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Oneshot Just Friends by Marks - NC17

Discussion in 'Restricted Section' started by Alraune, Aug 22, 2010.

  1. Alraune

    Alraune Seventh Year

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    Title: Just Friends
    Author: Marks
    Genre: Oneshot
    Summary: Harry and Luna have gone to Slughorn's party just as friends, nothing more. Right?
    DLP Category: Restricted Section
    Pairing: HarryLuna
    Status: Complete
    Published: November 20, 2005
    Words: 3325
    Rating: NC17
    Link:
    - http://www.aparecium.com/fics/justfriends.html
    - http://archiveofourown.org/works/108391?view_adult=true
    - http://www.thequidditchpitch.org/viewstory.php?sid=2063&ageconsent=ok&warning=5

    Another fun story by Marks. I put it in the Almost Recommended section before. But now think it deserves to be in the library. I found it to be excellent.


    Checked Nov. 12, 2012
    Added links for TheQuidditchPitch etc.
     
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  2. Ash

    Ash Moves Like Jagger DLP Supporter

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    I agree, I think it is Library worthy. It left me wanting more, and I wish that it was continued, but oh well.

    4/5 from me.
     
  3. Voice of the Nephilim

    Voice of the Nephilim Death Eater DLP Supporter

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    Nice find, possessing a quality not often found in smutty one-shots.

    4/5
     
  4. Jormungandr

    Jormungandr Prisoner

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    I liked it, although the reaction from Gin-slut at the end was a bit weak: I was hoping to see her more jealous/crushed.

    4/5.
     
  5. Korisovra

    Korisovra Headmaster

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    Crushed as in catching a tower with her face, I hope you mean.

    Nice little PWP one-shot . Passable grammar and spelling. Nothing really reaches out and grabs your attention, but decent for all that. 3.5/5
     
  6. Potterondrugs

    Potterondrugs Seventh Year

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    I diden't think a reaction in front of them was necessary she's probibley freaking out inside her head but she is to shocked to confront them, at least I imagine that's the reason.
    4/5
     
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  7. Richard

    Richard Supreme Mugwump

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    I liked it myself. 4/5 from me.
     
  8. Scrittore

    Scrittore Groundskeeper

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    I enjoyed it, 4/5.
     
  9. Captain Trips

    Captain Trips High Inquisitor

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    I also liked this, 4/5 from me.
     
  10. capo327

    capo327 Sixth Year

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    It makes me wonder how much better the books would have been if Rowling wrote this into HBP. 4/5
     
  11. ParseltonguePhoenix

    ParseltonguePhoenix Unspeakable

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    Definitely library worthy. I checked this out when it was in Almost Recc'd and loved it. 4/5
     
  12. Taure

    Taure Magical Core Enthusiast Prestige DLP Supporter

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    Loved it, great characterisation, and funny too. 5/5.
     
  13. ShadowKat

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    I liked this but I am new to this type of fan fiction so I am not the best judge.
    5/5
     
  14. Muttering Condolences

    Muttering Condolences Card Captored and buttsecksed

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    4.5/5. Throw it into the Restricted Section nao, I say..
     
  15. Portus

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    Pretty much this. I liked it if for no other reason than the author didn't try to make Luna a Seer, or just "acting strange" or any number of other half-assed tactics. She's just Luna, odd as hell and unapologetic about it - merely true to the canon-Luna. Aside from her potty mouth, of course.

    My vote is 3.5/5, rounded up to 4/5 for the above Luna-related reasons. Oh, and Harry gets laid and Ginny likely knows it, which are both kinda pluses in my book, I'm not ashamed to admit.
     
  16. neopyro

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    Well written HP/LL smut? I'm clearly hallucinating. Still, 5/5 while it lasts.
     
  17. iLost

    iLost Minister of Magic

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    I disagree. Seemed strange a girl with no friends would be that experienced with sex. The 'fuck' didn't work for me, either. Besides that, it was written well and the sex was refreshingly realistic.

    Is it a good little piece garner some enjoyment from? Yes. Deserved to be in the high echelons of fanfiction? Nah. I give it a 3/5 for the Recycle Bin.
     
  18. Garden

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    Cool fic. I've read few of his other works and they're all high-quality.
    However, a one-shot needs to be a bit... revolutionary or original to get a 5/5 from me, like Tinn Tam's Reach the Open Space, IP82's Last Roar of the Dinosaurs, Joe's one-shot that's in the WBA, or Silen's Countdown.

    This gets 4/5 for pulling off something I've always wanted to have seen done, a Luna/Harry HPB fic that's in character for both of them, and with well-written smut as an extra.

    Smut~Very good.
    Style~Very nice, little to no grammatical errors
    Plot~Realistic(for a smut fic).
     
  19. Amerision

    Amerision Galactic Sheep Emperor DLP Supporter

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    I don't know why, but I found this pretty damn funny.

    Those lines made me titter away stupidly. Perhaps because they're so naively dumb?

    Anyways, I concur with TheGardenofPotter (Where did you come from?):

    3/5
     
  20. Dark Syaoran

    Dark Syaoran Golden Patronus Admin

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    Pretty much this. I remember reading this years ago and could never figure out just where I had seen it. No wonder I could never find it again.
     
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