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WIP All-Father by Rheagar - T - Worm/Marvel

Discussion in 'Other Review Board' started by Zombie, Aug 14, 2017.

  1. Zombie

    Zombie John Waynes Teeth Prestige DLP Supporter

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    Title: All-Father
    Author: Rheager
    Rating: T (???)
    Fandoms: Worm/Marvel crossover
    Status: Work in Progress

    Summary: The evil that seeks to extinguish man's light will tremble when Taylor awakens to godhood. Mankind will believe in magic again and know that Asgard stands with thee.

    Link: https://forums.spacebattles.com/threads/all-father-worm-marvel-odin-taylor.535396/#post-36022786

    As simple as it appears on the box, it's a Worm/Marvel crossover. Taylor has the Powers of Odin.

    What I like about this fic is that its a Marvel cross, Worm/Marvel crosses are my weakness and since the author of Memories of Iron is ded. I found this. Its short as of yet, but I enjoy it for the most part.

    Its another guilty pleasure. The writing is coherent, make sense to me. I can only find it on SB currently, but its worth the read I think, and I look forward to updates. They were pretty active, but this could be one of those fics that die after it leaves page one.

    I'll give it a 3.5/5 as loathe as I am to put decimal ratings. It has the potential to be good, just needs more content.
     
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  2. Sauce Bauss

    Sauce Bauss Order Member DLP Supporter

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    I wasn't particularly impressed, especially after following the word crack that was Ring-Maker. It's technically written well enough, though I did spot a few mistakes sprinkled throughout. The fight scene was decent, but I'm already cringing at the Danny interactions. It's not as bad on that front as a lot of fics, but was still a point against.

    All in all, I think if someone linked it to me again when it updated I would read it, but I wouldn't go so far as to follow it myself. 3/5.
     
  3. Zombie

    Zombie John Waynes Teeth Prestige DLP Supporter

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    I agree about the Danny interactions. Mostly because apparently the trend on SB is for her to out herself as a parahuman and Danny be like Matthew McConaughey in one of those Lincoln commericals.

    "I don't know why I'm okay with my daughter being a Parahuman, but I am." -insert intenseEDMbeatoverlay.mp3
     
  4. ASmallBundleOfToothpicks

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    Lets break this down:

    Grammar: Fine. A couple of run ons, typos, and whatnot, but not enough to make reading the story unbearable. 3/5

    Prose: The writing is pretty standard SB fare, but slightly below par, I'd say. 2/5

    Plot: Plot? What Plot? It basically just follows Taylor after she triggers with Marvel Odin's powers. She also reveals herself to Danny pretty early on, which is kind of a pet peeve of mine. I'll be generous and give it a 2/5.

    Characterization: Every single character is completely OOC. Taylor gets a thrill out of combat, which is almost antithetical to her character. Taylor designs her cape stuff in class. Sophia backs off after a single failed shoulder check. Danny just kind of goes along with Taylor's superhero plans. Even granting Shard Bullshit, which fuels a lot of the odd choices characters make in Worm, everybody just doesn't match up to who they were in canon- this is probably my biggest gripe with the story. 1/5

    8/20 over all, averages to 2/5.