Title: Too Late
Author: whatareyouevensaying
Rating: NC 17
Genre: Action/Adventure, Erotic
Pairing: Harry/Narcissa
Published: 2006/08/10
Updated: 2007/08/12
Words: 4171
Status: One Shot, possible more chapters
Summaryost HBP
Harry confronts Severus Snape after Dumbledore's death. Chaos ensues. NO SLASH!

This is his entry in the PottersPlace3 yahoo group's monthly scene writing contest of July 2006.

Harry finds and confronts Snape after Dumbledore's murder.
Harry is seduced by an older woman.


Link: http://ficwad.com/story/23009


Checked: July 30, 2012

Checked by Dark Syaoran, June 6, 2014
Updated old Ficwad link.

 

Not bad. The interaction is nice but Narcissa's attitude is a little confusing. It would be good if this has more chapters.

Thought I would like it more if the author wrote more on Stolen Magic.

Still give it a 4.5/5

 

It was pretty good. I didn't like how Snape was dealt with, but that may just be my personal love for that character. 4/5

 

I thought it was ok, nothing spectacular, nothing terrible. 3/5.

 

It was good, nothing absolutely amazing but good. It has my seal of approval for the NC-17 section, for what my seal of approval is worth.

 

I liked it. Nothing special, but good enough. 3/5

 

Yep, I'd read this a while back, and I remembered liking it, and still do . 4/5, but only because it was a one-shot and the duel was both poorly described and unimaginative.

 

Yes, I found that Snape was dealt with a bit too easily, but it was still a fairly well-written fic. I agree with the 4/5.

 

I'm gonna give it a 5/5. The duel wasn't the point of the story...Harry's personality was. And that ruthlessness was shown brilliantly. The smut was good as well, so it gets my 5/5.

 

Wasn't too bad. To disagree with Yarrgh! I thought the smut was a bit basic and from Narcissa's opinions of Lucius and Draco I was a bit confused if she was happy or angry at Malfoy's death.

 

Hmm would have prefered the ferret being forced to watch his mother pleasure his worst enemy, before being brutally murdered of course.

 

That would defeat the purpose of the title mate.

 

Not bad, I like the idea of the whole Harry alone killing everyone though, I will give it a 4/5.

 

thought this was pretty good, very decent read. 4/5

 

Oops...didn't realize this thread existed.

I posted this in the Mature Work by Author section a couple of minutes ago, complete with a slightly tweaked version of what will hopefully become the prologue to a longer story. Granted, much of what made this piece work was the fact it was a one-shot, but I hope to go back and fix it up with the help of all of your feedback. The main part that I still have yet to rework is the fight with Snape. While I love the idea of Harry being able to take him out so casually, it's not going to fit well with his development in the story. Also, it wasn't remotely realistic (I use the term loosely) in the first place.

Thanks for reading.

Link to other topic: http://forums.darklordpotter.net/showthread.php?t=12066

 

The smut was a 5/5, storyline not as great. 3.5/5
Total raring: 4.3/5

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