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Dead Link Shadowed Wanderings by Dwitbal - T

Discussion in 'Trash Bin' started by Xiph0, Oct 10, 2006.

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  1. Xiph0

    Xiph0 Yoda Admin

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    Oct 10, 2006 #1
    Title: Shadowed Wanderings

    Author: Dwitbal
    Rating: T (Ficwad doesn't have one, but I'd give it a T at max. So far.)
     Genre: Action/Adventure
    Pairing: None so far.
    Status: Work in Progress

    Summary: Dark!Harry, Post Voldemort & HBP compliant. This begins several years after Voldemort's defeat with Harry being both feared and respected as the reclusive Man Who Vanquished. However, the Dark is making another bid at gaining power.

    Link: Ficwad

    DLP Category: Dark Arts


    Just read the first chapter. It's somewhat run-of-the-mill, but otherwise excellent - lots of broken bones.

    -Reading the second chapter as I post this-

    /Spacing added so it's easier to check at a glance.
    //Syao found it. -cough-



    Checked by Minion, Nov. 24, 2012
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  2. Wisdom's Mountain

    Wisdom's Mountain Sixth Year

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    Oct 10, 2006 #2
    I thought this story was well written, but I was confused for a bit in the second chapter. While I was reading the first chapter, I thought "Sam Wolf" was Harry but he isn't.

    My one gripe about this story the comparison of the Ministry and Auror offices to Muggle buisnesses. I just don't see Aurors as the kind of people who sit in cubicles doing paperwork half the time.
     
  3. Moeed

    Moeed Third Year

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    Oct 10, 2006 #3
    Really liked it, hungry for an update!
     
  4. Xiph0

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    Huh? Harry is Sam Wolf.
     
  5. Wisdom's Mountain

    Wisdom's Mountain Sixth Year

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    Woa, I think I need to reread the story. In the second chapter Harry mentioned "Sam Wolf" as a person, so unless he refers to himself in the third person, they're two different people. Yeah, I think I'm going to read it a couple more times.

    Taken from the second chapter. Why would Harry have to hear about his actions or refer to himself as "this Sam Wolf"?
     
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  6. ip82

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    Yeah, in the first chapter (which repeats itself twice) we're under impression that Sam is Harry. In the 2nd chapter, we see that it's not true (unless Wolf is Harry's second personality).

    Great story so far, but we have yet to see what this is all about.
     
  7. Jeram

    Jeram Elder of Zion ~ Prestige ~ DLP Supporter

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    Hmm... an interesting start, I think. Some nice violence, although it needs a bit o' proofreading. The ambiguity, if intentional, is not appreciated, but the story seems to be progressing nicely. Right now, I'll give it a:
    3/5

    -J
     
  8. Dwitty

    Dwitty Seventh Year DLP Supporter

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    A 3/5, that's that much appreciated. Thanks to Jeram for putting this up here.
     
  9. Dark Syaoran

    Dark Syaoran No. 4 Admin

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    Jeram? Lol.

    It was actually Xiph0 that put it up, and I who actually found it and suggested Xiph0 to read it.

    Anyway, I like it. I thought Harry was 'Sam Wolf' at first, but the second chapter seems to kill that idea. Either that, or Harry's a psycho who speaks about himself in third person. Duel personalities?

    Anyway, good so far.
     
  10. Dwitty

    Dwitty Seventh Year DLP Supporter

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    Oct 11, 2006 #10
    Really, oops. My mistake. Thanks to you and Xiph0 then.

    Nah, Harry's perfectly sane. Sam isn't though, but that's kind of obvious.
     
  11. Dwitty

    Dwitty Seventh Year DLP Supporter

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    Just in case it hasn't been noted I have updated.

    I hope chapter 3 helps to answer IP's question about what the fic in general is about. If not then clearly I'm not trying hard enough.

    Also, just to clarify Harry is not Sam Wolf. :) Good, no more confusion.

    I'm also hoping that any ambiguity that snuck in, most of which was unintentional, doesn’t show up again.

    And that's about all I've got to say. :)
     
  12. Mordecai

    Mordecai Drunken Scotsman –§ Prestigious §– DLP Supporter

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    Oct 17, 2006 #12
    Liked the new chapter. Was rather interesting methinks.

    4/5 overall
     
  13. bornagainpenguin

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    Feb 25, 2008 #13
    Gone. Author's profile page show no stories. There are three chapters in the DLP.net archives, otherwise considering this abandoned.

    --bornagainpenguin
     
  14. Dwitty

    Dwitty Seventh Year DLP Supporter

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    Heh, you don't fucking say. I deleted this piece of shit easily more than a year ago.
     
  15. Randeemy

    Randeemy Headmaster DLP Supporter

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    Chill out! As DLP archiver he is letting us know that this story has gone, and will not be appearing in future archive releases
     
  16. World

    World Oberstgruppenführer DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    If you don't tell us, someone else has to.
     
  17. Korisovra

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    No need to be a dick about it.
     
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