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Oneshot Time Bomb by Christina - K - Firefly/Dresden

Discussion in 'Dresden Files' started by yojorocks, Jun 19, 2010.

4.1999998092651/5, 5 votes
  1. yojorocks

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    Jun 19, 2010 #1
    Title: Time Bomb
    Author: Christina K
    Rating: K+
    Genre: Sci-Fi/Fantasy
    DLP Category: Dresden Files
    Words: 9,992
    Published: September 7, 2008
    Status: Complete
    Summary: When an unbalanced girl named River, one with a penchant for dangling off high places, suddenly 'poofs' into existence in a bar with no explanation, Harry Dresden, wizard-for-hire, has a new job. Just not one he ever wanted. Crossover with Dresden Files.

    Link: Time Bomb

    I've been searching a bit for quality Dresden writing, and literally stumbled upon this. It's short, only 10k words, but fairly accurately captures River and the Dresden cast. Technically and canonically sound, if a little on the short side, it reads pacing wise a great deal like one of God's short stories. Post Dead Beat/Post Serenity, it manages to stay intriguing enough to captivate you- but as a warning, it's not Epic Win like LitteChicago's work.

    Very solid 4.5/5, head and shoulders above the average crap based on the TV shows, but not quiet up to the level of the Broken series.

    Keep in mind that this was published in 9/08- the second to last line made me think it was much newer, and gives it a breath of new life with a twist. Damn, nice prediction.


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    Jun 22, 2010 #2
    Pretty damn cool. It raises a few good questions too. What would happen if Mab and Dresden had a kid? and such.
     
  3. JWH

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    Jun 22, 2010 #3
    Agreed, a very good one-shot, deserves a 4.5/5. I'll round up to 5 because it compares favourably with other Dresden stuff, Broken series apart.

    Hah, I hadn't noticed that it was written so long ago. Pretty awesome foreseeing, author.
     
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    Jun 22, 2010 #4
    While the idea behind this one was pretty good, and the prediction bit was actually very nice, I'm gonna have to say the execution drags it down.

    The writing was mostly solid, but also a bit boring. There's not much tone to speak of, and the execution is a bit disjointed. I don't want my ten minutes back or anything, but I'm pretty underwhelmed with the story. The overall experience was average, imo. 3/5
     
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    Jun 22, 2010 #5
    As PP said above, the idea is good. However I think the rest of it is pretty average.

    The execution is... bland, characterization is... well, there aren't any flaws per se, but there aren't any real zingy bits that make you know that this is Harry Dresden. Same goes for River.

    The telling could of been a lot more simple, seemed a bit convoluted.

    Overall, this is average in every way, except for the initial idea. It's definitely not terrible, but it's not good either. Solid 3/5.