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Oneshot The Bird Tongue by Marina Gray - M

Discussion in 'Dark Arts' started by Swimdraconian, Jan 24, 2007.

4/5, 14 votes
  1. Swimdraconian

    Swimdraconian Denarii Host DLP Supporter

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    Jan 24, 2007 #1
    Title: The Bird Tongue
    Author: Marina Gray
    Rating: M
    Genre: Drama/Tragedy
    DLP Category: Dark Arts
    Words: 2,726
    Published: August 12, 2006
    Status: Complete, Oneshot
    Summary: Old Mrs. Cole has since retired from her post as matron of the orphanage where she worked in London...but one day, she receives a caller, someone looking to dredge up a buried past...[One Shot]

    Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3100511/1/

    Tom Riddle centric and a surprisingly good read. Grammar and spelling is pretty good, if not excellent, and it makes an interesting insight into a younger Tom Riddle's mind.


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  2. The Duke

    The Duke Seventh Year

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    Jan 24, 2007 #2
    That was very sweet....
     
  3. ulkser

    ulkser Groundskeeper

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    Jan 24, 2007 #3
    a nice way to spend time.
     
  4. Aekiel

    Aekiel Angle of Mispeling ~ Prestige ~ DLP Supporter

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    Jan 24, 2007 #4
    I liked how it ended, gave an interesting insight into Tom's psyche. At heart he's still a child, trying to find out how the world works. On top of that he's still a demented murderer but he'll never truly be human...
     
  5. huntedorange

    huntedorange Seventh Year

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    Jan 24, 2007 #5
    I thought was really good, it kept me engaged at any rate and that is becoming a hard thing to do these days.
     
  6. k_writer

    k_writer Groundskeeper

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    Jan 24, 2007 #6
    I loved this.

    The characterization of Tom/Voldemort was pretty solid, and Purdita's sad devotion to him was great. Mrs Cole's confused old mind was not confusing at all; the writer did a good job of describing the shifts in time and place seemlessly. I want to read more stuff by this author. 5/5
     
  7. haroon_angel

    haroon_angel Fourth Year

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    Jan 24, 2007 #7
    very nice,i loved it
     
  8. Brooklynight

    Brooklynight Seventh Year

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    Jan 24, 2007 #8
    It was good. The author does do a fairly good job describing Tom psyche, not perfect but closer then most authors get. Overall the description and scenery were well done. 4/5
     
  9. SushiZ

    SushiZ Auror

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    Jan 25, 2007 #9
    That was pretty good, I would give it 4/5. A great one-shot, nice find.
     
  10. Alexx

    Alexx Card Captored and buttsecksed

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    Nov 6, 2013 #10
    Good fic captures Voldemort well. Only Voldemort would kill someone who loves him, take out her heart and put a Horcrux in it. 4/5
     
  11. Infidel

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    Nov 9, 2013 #11
    That was quite a necro, but, I think worth it.

    I enjoyed the story, especially since it gave a glimpse of the Dark Lord before, when he was still a young man and not the one whose name would not pass the lips of most people. However, I don't think Lord Voldemort would ever have put part of his soul in anything as fragile, literally and figuratively, as a young girls broken heart.