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WIP Naruto: Great Clan Days by Kenchi618 - M - Naruto

Discussion in 'Naruto' started by Cas, Sep 28, 2014.

  1. Cas

    Cas Fifth Year

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    Title: Naruto: Great Clan Days
    Author: Kenchi618
    Rating: M
    Genre: Adventure
    Chapters: 16
    Words: 226,822
    Updated: Dec 22, 2014
    Published: May 18, 2013

    Status: WIP
    Fandom: Naruto
    Pairings: No pairings, as of now
    Summary: Senju Hashirama's dream to unify all of the warring clans of his country under one village remained just that; a dream. Generations later, the ninja world still consists of pure clan affiliation. Enacting peace through understanding has fallen to the side. A catalyst is needed for any kind of change to occur, and it is all found in a little boy... for better or for worse. AU.
    Link: Link

    Looked all over and can't see this anywhere, so apologies if I missed it.

    I know lots of Kenchi618's work has been recc'd before, most of it falling short of library quality, but I'm really liking this one up to now.

    Currently got 15 chapters and 215,000 words.

    Basically, Hashirama and Madara never created the first hidden village and as such, no others were formed. The clans live together, and fight the other clans for money, land and other reasons.

    Minato still lives, and is epic, but not ridiculously over powered. He is trying to unite all the clans under one banner, and create the first hidden village and bring peace to the world, but this is hard when you have the clans like Uchiha, Senju, Hyuga that all hate each other and are constantly warring.
    Also has Pein/Nagato as the leader of Uzumaki clan.

    I would rate this as an easy 4/5 for now. Hopefully with more chapters and action that will go up to 5.



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  2. knight504

    knight504 The Chosen One

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    Unlike Better Left Unsaid, the only one of Kenchi618's work that I'd consider library worth, this ones managed to hook me from the star. The premise itself - the clan never united into hidden villages - is both unique and believable and really mixes things up. Seeing familiar characters thrown into different scenarios because of their new backstories is one of the story's more enjoyable qualities, as is Naruto travelling the world instead of being based in Konoha.

    There's probably a couple hang-ups I'm forgetting since it's been a while since I combed through, but overall I've had a positive reaction.

    4/5
     
  3. Eilyfe

    Eilyfe Headmaster

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    Holy shit, that guy's a machine. I just looked at his profile... how the fuck does one person churn out that many words? According to his profile he registered in 2010 and has since then published roughly 5.4 million words.

    That's dedication if nothing else. Kind of enviable, really.
     
  4. Probellum

    Probellum Death Eater

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    At least no single one of his fics have actually exceeded more than a million words. Like that one Code Geass/Bleach fic that ended up at around 1.8 Million words by the time it was completed.

    On topic, I've only read the first few chapters. They'd just met anko last i read. From that, it seemed pretty solid and an interesting idea.

    4/5, as long as the quallity doesn't drop.
     
  5. VanRopen

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    Been following this - a few minor quibbles, which I find common across Kenchi's stuff, but the premise alone makes it worth it. What knight504 said about seeing characters in new circumstances is spot on, and I'm hoping we see more glimpses from the PoV of the clans. Tsunade's reaction to how the situation has been developing should be fun.

    Pretty solid 4/5.
     
  6. Synchro

    Synchro High Inquisitor DLP Supporter

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    Yeah, this is a good story. One thing I like about it is the fact that he is not afraid to kill off characters in his story if it advances the plot. And he doesn't ignore the consequences of people dying either. I also love what he did with the Sarutobi clan.

    There are some minor grammatical errors here and there, but overall library worthy, I think. 4/5.
     
  7. Nemrut

    Nemrut The Black Mage Prestige

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    Really like this as well, fun story to read and I wasn't sure I would like tsundere Kyuubi as he turned out to be in canon but he/it was actually quite endearing in this story.

    "Now swim bitch" is probably the funniest and best thing I've read the kyuubi say.

    And agree on the rest, this new world is quite good although I do think that the Uchiha got the shaft a bit, always losing so many people in battle. Unless it becomes a plot point, I do not think they have all that many fighters left any more but I get the feeling that they will always have roughly the same number as to make things interesting.

    It's something in general that didn't sit right with me in this warring clans era, that they should probably avoid seeking conflict as much as they could, seeing how every clan would have a serious manpower problem. They would need a generation or two between battles to replenish fallen people and train them. Even if every clan had battle ready members when they were ten, it still would take that long to gain a battle ready member but so far, a lot of clans had members fall like flies, Uchiha most of all. (unless you count the wiped out clans.)

    Otherwise, quite interesting story. 4/5
     
  8. CheddarTrek

    CheddarTrek Set Phasers to Melt Moderator DLP Supporter

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    Not bad. It's an enjoyable read primarily for the originality, but it does a decent job of character and plot progression as well.

    I'd rate it at 4/5 overall. It's well worth the library and worth the time to read, though it's not as engaging as the best of the best in this fandom.
     
  9. Genghiz Khan

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    It reads like a TV series/sitcom. It also gives me a very Avatar-like vibe. As in, that's the way I'd imagine Avatar would read had it been a novel. It's plainly... American. Not that that's a bad thing, honestly, it just... is. It doesn't read at all like I'd expect Naruto to read.

    I'd give it a 3.5, rounded off to 4. It's interesting, but not library-worthy. In a weird way, it reads like a ripoff.
     
  10. invinoveri

    invinoveri Third Year

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    My biggest problem with Kenchi is his dialogue. And he thinks he's funny, but he can't do comedy.
     
  11. Halt

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    One of the best Naruto fics I've read and certainly the most original. It could be better though, especially the dialogue. I always end up skimming parts of it, but the other elements of the story more than make up for it.

    A solid 4/5 from me.
     
  12. sonny_yalin

    sonny_yalin Third Year

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    I don't know, to me, if you're skimming over sections, there's a problem in the execution of the story. I definitely agree that it's an interesting concept to read about, though.

    I made it a decent way through Great Clan Days, but eventually dropped it because I was skim reading the updates. It wasn't bad, I guess, but I felt it could have been executed better. At the very least, with the way Kenchi churns out words, it has a good chance of actually being completed, which is nice.
     
  13. Ferdiad

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    Well he usually seems to pump out 500k words and then start a new project.
     
  14. crimson sun06

    crimson sun06 Unspeakable

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    This got updated again. This was a fun chapter filled with action and a rather fresh take on Orochimaru where he isn't an antagonist... yet. It had some cliches but those were to be expected... they weren't dwelt on at least. We get to see Naruto's first fight post time-skip so overall a decent update.