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WIP Tainted Ideals by Stormedge - T - Fate/Stay Night

Discussion in 'Fate/Stay Night' started by Dark Syaoran, Oct 4, 2011.

  1. Dark Syaoran

    Dark Syaoran Golden Patronus Admin

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    Title: Tainted Ideals
    Author: Stormedge
    Rating: T
    Fandom: Fate/Stay Night
    Pairing: None yet.
    Chapters: 14
    Words: 94,590
    Updated: November 24, 2012
    Published: August 28, 2011
    Status: Work in Progress

    Summary: In the fire that ravaged Fuyuki city, it was not Emiya Kiritsugu who saved the life of a young Shirou, but the tainted grail itself.

    Link: FF.Net

    Quite an original idea with a set of new, exciting characters. I look forward to seeing where this story leads us in the future.

    Shirou's Servant is Jack the Ripper.


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  2. Karnath

    Karnath First Year

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    Is anyone else shipping Shirou/Assassin in this?
     
  3. iLost

    iLost Minister of Magic

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    Read the first four chapter. This is really interesting. Will read the rest tomorrow, but so far tentative 5/5. Loving how the Servants were mixed up and how the Master's seemed changed personality-wise. Well, except for Rin.

    EDIT:

    Oh how do I love this fic? I really can't count the ways.

    That aside, it's an easy 5/5, really. Engaging and fun to read. The fight scenes weren't too bad, nothing mind-blowing. Author has a tendency to describe every motion Shirou makes, bringing down those parts of the fight. On the other hand, they do a decent job with Lancer versus Shirou's Servant.

    Of which, really liking the dichotomy there.

    Makes you realize just how psychotic she is. Can't wait for Shirou's reaction to that side of her. Especially, her jealous side.

    Characterization isn't the strongest, but it is pretty decent. Shirou is refreshingly not like canon, and his skills are very nice. The poisonous plants he utilizes make it all the better.

    There is some hints about how things might or might not play-out, considering how he was revived. How that will end has me very curious.

    Some small quibbles would be the tone. There is a lot of light-hearted, mixed in with dark, tense moments. Hell, the last snippet with Castor is a prime example of this. It gets a little jarring, and at times I think it comprises the characterization. I mean, I laugh, but it still irks me. I wish the author would cut back a little on the light-heartedness, or at least not make it so blatant at times.

    As I said, a quibble to a very enjoyable and fresh take on the Grail War.
     
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  4. Tehlaziboi

    Tehlaziboi Ninja Meido

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    Author has become my favorite and this story is the only one I go and check every now and then for updates.
     
  5. NuitTombee

    NuitTombee Dark Lord

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    I like what I've read so far, and I hope to read more soon. 4/5
     
  6. Karnath

    Karnath First Year

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    Chapter 8 is up
     
  7. iLost

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    A surprising turn in Assassin's mindset there. Definitely making her think and playing up her own desire at the same time. I was pretty impressed.

    Plus, I rather enjoyed the tone through this. Not overly light-hearted as some in the past.

    Besides that most of it was just filler, though necessary in the scene with Rin.
     
  8. DrSarcasm

    DrSarcasm Unspeakable

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    I must admit, I quite enjoy the little ironic moments of reflection that Shirou has over what kind of idiot would [insert canon!Shirou quality/action here].
     
  9. tragicmat1

    tragicmat1 Death Eater

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    A 5/5 from me. It's one of the few stories I bother keeping up with updates right now.
     
  10. Tehlaziboi

    Tehlaziboi Ninja Meido

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    Assassin's channeling some of Ilya's "Pure innocence while power-drill!raping someone's head". Or at least, that's the vibe I got when reading her scene at the end.
     
  11. yak

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    Assassin's jealousy is cute. 5/5.

     
  12. Antivash

    Antivash Until we meet again... DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    Awesome story. Assassin is :awesome. I'm really looking forward to the conflict with Assassin v Rin or Ilya.

    I'd agree with iLost though. Cut back on some of the light-heartedness. And god damned stop with the Final Fantasy. :facepalm
     
  13. iLost

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    Okay, not a big Final Fantasy player, but what are you referencing in the story? Obviously something I missed...
     
  14. Antivash

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    Gilgamesh playing Final Fantasy 7 and Shirou constantly spoiling.

    Shirou: LOL Derpiroth kills Herpith! :awesome
    Gilgamesh: fuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu

    :| Shits annoying, so.
     
  15. iLost

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    ...:facepalm.

    How the fuck did I forget those references? I read the damn story not too long ago.

    I think the first time was funny, but after that lost appeal. I did grin at the MMO name and reference.
     
  16. DrSarcasm

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    New chapter up.
     
  17. iLost

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    What did you think of it?

    Personally, I liked it. At first I thought the battle between Castor and Saber would be epic, but hell, she just steam-rolled them! HA!

    Assassin might soon get her chance with Rin, so looking forward to see if there are any reveals in store there.
     
  18. Antivash

    Antivash Until we meet again... DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    I think it was disappoint. Obviously, Saber is going to steamroll the shit out of Caster, but it was still... disappointing.

    Caster's master ... Feh. Little better than throw away filth.

    This is what I'm looking forward to the most. Very few will find it surprising, but I'm kind of hoping when Assassin shanks Rin, Shirou's not at all concerned and keeps truckin on as he is.

    Ilya/Shirou's being related as well. Gil and Saber clashing, and Kotomine's role in things coming out would not go unappreciated either.
     
  19. Hymn of Ragnarok

    Hymn of Ragnarok Squib

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    knight504 The Chosen One

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    Well, Caster's master is completely and utterly fucked. I wonder if Shirou will start experimenting with the 'decay' instead of just 'growth'.

    I can't help but think of Oboro from the Psyren manga.