Title: Le Stiffulement du Serpent
Author: slightly disturbed
Status: Complete/Oneshot
Rating: NC17
Genre: Erotica [Should be Comedy]
Pairing: Lily/Bellatrix
Recommended Section: Restricted Section

Summary: God, they shouldn't have been doing this. Not here, not anywhere. But it felt so good. (Bellatrix/Lily) F/F,Alt,FemSlash,Rim

http://hp.adultfanfiction.net/story.php?no=544176162

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Me and Surarrin found this hilarious. Honestly. Just imagine Bellatrix doing that to her in the middle of the hallway. An excerpt:

Hehe.


Checked: July 30, 2012

 

5/5 for pure S&P

 

ROFL 5/5

Wonder if Bellatrix will convey this to Harry.

 

Good one.

A few things could be improved but it was funny.

4/5

 

Lol, believe it or not I think I came across this a few months back...

I seem to remember it being Ok,

3/5

 

thats... Different

3

 

Erm. Gross. Very, very well written, but kinda gross >_>

5/5...I can't dock it just 'cause I was a little squicked by it. It was masterfully written.

 

5/5 for portraying what it wanted to show with little to no errors, be they imagery or grammatical/spelling errors.

Anyway, I was bored, and did my usual(regardless of the site) of looking at the author's other listed stories, seeing as how, as others have stated, despite certain aspects of the content being questionable, the quality of the writing was at a relatively high standard for the genre, and well... I just won't bring myself to sample the author's other writings because, except for this story, one other Bellatrix/Narcissa, one Lucius/Hermione, and one unnamed-Solo, of his thirty-three Harry Potter stories(all of which are PWP... then again it -is- AFF), twenty-nine of them are Male/Male... and possible outstanding quality aside, I just can't bring myself to read that:?. Oh well, maybe they are written as well as this one, maybe not... though it was amusing to note of the 13 reviewers, except for one "Arty"(which could go either way really), all the rest were female, though I suppose that is largely irrelevant.

...man I wish this wasn't my first post, but that's just the way it turned out. Posting on a whim does that to you, even if one mostly observed until just recently making an account. Anyway, glad to be here, some good story links, some bad(Yeah, yeah, not the right place to say "Hello", but bleh =p)

::EDIT::
Just noticed the date as I was about to 'Submit'... then I remembered that library topics are allowed to be revived, that, and this was the first topic on the second page anyway... Well, if people do read this, and get inspiration on getting a proper 'flow' to PWP... or P-with-an-eensy-weensy-bit-of-plot, like this one had, then more power to them, as this story did flow excellently, in regards to it's focus.

 

I think I have been posting far to much recently, I should be writing my own fic, getting the guts to post the first chapter here, (I have only re-read it 20 time or so, I am not nervous about the ripping I am going to get about my spelling) and most importantly doing Uni work. However I am review so thus I review.


This story was good, had little to no spelling/grammar errors that I would noticed and the idea was good for a smut one-shot. I would love a sequel where Bellatrix brags to Harry about making his mum scream but we cant have everything

3.9/5 would be four if it wasn't a plotless smut story that doesn't involve Bellatrix bragging about it to Harry.

 

Who doesn't love a good lesbian rimjob?

4/5