a superiority complex the size of the moon - but that's understandable - he's lived a thousand years, seen we puny mortals come and go, seen us make the same mistakes over and over again. He's spent a couple of hundred years (I think that was the number) being locked up even more than usual.

I think 'restrained' is exactly what the Hat wouldn't be, at the start of this story, when he's finally allowed out of his prison. Or his prisons, plural - first, he's out of the office, can see the world. And then HJ gives him a body.

Do you think the Hat had calmed down a bit by the end of the story? He'd adjusted somewhat, I thought. Even to the idea that he had to 'share' Harry . And put up with Fawkes. And actually participate, pick a side, in the war. Finally get involved rather than sitting back and snarking at everyone.

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Why does HJP suddenly loath members of his house in both lifetimes?
Well, the James of canon was something of an arrogant arse in his school days; we're told that he wised up in his last year and Lily rewarded him with her affections. He probably loathes himself to some extent; and thus his fellow conspirators.

I don't think he 'loathes' Harry's contemporary peers. Not until they've given him reason to do so, by their actions (Angelina, the twins). By default he treats them well, although wary of their youthful mindsets.

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Fred and George especially seem to turn evil and mean spirited for no reason.
No, there is a reason. It's because Fred and George find themselves *beaten*. In canon they are never 'defeated' - certainly not by their peers. Their pranks against their mates succeed with no resistance.

And then, in this story, HJ smacks them down. Again and again. And each time the twins respond, incrementally upping the ante.

The twins couldn't handle 'defeat'. It's a perfectly reasonable fanfic extrapolation of what might have lurked in their canon characterisation. We never saw it because they always got away with it in Rowling's books.
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Old 02-10-2017, 01:33 PM   #2502
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The while Twins/Chasers turning into vengeful idiots and their bashing is shit.

Snape character is ruined. Snape is most dimensional character in the series and yet jbern makes him one dimensional.

Sorting Hat is annoying as hell.

The tasks are boring. The dueling scenes are too repetitive.

The ending is rushed. The deaths of Lupin and Dumbledore had no impact.

The Lily/Remus affair was not believeable.

Harry is given an instant character transplant.

Meh but still the best HP fic I have read despite its flaws.
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Old 02-10-2017, 01:42 PM   #2503
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The while Twins/Chasers turning into vengeful idiots and their bashing is shit.

Snape character is ruined. Snape is most dimensional character in the series and yet jbern makes him one dimensional.

Sorting Hat is annoying as hell.

The tasks are boring. The dueling scenes are too repetitive.

The ending is rushed. The deaths of Lupin and Dumbledore had no impact.

The Lily/Remus affair was not believeable.

Harry is given an instant character transplant.

Meh but still the best HP fic I have read despite its flaws.
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Old 02-11-2017, 03:06 AM   #2504
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The while Twins/Chasers turning into vengeful idiots and their bashing is shit.
But that's not true. While outclassed at the start they adapt, get more clever, continue being more than a thorn in HJ's side. In fact at the end they nearly succeed in discovering Harry's biggest secrets and he comes close to murdering them to stop them. Great tension ... from a pair of vengeful non-idiots whose bashing is certainly not 'shit'.

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Snape character is ruined. Snape is most dimensional character in the series and yet jbern makes him one dimensional.
But that's not true. Snape's 'evil dimension' is given a backstory. He's shown to be a master at playing Dumbledore for a fool. His fights against HJ are tempered by his 'wizards debt', another twist to a character and conflict that is certainly not one-dimensional.

He's simply not the character you know from canon. You know, the bloke who's driven by a twenty-year crush on an old girlfriend - no more and no less. Now *that* could be described as 'one dimensional' ...

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Sorting Hat is annoying as hell.
But that's not --- no, wait, that's true. As per the author's intent. As distinct from almost any other fanfic which leaves the Hat as a non-entity.

So your grievance here is simply that you, personally, don't prefer stories where the Hat is annoying?

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The tasks are boring.
But that's not true. Multiple tasks, all different, all having Harry often lose in the most frustrating ways, the 'bad guys' being clever and duplicitous in getting away with it.

If you like broom racing there's a task in the story for you. If you like duelling and fighting there are tasks in this story for you. If you like things that go BOOM there are tasks in this story for you. If you like obstacle courses there are tasks in this story for you. If you want situations where the protagonist is facing certain death then there are tasks in this story for you.

Much *less* boring than in the canon I think.

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The dueling scenes are too repetitive.
But that's not true.

