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Complete Delenda Est by Lord Silvere - T

Discussion in 'Almost Recommended' started by craigery9700, Nov 19, 2009.

  1. Saot

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    There's a pretty big gap between thinking that the world would be a better place without someone in it and being comfortable with choking them to death with your bare hands. He certainly didn't have any issues with killing the other Death Eaters when it wasn't quite so personal.
     
  2. KrzaQ

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    I can see Harry being a retard and agonizing about something so obvious. And it's good to finally have a chapter that focuses on the main characters.
     
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    It's sad this story had such a good start and has now become this piece of crap. 1/5
     
  4. TheWiseTomato

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    Any person involved in a war should be more than comfortable choking a person to death with their bare hands someone who just tried to do the same to their wife. Doubly so for someone who knows the sort of deeds this person has perpetrated.
     
  5. Kai Shek

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    Overreact much?

    It was a thought that passed through him for a second as he was choking the life out of someone with his bare hands; he wasn't "agonising" over anything.

    The writing seemed of lower quality than normal, but there are precious few fics that I'm even still following, and that scene was a shit excuse to drop this one.

    The lover's spat was far more annoying imo.
     
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  6. Alive and Free

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    Updated, not brilliantly, though I did find the chicken scene funny.

    The last bit with Rose and Sidra was annoying - I'm not sure if he's going for sibling rivalry or what between those two.
     
  7. KrzaQ

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    Updated. I liked it, although there was too much focus on the OCs again.
     
  8. Nauro

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    Just another chapter where Bella is the main character, Harry is a close second, but almost all the mentions of Harry have him standing guard or having conversations about Bellatrix and Leo.

    It's seriously getting on my nerves, how a potentially interesting chapter looks boring, just because Bella and Harry being there for a challenge and looking at it the way they were, there really was no challenge at all. If the characters don't care about the obstacle as it is too easy, is there a point of writing about it at all?
    It's not even an obstacle that could show us how awesome Bellatrix and Harry are, it's just something to have all the OC's in the view, and give screen time to Bellatrix.

    The saddest thing is that I enjoy the bits where Draco is learning the basics of Muggle capitalism. More than anything else in that chapter, really.
     
  9. Dark-Stallion

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    So much potential to explore in this au, and they made it more crack!fic than anything else. Ah well, I still think pre-second time jump it was one of the better Harry-goes-back-to-the-past fics.
     
  10. Russano

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    If only this story would time travel a 3rd time to the point of the last instsance of time travel and stop it from happening.

    This story used to be the only good Harry/Bella where they were both using each othre in the middle of political manueverings to Harry being Bella's bitch while she becomes domesticated and lame, and turns into the protagonist somehow.

    The OCs used to be political figures that went about stopping the rise of Voldemort in an original way. Now the OCs are a bunch of retarded teenagers who for some inexplicable reason Harry/Bella sorta confide in. I have no interest in the new OC's as well as Ron/Hermoine. They just seem so misplaced with the original tone of the first half, which consisted mostly of 18 year old + character interactions.

    Harry used to be alive and an actual protagonist. Now he's pretending to be dead, and he's doing such a good job of it, that he may as well be actually dead, because now he doesn't do anything.

    Unfortunately I'm invested in this fic ><. The fact that pretty much everyone agrees the fic went downhill after the timeskip is pretty telling.

    As for the latest chapter, I kept expecting Tom to break out or something, so that SOMETHING exciting would happen. It's like all the characters were just chillin, roastin zombies and shit.
     
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  11. Mercenary

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    The fic feels likes its spinning its wheels.

    I want to shout "DO SOMETHING ALREADY! The plot needs to move on! LETS GO ALREADY. Enough of this farting around with schoolchildren stuff."

    It worked in canon because Harry WAS a school kid.

    Here its got two adults (or one and an almost adult I forget) farting around with kids.

    WHY?

    For what forsaken reason is there for them to involve 4 kids that more than likely to run back to Dumbledore to spill everything.

    Just... WHY?
     
  12. KrzaQ

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    Updated. The fic is definitely not as awesome as before the second time jump, but the last few chapters are a fairly decent read.
     
  13. Mercenary

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    I dunno. This new chapter still feels like its just faffing about.

    GET ON WITH IT ALREADY
     
  14. Dark-Stallion

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    The "fight" scene in the RoR was absolutely terrible. It's a shared project, isn't it? Whoever wrote the other battle scenes should stick to it, because it was quite painful to read "Harry used a banisher. The pixies were banished. But they came back. The diadem grew legs. Harry called for help. Hermione used a banisher. Then she burned them."
     
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    Agreed and it used to be one of the best stories i read
    Only thing to make it beeter is rewriting it from ehen they came in future as far as i can see
     
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    Why the hell does Dumbledore want Bella to teach Dark Arts to Hermoine and the others. HE probably knows more than anyone but Voldemort, especially since this is timetravel Bella that only went to 6th year, not super psycho dark arts sidekick Bella.

    Same with the dueling, YOU HAVE A DUELING CHAMPION AS A TEACHER AT YOUR SCHOOL. In canon Dumbledore didn't do shit to help Harry learn magic, and that was when he knew it would be Harry vs Voldemort. In this story they aren't even main characters and Dumbledore is dicking around wtih them, involving them with horcruxes and teaching them magic. If Bella is gonna teach people important dark arts shit, it should definately be order members or something.


    and...wow...just...wow. The RoR...holy shit. I guess marriage really does change people, because Bella must of taken Harry's balls and masculinity away or something. He fucking lost to shit he fought in 2nd/3rd year. WTF

    and I'm pretty sure that was literally the worst defense a Horcrux has ever had, not to mention it just screams "Hi, i'm an important dark artifact come check me and my terrible defenses out".

    Does anyone else feel like some old geezer on a porch bitching about the old days when they talk about this story?
     
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  17. Kai Shek

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    I kind of agree. Instead of Harry falling in love with Bellatrix, I think the authors have; because this has become very focused on Bellatrix when it really didn't need to be.

    Bellatrix teaching Hermione is more about Dumbledore trying to get Bellatrix to trust Hermione in a way that Bellatrix has not opened up to him.

    But the RoR requirements scene was completely asinine. As soon as the Dementors appeared, I and just about every reader knew that they were boggarts, but for some reason it took Harry about 3 mins to piece the clues together.
     
  18. Nauro

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    Whenever Harry gets to do something he either fails, or is in Bellatrix disguise.

    Why am I still reading this, again?
     
  19. Shouldabeenadog

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    I don't know. Last chapter was the last straw for me. Studying>this fic for me now.

    Which is really depressing, I used to really like this.
     
  20. Pirazy

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    Congratulations Harry, you're just slightly worse than Lockheart.
     
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