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Abandoned It Could Only Happen to Harry by Hoos Your Daddy - NC-17

Discussion in 'Restricted Section' started by Taure, Aug 1, 2009.

  1. scaryisntit

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    Was thinking the same thing as I read it. Don't know I gave the other one a 3... mustn't have absorbed what I was reading.

    This on the other hand, was excellent. Great writing alone makes it above 99% of adultfanfiction. Noticed a few jabs at cliche's in the genre (Parvati/Padma together, for instance). Wasn't a let down at all.

    Very interested in how Luna will turn out, given the nightmare she can be to write.
     
  2. Warlocke

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    I enjoyed the jab at people writing/saying 'Pavarti' instead of 'Parvati'. And, yes, it does remind me of Havarti cheese.

    As for Pavarti/Padma, every cliché needs poked at a bit, once it gets too prolific (even the ones people tend to like).
     
  3. ZeroTheDestroyer

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    Anyone up for some Pavarti Cheese? mmm.
     
  4. sirius009

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    this is my favorite line, disturbing, but classic.

    Fuck me,” Harry muttered, and Pomfrey arched an eyebrow at him.

    “It may come to that, Mr. Potter, if you don’t act quickly. Now go find Miss Granger. I’m afraid I must speak to the Headmaster about this.”
     
  5. AAli

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    Chapter 6 is up.
     
  6. Custer

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    Well that was....weird. A good, albeit strange chapter. I like how the author wrote Luna, and I think he has a good point in his A/N's.
     
  7. ChaosGuy

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    New chapter. It's Harry with Parvati and Parvati. It's like sex with twins... only better.
     
  8. Voice of the Nephilim

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    Pure win with the last chapter. I believe the AN to be correct, as in this is a pairing I've never seen before.
     
  9. Innomine

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    This guy really does do a terrific job.

    I bet Amer had such hope, before it was crushed. Harry/Harriet was just not to be!
     
  10. Blaise

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    I'm sorry, but when
    Parvati stuck her finger in his pooper before he climaxed
    I lulzed sooo hard.

    Awesome chapter.
     
  11. Red_Hourglass

    Red_Hourglass First Year

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    I’ve got a big surprise in store for Chapter Nine ;)
    Not really a spoiler, just a guess
    Spoiler (highlight to show):
    Winky?
     
  12. Scott

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    Winky sex? Ugh :eek: Anyway this was surprisingly good 4/5 from me. Tonks was pretty cool.
     
  13. esila

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    This overall is a good smut fic plus I got some laughs.

    The Tonks and Insane Veela Fleur porn was great but the rest weren't as good.
    Probably because it was so predictable: she does him, he does her, they do it together /and repeat/... The threesome was interesting though.

    Jab about writing/saying 'Pavarti' instead of 'Parvati' was really funny but by the fourth time it was repeated it stopped. And kind of started to annoy me.

    And Hermione is so out of character that it is a bit distracting.

    I'll give it 3/5 for the smut and will wait for next chapter.

    :D:D:D:D:D
     
  14. Stick97

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    yup. Time to go to sleep. I read this and thought it said "like a burst Clam"

    :awesome
     
  15. Nemrut

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    As a whole, the story was extremely entertaining and I laughed especially at the thought of Hermione getting off while reading Hogwarts: A History. The famous Tonks chapter was exactly what a smut scene with her should have been and the author managed to make the following chapters just as good.

    My real favorite was the Luna chapter since she had written her in a really convincing way and this time Luna was not some kind of exhibitionist nymphomaniac (which is fine too) but a more "realistic" take on Luna. It wasn't funny or hot but somehow charming if that is possible with such a story.

    As far as smut goes, this was one of the better stories.

    So all in all, 4/5, I docked a point because of the clichéd way of dropping Ron from the story for no more reason then the authors dislike for him and for the more major H/Hr pairing. It would have been more interesting (and funny) if Ron and Hermione were going out and while Ron wants to save Harry he does not necessarily want them to sleep together so he constantly knocks himself out or tries to obliviate himself in an humorous way or something. I don't know, it would have been better then "Ron decided to side with his whore of a sister and we dropped him like a used tissue".
     
  16. Marksbay

    Marksbay Died Doing the Right Thing

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    Made me smile. 5/5

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