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Oneshot A Boy and His Cloak by HoosYourDaddy - M

Discussion in 'Restricted Section' started by Photon, Aug 7, 2013.

  1. Photon

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    Title: A Boy and His Cloak
    Author: HoosYourDaddy
    Rating: M
    Genre: Erotica
    Status: Oneshot
    Library Category: Restricted Section
    Pairings: Harry/Hermione
    Words: 10,621
    Published: November 2, 2009

    Summary: "Late one night at Grimmauld Place, Harry accidentally stumbles upon Hermione in a very compromising situation. What's a boy under an invisibility cloak to do? Smutty H/Hr Oneshot."
    Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5485394/1/A_Boy_and_His_Cloak

    Link: http://ficwad.com/story/130574

    Link: http://hp.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600024002

    Checked by Minion, August 25, 2013

    Checked by Dark Syaoran, June 6, 2014
    Added Ficwad and AFF link.
     
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  2. NoxedSalvation

    NoxedSalvation Temporarily Banhammered

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    This is fantastic H/HG erotica, I've re- read it several times and *enjoyed* it very much.

    5/5
     
  3. Rache

    Rache Headmaster

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    'It's perfect'. Very believable first time teenage oral sex. \

    We need moar of these.

    5/5.
     
  4. Averis

    Averis Don of Delivery Prestige

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    Read it before quite a long time ago, but it still holds up as the best pure smut fic I've read. The fearful interplay between Harry/Hermione at the beginning makes the actual sexual acts that much more interesting to read. Certainly library-worthy Restricted Section material.
     
  5. Oz

    Oz The Big Kahuna Moderator DLP Supporter

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    I was sure this was in the library.

    As good as smut gets I guess. 4/5.
     
  6. yak

    yak Moderator Moderator DLP Supporter

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    edit: nevermind, that was a different HoosYourDaddy fic.
     
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  7. Oz

    Oz The Big Kahuna Moderator DLP Supporter

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    Different fics, yak. Lol.
     
  8. Invictus

    Invictus Prisoner

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    Definitely a 5/5, specially since is so rare to find readables smut, good one is all but impossible.
     
  9. Azotez

    Azotez Seventh Year

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    Excellent, no other word for it :banana:
     
  10. Cxjenious

    Cxjenious Supreme Mugwump

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    Harry didn't go muff-diving. I expected muff-diving. 4/5. That's right, a whole point lost because there was no muff-diving.
     
  11. NuitTombee

    NuitTombee Dark Lord

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    Can't expect everything to happen the first time around, but yeah, would've liked that as well. Even if it was just a bit of exploring.
     
  12. Olivia Kingston

    Olivia Kingston Fake Flamingo Prestige DLP Supporter

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    She blew him, it's a bit weird to not have him return the action.
     
  13. NuitTombee

    NuitTombee Dark Lord

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    Well, I wouldn't consider it a proper blowjob, but yes, she did fellate him a little. And while I'm sure Harry wouldn't have minded giving her the Lord's Kiss she just didn't feel comfortable enough.
     
  14. Toshe1

    Toshe1 Squib

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    This is among the best erotica I have ever read, and I must comment despite my late arrival to this thread. I think the author did a great job with pacing and building tension. Too many stories just dive into the 'action'. The characterization of Hermione and Harry felt authentic as well. I also like the fact that it happened over two days - it makes it more believable. I would definitely give 5/5.
     
  15. neongreenbeast

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    Easily one of the best Harry/Hermione works I've read. I'm not a fan of the pairing, but this fic is truly exceptional. The characterization felt real. The thoughts of the pair were explored before the smut began. That's what sets this one apart.

    Obviously, the sex was great too.
     
  16. ButtersCG

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    I usually don't like the pairing Harry/Hermione, but this writer wrote it so well.
    It was a bit fast-paced, but I can't fault him for that. The story wouldn't be a one-shot, then. Great ending.

    4.5/5