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Abandoned Not Just A Kiss by SSC - K+

Discussion in 'General Fics' started by Lord Ravenclaw, Aug 14, 2006.

  1. Lord Ravenclaw

    Lord Ravenclaw DLP Overlord Admin DLP Supporter

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    Title: Not Just A Kiss
    Author: SSC
    Rating: K+
    Genre: Supernatural/General
    DLP Category: Dark Arts or General
    Pairing: None so far
    Chapters: 6
    Words: 12,709
    Updated: January 20, 2008
    Published: July 22, 2006
    Status: Abandoned

    Summary: An ‘accident’ concerning a Dementor changes Harry’s life. After OotP, non HBP-compliant.
    Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3059372/1/

    Not bad so far, the author got the idea from Madness Personified's Darkness Unleashed. Written much better and has thus far been rather realistic. Some of you will complain about when he breaks down crying, but be reasonable there, wouldn't you if you'd just been turned into your worst fear?



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  2. Dark Syaoran

    Dark Syaoran No. 4 Admin

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    Sounds mighty interesting. I'm going to read this now.

    Edit: And interesting it was. I will be watching this story closely.
     
  3. Zevrillion

    Zevrillion Founder Retired Staff

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    Only 6k words so far, but rather interesting. 4/5
     
  4. Shezza

    Shezza Renegade 4 Life DLP Supporter

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    There's only three chapters, but it seems to be off to a good start. It's much better than the other one...what-it's-name, Darkness something, and I think it's going to be much more interesting.

    4/5
     
  5. KANE

    KANE Groundskeeper

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    Very good start and much more original than many stories I've read. It's too early to rate acurately, IMO, but I'd give it a 5/5 so far.

    Recommended
     
  6. DarthBill

    DarthBill The Chosen One

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    I liked it. Hope he gets control soon. Rampid dementor chaos!
     
  7. Archer

    Archer Fourth Year DLP Supporter

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    Interesting, good start. I liked it: 5/5 so far...

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  8. DemonDream

    DemonDream Professor

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    This is a very original idea. Not many stories have Harry become a dementor, even fewer are written well. I think this is the first one that I have read in which he has trouble learning to use the Dementor abilities. Recommended.
     
  9. Xantam

    Xantam Denarii Host

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    I liked this too. I think Snape's level of assholity was perfect.

    Recommended 4.5/5
     
  10. Kai Shek

    Kai Shek Supreme Mugwump

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    I liked it, and feel that this is a good show of a cannon Harry. My only concern is the rating of the story. Something as dark as being a Dementer, I figured would warant at least a T rating, O well.

    4/5
     
  11. Lightning89

    Lightning89 First Year

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    I did love it. Snape is as bad or even worse than in the books. Fantastic.

    But Harry was good too... yes, he cried but now he's beginning to do something and to learn. I hope, we have a cool new Potter when he's again in Hogwarts.

    4.5/5
     
  12. Kyp's Avenger

    Kyp's Avenger Fourth Year

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    I've been reading this one. It's awesome and original. The amount of angst for the situation is just right.

    4.5/5
     
  13. Brooklynight

    Brooklynight Seventh Year

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    It's short and still in the begining parts of the story but I like what I see so far. I've only encountered one Dementor!Harry thats worth reading. The descirpition of the effects of the patronus charm on the affected was a bit lacking in my opinion. But since there is no precident for the affect its still a job well done. I think that the angst was a tad much but its wasn't sufficating. I'm definetly going to be following this one.

    4/5
     
  14. Omega

    Omega Squib

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    WARNING, WARNIG! I read her profile and she likes Snape and in her favourites I found a few SLASH fics. Other than those warning signals, good fic
    4/5
     
  15. DarthBill

    DarthBill The Chosen One

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    Good news then, it looks like Harry just killed Snape. Maybe not, but I can hope.
     
  16. Jeram

    Jeram Elder of Zion ~ Prestige ~ DLP Supporter

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    Well... it's actually not bad to start. Although I am a tad worried about those potential "sl--h" tendencies, so far Harry seems pretty interesting, and his powers could certainly become quite kickass. However, if there's any "finding peace with Snape" going on, I'll be quite angry. So far, well-written, but not fantastic - a solid 3/5.

    -J
     
  17. Niffler Lord

    Niffler Lord Headmaster

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    So far its been good. The crying scene did annoy me but hey it fit into the story pretty well. The effects of the Patronous is a little lacking in description. But overall I like it so far.

    However the slash warning makes me a little cautious.

    4/5
     
  18. Vecna

    Vecna Fourth Year

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    And how would he kill snape with these new powers? Seems like a set up for Harry to make out with Snape. Oh well; lets hope not.
     
  19. Lord Ravenclaw

    Lord Ravenclaw DLP Overlord Admin DLP Supporter

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    Quit being so negative before the story even begins. It might be slash, might not. We'll just have to see.
     
  20. Mercenary

    Mercenary Snake Eater

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    I just read it and it's not too bad. I like it. The slash issue isnt too big of a concern for me if it is in the background however if it becomes a large area of focus or part of the storyline, I will most likely drop it.