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Complete Island of Fire by esama - T - HP/Temeraire

Discussion in 'The Alternates' started by NuitTombee, Feb 4, 2015.

  1. NuitTombee

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    Title: Island of Fire
    Author: esama
    Rating: T
    Genre: Fantasy
    Status: Complete
    Words: 17,202
    Published: January 26, 2015
    Pairing(s): N/A
    DLP Category: Almost Recommended
    Summary: The founding of a wizarding nation in a world of dragons.
    Link: AO3

    I found it on SB where it was recommended as an ISOT-ish type of story, but in this story it's just the group that get's transported afaict.

    FYI, it's written in a epistolary manner that's supposed to emulate letters/journal entries, but most seem to blend together imo. Definitely more tell than show though and I feel that might turn most people off.

    I give it a 3/5.
     
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  2. BTT

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    First of all, this is a Temeraire cross, though there's no real contact with characters from there. Having not read that series myself, the main thing is that dragons can speak and form bonds with people. The HP group arrives during GoF, at the end of the first Task.

    Anyway, this is very much what you'd expect - it's mostly about the building of the new civilization.
    It's divided in three parts, one in the above-mentioned epistolary format, but the second is a journal entry by non-HP character, and the third is just regular drama about Cho.
    The first part was, in my mind, the best.

    I'd give it a 3.5/5. Not excellent, but it's at the very least decent in a very sparse genre.
     
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    Alexeyy Seventh Year DLP Supporter

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    OP, that's more acronyms I've ever seen stringed together in a single message.
     
  4. NuitTombee

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    Three? Come on Alexeyy, there are plenty of posts you could have chosen to make that remark for but you picked a post with three?
     
  5. Pirazy

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    Didn't esama ragequit the fanfiction community and take all his stuff with him?
     
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    I didn't like the first chapter much, but second chapter onwards was pretty intriguing. It's more the story of how they build up a society from next to nothing, on the back of magic alone - this isn't a story about characters or events, but nonetheless it has something captivating to it.

    I think you have to settle into a certain kind of mood to enjoy it, as with most of Esama's works, but if you think you might enjoy reading about what it would look like if wizards truly had to survive on their own using magic, you'll definitely enjoy this.

    Very solid 4/5, but it'll be a memorable one.
     
  8. KGB

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    I liked the story so far., but the same can be said for many of esama's stories. The problem with them is that she never completes them. They build up great worlds with great promise of things to come and than poof they are abandoned. The SG:Atlantis xover comes to mind. And the last AN said that this story is on hold for now, which might as well mean dead for this author.
     
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    Like most of esama's stuff, this is a quality piece of writing, both in content and technically. It certainly requires a certain mood to read this, as it is distinctly man v. Nature, and for a fandom that loves its action scenes, this is definitely lacking. I have to admit, for a bit there I was hoping it would devolve into a Lord of the Flies esque scenario, but I'm alright with the way it turned out.

    I'll give it a 3.5-4/5
     
  10. gbbz

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    It was surprisingly similar to her previous story: Space Haven. Survival with limited resources, Harry becoming a priest/leader, negotiations with natives etc. Though this is one is more polished and streamlined. Like most of her stories, it was enjoyable, I just wish she would finish one sometime (as in, give it a satisfying conclusion, this one didn't have one).

    3/5
     
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    She posts her WIPs on her tumblr before putting the completed ones up on AO3.
     
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    There should be more ISOT-type stories with HP.

    4/5
     
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    It kept me awake 'till 4 AM this morrning, and I feel a bit groggy right now, but it was worth it.

    At first, I though it felt like HP meets Lost, but then it turned into Anno 1701 type of game or something. Gradual and realistic develpment with enough unexpected twists to not become dull and predictable.

    It really made an impression, so 5/5 from me.


    I can't really complain about that, this still feels more completed then 99% of, say, Ryuugi's stuff out there. Although it would be great if we get more. Next logical step would be a contact with the official governments (and their militaries) and with everything hinted in the second part it seems things will get more intense and flammable.:p
     
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    I enjoyed it. Canon Harry is badass and the story showed him that way nicely. The extrapolation of known spells/magic given the premise exceeds expectations.

    4/5
     
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    Just finished reading this. It was good for what it was with the diary-style entries, though I'd have preferred something more in-depth. The diary-entries are distant with little emotion in them, mostly facts of what happened. I liked the survival aspects of it, but it wore off eventually.

    There also were too few deaths. Five people did die, but at once during a storm, and then nothing. With one hundred people, more should have been dying due to accidents, like being swept out to sea and Bubble-Head Charm failure, or even suicide. It takes away a lot of suspense, not that this story had much in the first place.

    It's a good time waster, at least.

    3/5.
     
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    I liked it. The voices in the letters sounded a bit too similar, and there wasn't much conflict. The story could have really used Draco Malfoy and his band of Slytherins actively trying to sabotage stuff. Still, I devoured the entire work in one sitting, and was disappointed when it got over.

    4/5 from me.
     
  17. newageofpower

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    This was pretty good, and a fascinating kind of story. I'll be eagerly reading new entries in this series.

    3.5/5 so far.

    Er, does anyone know any other fics (preferably complete) where a bunch of HP magicals get planted in an AU?


    Edit by Minion:
    Question to be answered here: https://forums.darklordpotter.net/showthread.php?t=28506
     
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    More is being written on Esama's site, two chapters so far.
     
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    Links for those interested.

    Battle of Atlantis: 1, 2.
     
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