Remember, Harry is in pissed-off-angsty-teenager mode at the moment, thinking things out is not part of his profile for the time being. Hopefully this will change soon, Dark Harry is all well and good as long as he is not Stupid Harry as well.

 

The main probably with dark Harry is you basically have to start from what others have done in the spell department. Canon dark wizards always used powerful dark spells that they learned in secret or the unforgivables which cant be hard to learn if you know what your doing.

 

I liked this presentation of the "many shades of gray" proposal every dark fic uses. The scene with Daphne showing him the "right" use of imperio was cliche, and the dark was too flawless while the light was too flawed, but the slide into darkness was tactfully done.

 

Did anyone read the new chapter?
Disappointing.
The first chapter might have been 3.5 but the rest I give it 2.5/5.
This Harry is just too dumb. I am not sure whether the author is writing this Harry’s imbecility intentionally or not. It was laughable the amount of time the retard took to realize it was Voldemort.
The Dumbledore scene in the 5th chapter was useless, Harry might as well stomped his foot, turned around and left. The Author could have used a much better way to make him angry to bring on the Crucio incident. This Harry need to find a dark ritual that increases ones IQ.

Can’t see how this fic reminded Marie of Potter’s Resistance. This fic reminded me of one that I read only the first ten chapters, at one time called “Harry Potter and the Curse of VArdian”, seen now the story’s complete.

 

Chapter 6 just got posted; it isn't bad, but not great either. This is the review I left:

 

I'll have to agree with you. To be honest, I like this fic, but Harry seems too naive. Reminds me of Ron with a darker twist.

Then, there's also what another user pointed out about the flawless dark against the flawed light. Why can't people make the Dark magic what it is, evil and dark? That's one f the big problems of Dark!Harry fiction; authors seem afaraid of making Harry go evil and thus turn the dark magic into "banned-for-no-reason-at-all-magic", although I do have to admit that the "turning" in this fic is at least quite believable.

As for "The Curse of V'ardian", I couldn't stand it either. It was well written, yes, but the whole "Snape's daughter" thing pulled me out of it.

I'd give Traitorous a 3'5/5

 

Am I wrong to actually really likeing this story? I see the cliches and how Harry could easily become "pussy dependent" on Daphne but all the same I also see some pretty decent potential for it as well; I see chapter six as the begining of his transition(hopefully).

 

Nah, we all have our dirty little secrets.

Anyway, yeah I like this story too. Probably because of the potential for Harry/Daphne goodness. I don't really mind the cliches and hack writing if the story can draw me in.

I give the 1st chapter 3.9/5, the rest 3/5, and hope Harry doesn't become totally pussy-whipped.

 

I'm dissapointed, but still like this fic. Daphne is great, she really makes this fic good. I feel Harry is still a pussy, and dependant, but he is in cannon as well, and at least there is potential for him to think for himself later on in the fic.

To be honest, this fic has a lot of potential, and I can see it easily going downhill, but I can still hold out hope.

 

I mostly don't like DE!harry cause he working for someone...but this one I like.

 

Dumbledore recognizing Dark Magic from the Ministry Guide? It is like Dumbledore learning to defend himself from the Ministry leaflet.

 

It looks like Flamata is a member of DLP.

http://forums.darklordpotter.net/member.php?u=1532

 

I think this story is good, but it is far from perfect and has a couple of stupid moments.
For example, near the beginning of chapter 7 Neville manages to hurt Daphne right after Harry says that Daphne is a better fighter then Neville, followed by Neville managing to take Harry's wand, even though Harry has been spending the past couple of months learning dark spells.
If you can put up with incidents like this the story I think is worth it. 4/5

 

I have a big soft spot for DE!Harry so I enjoyed this story, though I do agree with most of the criticism posted here. The concept of "grey magic" has been slightly overused in fanfiction but I didn't mind it here. Also, I found Dumbledore's mentality of "the ends justify the means as long as it's for the greater good" to be rather bland and not very convincing. In my mind Dumbledore didn't become the most powerful and respected wizard just on raw power alone. He must have possessed a mind that realizes there is not just the two extremes of good and evil as is suggested in this story.

Chapter 7 was relatively pleasing with my only complaint being Daphne successfully memory charming Dumbledore. A school girl besting a 150 year old master of mind arts? Somehow it doesn't seem that likely.

Overall it's a pretty good read and one of the better DE!Harry stories around.

4/5

 

Overall okay. I've never liked the ONLY gray magic thing. I mean Avada Kedavra is an unblockable instant death curse. What's grey about that? as The Mysterious Nobody said just let evil be evil. After all when you try to explain all the faults in something you only end up with something horrible. I.e. Mary-Sue's.

Never the less, it is solidly written, and with the rarity of good Dark!Harry stories it is a welcome read.

4/5

 

Just finished reading the story, well whats been posting of it so far anyways...

interesting read, although i would have like a different approach as to why Harry actually turned dark, i find that 99% of the Dark!harry story's i read these days are Dumbledore being manipulative.

Unfortunately the last chapter is the first bit of proper interaction with voldemort, im looking forward to reading more or the story AFTER harrys training. The first chapter of the story tells me this could be very interesting.

I hope that harry doesnt become dependent on Daphne, it seems hes went form believing everything dumbledore says to believeing every word that comes out of Daphne's mouth.

But overall so far its a good read! and i hope the next chapter is out soon!

Luke

 

Its a very good story so far, i like the non cliches where Harry is betrayed by everyone. I liked the beginning too, added some mystery as to how Harry turned that way.

4/5

 

Overall liked the story, my mind is ridden with 36 hours of non-stop thinking (with a few naps in-between) and I printed it then read it during AP US History...it was a very fun read and certainly worth the time I took from learning about our civil war.

Haven't read a Dark! Harry story (or any fiction) in a while and the way that Harry is lead towards the darkness by everything around him was very nice.

The Atrum Effect was also a cool idea, certainly gives an explanation for his new dark tendencies.

4/5 Because I'm sure that there is something wrong with it, just can't remember...screw it, rating's go by what you think of the fic at the time... 5/5