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Complete You're a Wizard, Potter by Amsuhl - K+

Discussion in 'Humor' started by deathinapinkboa, Jun 17, 2007.

  1. I read as far as it was written a while ago and it was hilarious, I really hope the author continues writing it if they aren't already.
     
  2. deathinapinkboa

    deathinapinkboa Minister of Magic

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    It's been updated. The lates chapter really isn't that wonderful, though there something vaguely entertaining with Draco and Ron.
     
  3. Dark Minion

    Dark Minion Bright Henchman Moderator DLP Supporter

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    All in all the last chapter is ok. It's not the best part of the story, but just because of the Ron/Draco moment I'd grant it 4/5 for this chapter and 4.5/5 for the whole story.
     
  4. Amsuhl

    Amsuhl Muggle

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    Well.
    That's surprising.
    I'd give it a 3.5/5 at most. It's rather rushed, the plot is poorly developed, and what was supposed to be a moderately short fic with a maximum of five chapters or so has turned into a monster.
    I have no idea what to do with it. Advice?
    And... does my name sound masculine? Because I'm female.
     
  5. [KS18]Raziel44

    [KS18]Raziel44 Card Captored and buttsecksed

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    this is a really funny story so 5/5 from me
     
  6. Andro

    Andro Master of Death DLP Supporter

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    Nice to see you joined up!

    Amsuhl sounds decidedly masculine, I'm afraid to say

    I agree with your self-analysis, but it's good humor nevertheless. I don't actually have any skill with humor, but you seemed to have it completely under control. This guy is very funny though: http://www.cracked.com/contributors/david-wong

    Also, your ending to Storchlei? Best ending anyone could have asked for.
     
  7. Garret P.I.

    Garret P.I. Backtraced

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    Having read all the new chapters for this fic I have to say... I need to re-rate it.

    I give it a 2.5 out of 5.

    It's just not very good. Things got predictable, trite, and more or less unfunny.

    In retrospect, I should have rated it a 3 or a 2.5 previously as well. The Grammar is okay, but the sheer lack problems I saw in the fic made it unworthy of the rating I gave it originally.
     
  8. Amsuhl

    Amsuhl Muggle

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    I still do have a long way to go, and humor isn't really my strong suit... well, I don't really have a strong suit.
    Thanks, Andromalius, I had fun writing it. It is now deleting, and I may now rest in peace.
    To you, too, Garret P.I., for your frank assessment of my fic.
     
  9. Hadoren

    Hadoren High Inquisitor

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    I'd advise you to keep the fic because there are people (like me) who like it. The quality of fanfiction is so low these days, so it's nice to get a decent fic.

    I remember this guy called Dauphin who deleted one of my favorite fics: Let History Repeat Itself. That was disappointing.
     
  10. Andro

    Andro Master of Death DLP Supporter

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    Is it in the Recycle Bin yahoo group?
     
  11. Knoq

    Knoq Temporarily Banhammered

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    Dead links abound. :(
     
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    Holy shit! You must be a level 80 necromancer or something, cos that was a bloody amazing necro :)
     
  13. Knoq

    Knoq Temporarily Banhammered

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    I like the premise of the fic and want to read it and Google fucked up on me. :eek:
     
  14. headbanger

    headbanger Seventh Year

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    Nice mindless bandwagoning there, mate.

    This is the library section, where constructive necros are encouraged, last time I checked.
     
  15. Dark Minion

    Dark Minion Bright Henchman Moderator DLP Supporter

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    Knoq's message that the link is dead doesn't count as a necropost in the library.


    And, yeah, the archive I linked in the first post has been moved a while ago and now is password protected. I'll look if I find the file and update the first post tonight.


    EDIT: I uploaded the text as attachment to the first post of this thread.
     
    Last edited: Sep 17, 2014