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Oneshot The shortest Severitus story ever by IP82 - K - ONESHOT!

Discussion in 'Humor' started by ip82, Nov 19, 2005.

  1. ip82

    ip82 Prisoner

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    Title: The shortest Severitus story ever
    Author: IP82
    Rating: K
    Genre: Parody/Humor
    Words: 801
    Published: November 19, 2005

    Status: ONESHOT
    Summary: ONESHOT, PostOotP. Parody on Severitus and Independent!Harry stories. VERY short, practically joke format.
    Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2666565/1/

    Just a silly little joke/story I've just written in a burst of inspiration. I'm not even sure if this is the right format to post it. I could have simply put the whole thing in one post on this forum. Ah, well.


    Checked by Minion, February 9, 2013
     
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  2. Rahkesh Asmodaeus

    Rahkesh Asmodaeus THUNDAH Bawd Admin DLP Supporter

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    lol, great. Yeah, don't worry, that was the right format.
     
  3. Lord Osiris

    Lord Osiris Auror

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    Hehehe good stuff! liked it heaps.
     
  4. Necrule Paen

    Necrule Paen DLP Elite DLP Supporter

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    That is rather clever of you.
     
  5. Zevrillion

    Zevrillion Founder Retired Staff

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    Like it.
     
  6. saugart

    saugart Guest

    I thought the story was clever and enjoyed it.

    However, I was thrown off by some spelling and grammar errors. IP82, if you were to fix those (I pointed them out in the review I just posted for the story) then I would be able to wholeheartedly recommend this story. I'll rate it 3.5/5 without the fixes and 5/5 with them.
     
  7. ip82

    ip82 Prisoner

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    Thanks for the nitpick. I fixed the errors in my DOC (had some of them fixed before), but I try not to make a habit of updating stories if I don't have anything new to post. I'll replace the story with the fixed version next time I update something.
     
  8. nonjon

    nonjon Alumni Retired Staff

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    You know it only takes a couple minutes to login in ff.net, export the chapter, edit the little changes and then use "Replace Chapter" to swap out the old with the new.

    The fic doesn't appear as updated, nor do any notices go out... I'm almost certain. I know I do it all the time when I spot a typo in my fics.
     
  9. Scrittore

    Scrittore Groundskeeper

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    A short but hilarious one-shot that knocks all of them Gringotts vault and Severitus fics. I do believe it is certainly worthy of the Library's humor section. The only problem is it's length because I would of loved to see what happened to Harry more or the reaction after everyone finds out what happened. So all in all, definitely recommended and a 4/5.
     
  10. Memory King

    Memory King Order Member DLP Supporter

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    My absolute favourite Severitus fic. Wasn't trying to be epic, that's exactly why it succeeds so well in my mind.

    5/5
     
  11. sincostan

    sincostan High Inquisitor

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    Quite funny merge of Severitus and Independent Harry, two cliched genres. Little disappointing it's so short and the end is a blurb from Dumbledore's point of view. 4/5.
     
  12. Andro

    Andro Master of Death DLP Supporter

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    Yeah, that was pretty epic. 5/5.
     
  13. raesive

    raesive First Year

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    Good times. I would think that DD's reaction would have been more than just distracted upon realizing that Harry just bit it, but overall a great little story.

    I am hoping that with your grammar fixes you also corrected the spelling of "Lily". That threw me a bit both times.

    5/5 for me!
     
  14. Photon

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    It would be great and amusing oneshot worth 5/5, but for Lilly it gets 4/5 from me.
     
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