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WIP Retribution- By prone2dementia

Discussion in 'Trash Bin' started by happilyeverafter, Mar 22, 2010.

2.25/5, 8 votes
  1. happilyeverafter

    happilyeverafter Sixth Year

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    Mar 22, 2010 #1
    Title: Retribution
    Author: prone2dementia
    Rating: T
    Genre: Humour/Horror
    DLP Category: Dark
    Pairing: Unknown as yet
    Status: Work In Progress
    Summary: ...One flew east, one flew west, one flew over the cuckoo’s nest... The Boy-Who-Lived-to-Murder-the-Dursleys takes on Hogwarts. Dear Old Dumbles has made a dire mistake. Sequel to Retaliate, can be read as standalone.
    Link: Here

    I fond this after reading the oneshot Retaliate and I think that this is much better. The writing is cliched, I admit that, but it was an enjoyable read, if only to go into the recycle bin.
     
  2. SmileOfTheKill

    SmileOfTheKill Magical Amber

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    Mar 22, 2010 #2
    A direct copy from what I said before. This series is bad.
     
  3. Andro

    Andro Master of Death DLP Supporter

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    Mar 22, 2010 #3
    I liked the first one, but that was a serious piece of writing. This is useless satire that completely clashes in tone.

    The writer tries so hard to make Harry subtly dangerous and eerie I feel guilty for giving it a 2/5.
     
    Last edited: Mar 22, 2010
  4. KrzaQ

    KrzaQ Denarii Host DLP Supporter

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    Mar 22, 2010 #4
    I think that these two threads should be combined.

    3.5/5
     
  5. pdo91

    pdo91 Professor DLP Supporter

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    Mar 23, 2010 #5
    Nah, SmileOfTheKill has it spot on. It's just not good, though I will agree that the first was much better than the second. The author tried way too hard with Retribution.

    They still get 1/5.