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Complete Browncoat, Green Eyes by nonjon - Firefly - M

Discussion in 'The Alternates' started by nonjon, Mar 23, 2006.

  1. Niffler Lord

    Niffler Lord Headmaster

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    I finally buckled down and read this story. Until then I haven't even heard of Firefly or Serenity. But after this story I got curious enought download the movie. Now I'm buying the DVDs to Firefly.

    Great story nonjon!
     
  2. Kai Shek

    Kai Shek Supreme Mugwump

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    Once again, I loved the new chapter. I just have to wonder if the part about...

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    Peeves forgetting to speak is realistic. I hope that he remembers pronounciation soon because although he spent maybe 300 years alone, I don't see anyone forgetting to speak.

    Its just something that doesn't go away.
     
  3. Lord Apophis

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    Great chapter.

    The entire thing with Peeves was great and the clue the goblins gave himwas good. Nothing he can find immidiatly but still capable of finding.
     
  4. razz

    razz Seventh Year

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    I was a little apprehensive about reading a crossover, and its taken me about three weeks, but I finally caught on. I’m so glad I did, too – this is brilliant!!

    I do hope poor old Harry does find the witches and wizards sometime.

    And I loved Peeves!
     
  5. Lord Apophis

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    Great chapter as usual!

    I like the clues that he is getting and that he seams to be sure that he is the last wizard just before he gets another clue :)

    I also liked how everyone ganged up on River at the end.
     
  6. Palver

    Palver High Inquisitor

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    Nice chapter!
    Not very much action, but chapter was pretty sad and funny at the end. I like Luna :)
     
  7. Olfrik

    Olfrik Seventh Year

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    Language is infact something that you can forget, if not the language itself then the actual movement of the muscels. My tongue and jaw always ache when I am in poland for the first day. And how I forget my mother tongue when I am too long there... It's not nice.

    But to the new chapter, I like how you hold us in suspense just long enough to solve one riddle and show us the next soon after.
     
  8. This_Ancientz_Dream

    This_Ancientz_Dream First Year

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    Awesome story so far. Quite a few points have had me laughing until I nearly cried. One of the biggest things that drew me in to this story to begin with is the reasoning behind Harry making it to the 25th. It was plausible enough, especially with the element of magic thrown into the mix.

    There's nothing I hate more than a story that throws Harry (or any lo-jack character) into a futuristic, high tech world with no reasonable explanation for how they managed to keep up. nonjon is not guilty of that sin and I am very happy to be able to say that.



    :forkyou
     
  9. CGB

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    I usually don't read crossovers, I just can't enjoy them. That is, all crossovers except this one. I really like your story. As This Ancientz Dream said, it's good you had a logical explanation why Harry ended up in the future. I'll give it 4/5 stars and hope you'll update soon.
     
  10. Lord Apophis

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    I love the entire scene with the fire whiskey in the latest chapter, it is also rather amusing how Harry and River are making everyone think that they are constantly having sex.

    The end were Jayne cried or almost cried was great.
     
  11. CGB

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    Great new chapter. As Lord Apophis said, the Jayne scene at the end was great.
     
  12. nonjon

    nonjon Alumni Retired Staff

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    Yeah. I got a bit mean at the end of this one. Mainly to poor Zoe. Had to recenter myself and make sure I was still on course for where this fic is going. And I am. Should have a real nice evil cliffie at the end of the next chapter.
     
  13. ip82

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    Great 'comeback' chapter (although it wasn't really a comeback). Humor was a great refreshment after the plot-driven trip.
     
  14. Lord Osiris

    Lord Osiris Auror

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    It's been a while since i've commented on this fic and im srry Nonjon. Ok so i have to admit that i find myself suspenseful as to what you plan to do about the disapperence of wizarding kind, i also love the way you discribed the reasons as to perhaps why the race of wizards and witchs lost there magic, and thus the justification why the Goblins didn't up and leave.

    I find that im curious as to when you plan on resolving the story? because if im not mistaken your fairly far into the climax stage of the stroy...though i could be wrong?
     
  15. nonjon

    nonjon Alumni Retired Staff

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    Bleh. FF.net's relocation meant I'd upped and was halfway through editing the chapter when the site went down. Just now finally posted this weekend's chapter.

    And I'd say this chapter marks the end of act 2 and we're about to start act 3. Still got a ways to go. But we are nearing the home stretch. I'd guess we're around a dozen chapters from wrapping this up. Give or take a half dozen.
     
  16. ip82

    ip82 Prisoner

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    Well, that cliffy surely worked fine. I was mildly pissed off by all the filler leading to it, but in hindsight, it served to make the surprise even bigger. Good work.
     
  17. nonjon

    nonjon Alumni Retired Staff

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    Gotta hit him with that when they're not ready for it. And then end the chapter. Was aiming to trick people by making it semi-obvious.
     
  18. Lord Apophis

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    Great chapter, that was one of the most evil cliffie I have ever seen :)

    Great scene were Harry healed Rivers hymen :D
     
  19. The Dark Lord Squash

    The Dark Lord Squash Denarii Host

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    Good Cahpter Nonjon, but man that was a evil cliffie. I really did not see that on e comming, which I supose made it all the better.
     
  20. Stalicon

    Stalicon High Inquisitor

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    I bet its not what we'd expect either, the statue is probably filled with dark wizards or my favorite...

    Children. I think that the parents would see that chidlren are getting less magical and decide to preserve the race. 11-17 year olds. Then as time went on and kids finally stopped being magical they just forgot or didn't beleive the stories. Poof, bye bye wizard kind!
     
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