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Oneshot Childhood’s End by Vera Rozalsky - K+

Discussion in 'Almost Recommended' started by Photon, Sep 6, 2013.

2.9375/5, 16 votes
  1. Photon

    Photon Order Member

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    Sep 6, 2013 #1
    Title: Childhood’s End
    Author: Vera Rozalsky
    Rating: K+
    Genre: Character study (Hermione)
    Status: Oneshot
    Library Category: General
    Summary: "Post-DH. On the eve of the Decommissioning of Malfoy Manor, Hermione remembers the end of her childhood. The bookstore scene from Harry Potter and the Chamber of Secrets, POV Hermione."
    Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5526332/1/Childhood’s-End

    Excellent oneshot about Hermione and her parents. Summary provided by the author is not the best one as it neither AU or a pointless canon rehash.
     
  2. Andrela

    Andrela Plot Bunny DLP Supporter

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    Sep 6, 2013 #2
    It's okay. No, really. Not great, not terrible, just okay. 3/5
     
  3. Thaumologist

    Thaumologist Fifth Year ~ Prestige ~

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    Sep 6, 2013 #3
    As Xandrel said.

    There's nothing stand out about this. But at the same time, it doesn't suck.

    3/5
     
  4. Ched

    Ched Da Trek Moderator DLP Supporter ⭐⭐

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    Sep 7, 2013 #4
    Not bad, though I agree that it's more of a borderline 3.5/5 for me than anything.
     
  5. Hachi

    Hachi Death Eater

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    Sep 7, 2013 #5
    There's nothing that particularly stands out. It's average, therefore 3/5.
     
  6. readerboy7

    readerboy7 Fourth Year

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    Sep 15, 2013 #6
    An O.K. story, but nothing really jumps out at me as being excellent. 3.4/5
     
  7. Dr. Strange Lulz

    Dr. Strange Lulz Denarii Host DLP Supporter

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    Sep 17, 2013 #7
    I'm going to agree with everyone else on this.

    The most glaring issue to me is that the fic simply lacks a point.

    I mean, I get that there's this poignant moment at the end when Hermione realizes that she's going to be the protector from now on. But for all of the great thematic possibilities that should have struck a cord in a scene like that (End of innocence, role reversal, etc.) It just fell flat...

    It just didn't resonate in any way.
     
  8. knothead

    knothead Groundskeeper

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    Oct 1, 2013 #8
    Decent writing but it's incomplete-- more of a vignette, actually.

    2 stars.