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Oneshot Reprieve by Zennith - T

Discussion in 'General Fics' started by enembee, Feb 8, 2011.

  1. Grinning Lizard

    Grinning Lizard Supreme Mugwump

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    Nice one. Not my sort of fic, usually, but this was really nicely put together.

    Any passing inspiration drawn from Inception, by chance?

    4.5/5 and well done.
     
  2. Stalin's Pipe Organs

    Stalin's Pipe Organs Auror

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    Yea pretty much.

    The fic had a "so what" vibe to it.
     
  3. Portus

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    I think I already voted, but let me say this is 4.5-5 out of five for me. Yes, there were a few grammar/tense missteps, just as there were in each of the contest submissions, and in each story I tried to skate past them.

    I liked the writing and the setting, and was about 99% sure of "who" and "when" about two paragraphs in or so. I say that to then say that I sort of agree with several posters about the ending. I can see some not liking the way you ended it, and for me, I would've been fine had you ended earlier, such as when Harry is running from the waves or just as he returns to his body. I knew "when" he was headed, so the remainder was unnecessary for me, as I would assume that he would remember the island and thus would be strengthened because of it.

    Still, it was a nice touch that he smiled, and in all honesty, I see it as the point of your own resolution, and a nice segue back into canon.

    Again, great job, 5/5 as that means "Excellent".
     
  4. Mock Moniker

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    I'm not the one you were asking, but I thought it was pretty well foreshadowed what was going on.

    I really loved your fic. It ended exactly where you know it had to. Making it go on longer would have ruined what it was.

    5/5 (but I always feel weird rating one shots)
     
  5. Zennith

    Zennith Pebble Wrestler ~ Prestige ~

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    Huh, was just reading back and realized I missed your question - I actually did draw a bit from inception, not in any literal way, but as I was writing, and as the concept was becoming more and more fleshed out I kept just kinda thinking of inception - again, I wouldn't term this at all as a crossover, but yeah. Inception did come into mind.