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ASOIAF/GoT Tech Upgrade Stories - Can they be good?

Discussion in 'Fanfic Discussion' started by Andrela, Mar 5, 2016.

  1. Halt

    Halt 1/3 of the Note Bros. Moderator

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    It's as close as you can get to a harem fic without any sex too.
     
  2. VanRopen

    VanRopen Headmaster

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    Oh god, that one.

    >watermill powered sawmills
    >textile plants
    >meat processing factories
    >other industries powered by rivers
    >form a Fleet of the North from ex-Iron Islanders
    >canned foods
    >anti-biotics
    >vaccines to a few plagues
    >"and other wonders from my fertile mind".
    >"Gunpowder had led to primitive dynamite, muskets, cannons, flintlock weapons and other marvels of technology that made the North fearsome indeed."
    >"The Night's Watch had cannons, muskets, scatter guns, grenades, land mines, flamethrowers"
    >"But now Wildlings were being killed, their bodies torn apart by Bolton shotguns for sport."


    >this is literally all just given as fait accompli in the first two paragraphs
    >then we segway into a terribly handled war meeting where you can't help but want to punch Theon's face in


    And let's not forget...
    Apparently this wasn't Theon asking when Robb would make an honest woman out him. Could have fooled me though, xP
     
  3. Tasoli

    Tasoli Minister of Magic

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    He wanked Starks in to industriel age so hard I am suprised he didn't get friction burns.
     
  4. Hachi

    Hachi Death Eater

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    Harry Potter and the Philosopher's Stone:

    Chapter I.

    Harry took the Stone from Quirrel's dead hands and fell to the floor unconscious.

    The End

    more to come...
     
  5. Nemrut

    Nemrut The Black Mage ~ Prestige ~

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    That story jumped more sharks in the first chapter than Chunin Exam Day did in 100k and that's terrifying.
     
  6. Longsword

    Longsword Banned

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    I believe that Greyjoy alla Breve is a crack fic.It is, is it not? Does Andrew JTalon actually take it seriously?
    For a plot dependent on technical changes brought in a medieval setting, he does not concentrate on that even a bit. All work and problems are waived away. Most of the posts are filled with ridiculous dialogue and meaningless narrative. Also about half is actually written by the author, the rest is wish fulfilment in the worst form possible by others.
     
  7. BTT

    BTT Viol̀e͜n̛t͝ D̶e͡li͡g҉h̛t҉s̀ ~ Prestige ~

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    Sounds like your average Spacebattles fanfic.
     
  8. ray243

    ray243 Seventh Year

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    I don't mind the industrial age stuff as long as the fic could be seen as a crack!fic. It's the part where girls are literally throwing themselves at the protagonist and the "reluctant" hero ended up having a threesome that bothers me.

    It feels like a male nerdy teenager writing this fic because he could not attract any girls in real life. And given that this is a SI fic, it just makes me feel very uncomfortable reading it.
     
  9. yak

    yak Moderator DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    Let's not.
     
  10. ray243

    ray243 Seventh Year

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    Edit: Was I too subtle? This isn't the place to take aim at the entirety of SB, nor do we need the de-rail. -Yak
     
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