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Abandoned Growth of a Shinobi by Nuebus - M - Naruto

Discussion in 'Naruto' started by Moloch, Jul 10, 2006.

  1. Moloch

    Moloch Groundskeeper

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    Title: Growth of a Shinobi
    Author: Nuebus (me)
    Rating: M
    Pairing: n/a
    Chapters: 7
    Words: 46,209
    Summary: Uzumaki Naruto, kidnapped as a child by the Mist. Raised to be a weapon but the plot goes awry. This is his story. Rated M for Mature on future gore.
    Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3036698/1/

    Checked June 3, 2012
     
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  2. Myst

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    While interesting, doesnt seem to be much of a plot yet. You should check out my Naruto story though in my sig
     
  3. Moloch

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    Mmm... I think Fanfiction.net is down, can't connect to it.
     
  4. Myst

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    ah, just realized that. yea ff.net is down.
     
  5. LT2000

    LT2000 Heir

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    I like the premise. Never seen one where Naruto was raised in Kiri. Keep going.
     
  6. Bob

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    There was one other story that I read where was Naruto exiled to Kiri and he was raised by Zabuza, but I forget what it was called.
     
  7. Myst

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    There is another story, but it is poorly done and the authors AN just manages to piss me off. Its by a guy called "bean smoker" or something.
     
  8. zUzaque

    zUzaque Seventh Year

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    I like it so far. It's a nice prologue, but not much has happened. I think it would also be good if you included a jutsu list. Other than that, I don't see any reason not to post it on fanfiction. Lookin' forward to the next chapter.
     
  9. Moloch

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    I moved it the top like you asked.

    -Dark Syaoran
     
  10. Fuegodefuerza

    Fuegodefuerza Minister of Magic

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    While I know absolutely nothing about the Naruto universe, I found this prologue very enjoyable. I think that this could work out very well for me, because no one will be OOC and it will just be original fiction! Good work!
     
  11. Myst

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    Nuebus: I read and enjoyed your story, left my review via ff.net.
     
  12. Feoffic

    Feoffic Alchemist DLP Supporter

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    Extremely enjoyable and original. My only beef is that his first sword is similar to Zabuza's, but that is minor and does not retract from the rest of the stories potential.
     
  13. Moloch

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    Ahh, well, chances are if you dislike Zabuza, you shouldn't read that story and I won't make any spilers here so yeah...
     
  14. FantasyDuck

    FantasyDuck Second Year

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    Wonderful, I don't remember reading a Naruto fic like this. It's easy to read and I really enjoy the idea of Naruto being cook's assistant.
     
  15. Feoffic

    Feoffic Alchemist DLP Supporter

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    Never said that I dislike Zabuza, he is one of the closest things that Naruto has to a real bad ass. I just don't like that Naruto's sword is similar to his.
     
  16. Moloch

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    Ahh, before I forget, a lil problem I've been having. Well quite a few I don't understand from Naruto.

    Alright, first off; for Ninjutsu, things like SUiton: Suiryuudan no Jutsu is yelled out, but for Genjutsu, do they use elements like Katon, Suiton, Raiten etc?

    Second, for the major Naruto fans, how are one handed seals produced? Reason why I want these is because in my story, I don't want Naruto to constantly have to unsheath and resheath his sword whenever he pulls a Jutsu off.

    Third, anyone recommend a GOOD translator so I can use Japanese Jutsu names?
    Afterall, Suiton: Suiryuudan no Jutsu sounds so much better then Water ELement: Water Dragon Blast Technique.
     
  17. zUzaque

    zUzaque Seventh Year

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    I don't think Genjutsu have elements.

    I'm pretty sure that one handed seals are for bloodlines or something similar. In the series, I've only seen Haku do it, and that was for his bloodline tecnique. Kakashi looked pretty damned surprised when he did that.

    No idea for a translator.
     
  18. Verse of Darkness

    Verse of Darkness Denarii Host

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    Genjutsu aren't aligned to elements, as they are a manipulation of ones chakra. As for the jutsu yelling out thing... I dunno. For the handseals, Kakashi was pretty surprised that Haku did it so... I think it has something to do with clan/limit.
     
  19. Dark Syaoran

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    Genjutsu... they don't have elements but they do have 'types' or whatever you want to call them. I think. Like, some have 'Demon Illusion: Blah Blah' or whatever. I dunno.
     
  20. Moloch

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    Yer, that's it! I just need the uhh... types, for them.
     
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