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WIP Undying Happiness by Zelkats - PG13 - Original Comic

Discussion in 'Original Fiction' started by Dark Minion, Feb 25, 2015.

  1. Dark Minion

    Dark Minion Bright Henchman Moderator DLP Supporter

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    Title: Undying Happiness
    Author: Zelkats
    Genre: Slice of Life, horror, humor, romance
    Rating: PG13 I’d say
    Fandom: Original Fiction / Original Webcomic
    Published: 2015 (though the first part was drawn in 2012)
    Status: Work in Progress
    Summary: Summer break's here and Naomi's dying to leave her house to meet an online friend for the first time. She travels far from the city to where he lives, but upon realizing who or what he is, she might just decide to turn back and run the hell home.

    Link: http://tapastic.com/episode/88152

    I won’t say anything concerning the content, but it is genuinely funny. The story is still rather short, though chapter 1 was originally intended to be a oneshot. What’s posted of chapter 2 so far could stand as a kind of epilogue for the first chapter.

    The artwork is made of black and white drawings with some greyscale background. It’s nice, solid, with an adequate amount of detail, where needed.


    I like the idea behind it and the artwork as well. It's definitely worth 4/5 stars.
     
    Last edited: Feb 25, 2015
  2. Darth Disaster

    Darth Disaster The Waking Sith Prestige DLP Supporter

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    Minion showed this to me earlier in IRC. Despite the strange twist, it was certainly enjoyable. The artwork was clean and clear, the characters not just cookie-cutter cliches and there were more than a few laughs.

    4/5, definitely worthy of a read. I'll be following it as it updates.
     
  3. Nemrut

    Nemrut The Black Mage Prestige

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    It's short and fun, especially when he apologizes, but it's really short and it doesn't seem to be something that can be stretched all that much.

    Works well enough as short pieces. Good art and entertaining premise.

    4/5
     
  4. Newcomb

    Newcomb Headmaster

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    It was super weird and I laughed. I didn't really connect with it, but it was intriguing. 3.5/5, up to 4.
     
  5. potterheadcharles

    potterheadcharles Third Year

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    Entertainment. Entertainment. Entertainment.

    5/5. Love it. Hope she updates soon. There should be some movie with this concept.
     
  6. Dark Minion

    Dark Minion Bright Henchman Moderator DLP Supporter

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    The second chapter (13 years later, married with 1 1/2 kids) is complete.
    The author has announced the third chapter, covering the time Naomi and Keisuke moved to the city.

    I still rate it 4/5. The second chapter wasn't as great as the first, but still had some really good scenes.
     
  7. ihateseatbelts

    ihateseatbelts Seventh Year

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    That was pretty darn funny. Weird, but funny.

    The visual gags took it one step further - my subconscious image of "Do the Right Thing" has changed, possibly for good. 4/5
     
  8. Republic

    Republic The Snow Queen Prestige DLP Supporter

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    lulz/5

    It has a huge 'wat' factor. Good art. Some great humor and strong panels. 4/5 (srs)