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Abandoned Welcome to Hogwarts 1949 by Ohyeah100 - T

Discussion in 'The Alternates' started by ip82, Mar 4, 2006.

  1. Skeletaure

    Skeletaure Magical Core Enthusiast ~ Prestige ~ DLP Supporter

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    Whether he does nor not is up for grabs though. I'm putting my money on Harry somehow figuring out a way to get out of it.

    Or maybe it's not the Dark Mark but a precursor to the Dark Mark that he's talking about.
     
  2. carvell

    carvell Professor DLP Supporter

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    Toward's the end of chapter 26 Potter and Riddle mention pager's which were not around in 1949 I left a review on this and this is the reply I got,

    .......
    haha. you are the third person to mention the pagers. I didn't even think of
    it while I was writing it. I did some research and aha lucky me!They were
    patented in the year 1949 exactly.
    .......
     
  3. Marsupial

    Marsupial Minister of Magic DLP Supporter

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    Christ what a fuckwit.

    After 2 minutes of searching, I give you:
    I can find earlier patents for a 'pager,' but they all seem to have something to do with a physical (paper) page, although I'm not sure exactly what.

    Edit: Got an earlier one - US Patent 3657715 04/13/1970 - , but still nowhere near early enough.

    Edit 2, from Wikipedia:
     
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  4. Blazing Chime

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    I'm sure she was just joking. She doesn't seem that *insert adjective* even though her grammar needs an improvement.
     
  5. sgtoutlaw

    sgtoutlaw Second Year

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    Loved this story a lot, I like how Harry is starting to just get pulled away by Tom's charisma like everyone else.

    That and how Harry is only keeping up by his knowledge of Tom's future self; as that goes away, Harry is desperately trying to figure out Tom and everything he is hiding. In trying to live with him, he just keeps going deeper into the darkness.
     
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  6. It’s an interesting idea. People have said this before, so I’m not sure why I’m repeating it, but you have a few grammatical errors you should revise. Though I like the story, and I hope you can get another chapter posted soon.
     
  7. Andro

    Andro Master of Death DLP Supporter

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    I give you two days, tops.

    Edit: Alright Elvin, you win.
     
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  8. Mage

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    Less

    (filler)
     
  9. BioPlague

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    Just type - no changing the color except to highlight things or present them. Otherwise the gestapo will rape you ~|~.
     
  10. Torak

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    Tada Its been updated;)
     
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    Vira Third Year ~ Prestige ~

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    It finally updated. :D

    New chapter introduced the rough draft of the dark mark, which I find really interesting.

    Though, I found that, the last part of the chapter where Harry and Tom are talking through the dark mark to be a bit confusing. But that might be because I kept thinking at first that someone was actually talking to him, not mind-talking.

    Also, I have a strange feeling, no proof, that Draco is somehow going to be the one that pulls Harry back into the present. No clue how though.
     
  12. Tasoli

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    It is a good story I like this smart dark Harry but he is barely equal the tom.

    I didn't like the draco's pov. except that story is very good.
    4.5/5
     
  13. Torak

    Torak Death Eater

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    It's been update

    Not half bad with some Inner Circle drama.
     
  14. IBG

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    Not quite. But maybe soon!
     
  16. Nicovi

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    Overall a good fic, but I think it would be stuck in Almost Recommended if it was published this year.

    It is enjoyable, and I think harry's action and his interaction with everyone is well presented and consistent. Some parts or rather dull though.

    And as people have mentioned, the grammar and spelling could be a tad better.

    I have issues with how the story simultaneously presents actions in the past and the future.
    Have everything Harry changed happened the moment he was sent back, and he is just 'gone' because he will reappear in his time later?
    Or does he gradually change things? It does seem to be the case, because of how the year seem to change at the same rate for both the past and the present. And if Draco could see Harry nothing suggests he couldn't change things if he used the map in a different way.
    But then again it could all be a buildup for a plot twist.

    3.5/5
     
  17. 2D4rk4you

    2D4rk4you Squib

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    Good fic. I really enjoyed Harry's slow descent into the dark.

    (USER WAS WARNED FOR THIS SHITPOST)
     
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