Oneshot Dinner Time by Dark Syaoran - M - Oneshot

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  1. AcerbusDrake

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    Dinner Time by Dark-Syaoran - M

    Title: Dinner Time
    Author: Dark Syaoran
    Rating: M
    Pairings: Harry/Axe(If you squint)
    Published: June 27, 2006 (DLP)
    Words: 7,322

    Category: General/Horror
    Suggested DLP Category: I'd say the Psycho Section, but we don't have one. I'll have to go with Dark Arts.
    Summary: Just a simple day in the life of Harry James Potter. That is, until around seven. [One Shot]

    Link: FanFiction.Net

    Link: DLP.Net

    Link: FicWad.Com

    Link: PatronusCharm.Net

    I'm bored so I decided to add this to the library. It was already in the 'Work by Author' section but stories have a habbit of getting lost in there. So, yeah, enjoy.

    The author posts on this forum.

    Imo, well written, amusing, and original.

    Threads merged and post edited.

    -Syaoran



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  2. ip82

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    Heh... bend over and close your eyes...
     
  3. Naga's Shadow

    Naga's Shadow Seventh Year

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    You forgot to add a link. When you do I guess i'll check it out.
    Edit: It was intersting in a spooky disturbing way. Well writen though.
     
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  5. Lucas13

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    It was bloody great! Best one-shot i have read in months!
     
  6. Litha Riddle

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    I really, really liked this story.

    I'm just glad it was cottage pie rather than shepherds pie, 'cause I always joke about 'made from real shepherds'.

    I'm also hoping Dark Syaoran will write more cannibal Harry.

    Litha
     
  7. Jheph

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    *muses*
    Perhaps continuing the story and making it more than just a one-shot?
    Showing the reaction of the Order in the disappearance of Tonks and the Dursley?
    What will Harry do in the aftermath?
     
  8. AcerbusDrake

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    My apologies, forgot link.

    oh well, i meant to post the fanfiction one, but the DLP forum one is above.
     
  9. Xiph0

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    Haha, hilarious stuff man.

    Very funny read, despite being somewhat...negative in regards to Harry's mood.
     
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  10. LegalAlien

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    A really great, morbid and funny read!

    One of the best Insane!Harry fics I've ever read. I hope there will be a sequel or maybe a collection of oneshots. This also has the potential for a nice multi-chaptered fic!
     
  11. Dubrichius

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    Personally, I'd label it a humour fic, but then I'm just wierd that way. Great story, need much more out like it.
     
  12. Cthulu

    Cthulu Unintelligent Bigot

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    Oh yes, psycho definetly psycho....
    Good read, 5/5!

    Almoast gives me some... Interesting.... Ideas...
     
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    Whoa...this hasnt entered our library yet? I vote that we make a sick and psycho section just for this fic and Vash's fics.
     
  14. the-caitiff

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    No, the category title is "Deviant" it covers crazy, perverse, insane, and psychopathic Harry. But not the "fluffy bunny" crazy or insane that I write, the genuinely disturbed ones.

    5/5
     
  15. Ragon

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    I Love IT. Move it now. Make a new category the Psycho Section. We need one.
     
  16. Tinn Tam

    Tinn Tam Review Goddess Retired Staff

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    The story was very, very good in my opinion. There's just one thing... Parts of your descriptions of Harry sounded a bit awkward, especially since you're writing in first person. Such as:

    Maybe that's just me, but I found it weird that Harry would use the word "gracefully" to describe his own moves.

    Also,

    I'm going to say something stupid, but... how could he know he had an insane glint in his eyes? He can't see his own face, can he?
    Same problem here.

    I know I'm picking at details, and I'm sorry for that :). It's just that it made me raise an eyebrow while reading the fic, and I thought I'd let you know.
     
  17. huntedorange

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    Great, brilliant in fact. really good read. move it to the libary anytime. 5/5
     
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    I have an odd craving for red meat now.....

    Definitely worth reading a second time. 5/5!
     
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    freeeaky... but its good! 5/5
     
  20. Dark Syaoran

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    Tinn Tam: And that's probably why I don't write in first person all the time. It was my first go at it and I knew there would be mistakes. Thanks for pointing them out.

    I may change those scenes in the future... I dont like mistakes.