Show us where the different duels are the same. Show us the passages, the spell sequences, which are the same.

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The ending is rushed. The deaths of Lupin and Dumbledore had no impact.
But that's not true. Lupin had been an object of tension for HJ throughout the entire book; he had no idea how to relate to the man - a friend to Harry but an adulterer who'd slept with James's wife. Dumbledore was the powerful, kindly and *darn helpful* wizard who was going to work with Harry in defeating Voldemort. Both cut down in the climax of the book. Terrific impact at the time and with huge consequences, even if you have to sit back, close your eyes and wonder for a moment, wow, what's HJ going to do now? At the conclusion of the novel HJ is leading the fight, the brunt of command is on his shoulders, Fawkes, symbol of the Light, has shifted his allegiance to him. "No impact"? No, that's simply not true.

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The Lily/Remus affair was not believeable.
But that's not true. Given how the author delighted in giving us a Lily who *wasn't* like her fanon saint counterpart I think it worked well. Young people fighting a war, woman dissatisfied while her husband is absent ... you didn't find a one-night stand believable? Nor the guilt and tension that followed? HJ trying to work it all out? I find *that* 'not believable'.

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Harry is given an instant character transplant.
But that's not -- no, that is true. Most definitely true. Less a 'transplant', though, more a 'graft'.

In fact that is THE ENTIRE BASIS OF THE STORY! From the very first page. A second character is merged with Harry's.

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Meh but still the best HP fic I have read despite its flaws.
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Old 02-12-2017, 03:27 AM   #2505
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The post right above this is both why I no longer post in this forum and why I still follow it. Damn well said! Despite seeing it time and again, despite having done it in the past, I can't believe you had to.
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Old 02-12-2017, 03:49 PM   #2506
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This was one of the most memorable stories I've ever read.

I really enjoyed just about everything with regards to the style and ideas.

Haven't really seen anything quite like it before or since.

First-person is a perspective many authors struggle with, but you used it flawlessly here.

The Sorting Hat's word-choice was quite unique; it really stands out as, in my opinion, the most interesting characterization of the Sorting Hat in all of Harry Potter fanfiction, simply because it's so... strange... yet makes a lot of sense, if the Hat is aware of the passage of time and sentient. I can barely comprehend the level of interaction-starvation he must experience...
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Old 02-12-2017, 05:27 PM   #2507
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Most likely the fic I've reread more times than any other. I love the characters, especially the sorting hat. It cracks me up every time. The best tri-wizard tournament fic ever! Even though the fic can stand alone, I'm still sad the sequel never got to se the light of the day.
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Old 02-22-2017, 12:43 PM   #2508
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You can’t go wrong reading anything by jbern. Really just go fucking read it. This post is mainly to figure out which one of you little pus filled maggot shits didn't vote the fic that gave us Hat (5/5)!?!?! I mean come on this fic has action, mystery, drama, comedy and romance, it’s the whole fucking package!

And to tell Jim to get his ass to the computer and start bleeding on the fucking (or fracking) keyboard Because I demand entertainment!
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What is with this fic? Every chapter mentions who has slept with who, with pretty much the whole castle fucking each other on a daily basis. What kind of school is this? Its like a teenagers fantasy fic with everyone sleeping with everyone. What was jbern even thinking writing this? How is this fic in the Library. This is terrible.
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Old 03-10-2017, 12:35 PM   #2511
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What is with this fic? Every chapter mentions who has slept with who, with pretty much the whole castle fucking each other on a daily basis. What kind of school is this? Its like a teenagers fantasy fic with everyone sleeping with everyone. What was jbern even thinking writing this? How is this fic in the Library. This is terrible.
You and I obviously went to target different high schools if teenagers at your school didn't duck around and brag about it.
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I agree. While no story is ever perfect, this certainly makes it into the stories which I can tolerate rereading. I've not read this in a while. If I remember correctly, my only minor gripe with this story is the fact that once Harry has done the obligatory hysterics, he accepts the situation of a memory graft/transplant, call it what you will, far too easily. I imagine the sorting hat somewhat offset the potential backlash of James's memories by being with Harry. But still, I think more could have been made of the issue.

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Can I just ask, what's the quote regarding defeat from? Looks like something I'd want to read.
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Old 03-16-2017, 06:55 AM   #2513
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Thanks. I'll give it a whirl. Actually, just had a quick look and I've read it before. Just didn't recognise it. But, again, thanks for linking it.

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