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  1. Meneldur
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    WIP Alexandra Quick and the Thorn Circle by Inverarity - K+

    Just a correction - You refer to Inverarity as 'her', when he is male. A interesting review, all in all. I don't agree with it all, but I will agree that the plot wasn't a really good hook. Then again, I don't think it was supposed to be - what drew me in was the idea of Wizarding America. As for Alexandra being an unlikeable protagonist - to each his own. I didn't find her likeable at first, but she was at least tolerable, and got better as she grew up. In any case, I preferred her...
    Post by: Meneldur, May 28, 2012 in forum: The Alternates
  2. Meneldur
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    WIP Alexandra Quick and the Thorn Circle by Inverarity - K+

    Properly punished? I need to gather my thoughts a bit more, but if this was a normal situation, I'm pretty sure she (or her parents) could sue them over endangering her. I think this was simply a foregone conclusion that had to happen at some point. But in any case, I think the school is at much to blame as Alexandra, if not more so; nor does this preclude Alexandra from getting a magical education elsewhere, or continuing to practice magic. Also, I'm betting she'll be getting a wand from...
    Post by: Meneldur, May 11, 2012 in forum: The Alternates
  3. Meneldur
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    WIP Alexandra Quick and the Thorn Circle by Inverarity - K+

    True, although I will note that it seems to have resolved the question of Alexandra's relationship with Claudia, advanced her relationship with Livia, and offered us very interesting hooks for next year.
    Post by: Meneldur, Apr 30, 2012 in forum: The Alternates
  4. Meneldur
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    WIP Alexandra Quick and the Thorn Circle by Inverarity - K+

    Based on all that we've seen until now, I'd say it's pretty obvious it'll be some sort of decisive fight against John (or his minions), which will at least reveal his motivation.
    Post by: Meneldur, Apr 28, 2012 in forum: The Alternates
  5. Meneldur
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    WIP Alexandra Quick and the Thorn Circle by Inverarity - K+

    Alexandra is like her father. We all know Abraham seems to be a bit of a Ladies' Man. 4 wives, unknown other affairs... etc. I know it's not really connected, but that was my first association. Also, it's not like Alexandra is a cheating slut, just circumstances and teenage hormones, but I still can't help but disapprove of a girl who at the age of 14/15 has kissed 3 boys (or been kissed and then led them on), wants to have sex with one of them, and never bothered to break up with...
    Post by: Meneldur, Apr 16, 2012 in forum: The Alternates
  6. Meneldur
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    WIP Alexandra Quick and the Thorn Circle by Inverarity - K+

    Wordhammer makes very good points. Personally, I don't think you can compare Hecate to Bella, since A) we don't know of any actual crimes she committed, and B) Abraham is most definitely not Voldemort. But in the general sense, yes. Hecate may be the kind of utterly ruthless, completely devoted witch who would do anything Abraham asked her. So it may be a bad idea to bring her back... but I will point out that she seems to have had no desire to kill her kin like Bella did (or is assumed ot...
    Post by: Meneldur, Apr 7, 2012 in forum: The Alternates
  7. Meneldur
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    WIP Alexandra Quick and the Thorn Circle by Inverarity - K+

    Yes, it was an excellent chapter. The fight scene was quite good. Johnny is simply amazing, fighting and aiding Alexandra as much as he could. He's the only male so far I would consider as a pairing for Alexandra so far. The conversation with Henry was also very good. I liked how he managed not to actually apologize but still acknowledge the help she did bring. And I got the feeling that Alexandra herself knew she had gotten in over her head and had learned her lesson.
    Post by: Meneldur, Mar 30, 2012 in forum: The Alternates
  8. Meneldur
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    WIP Alexandra Quick and the Thorn Circle by Inverarity - K+

    Indeed. I think this was made very clear. She thinks so herself "Alexandra knew what she was doing wasn't smart." Well, it is as old as the Bible... Ravens brought food to the Prophet Elijah when he was hiding. The comparison to Elijah (even if it slim) makes it awesome by association. Heck, when I started the story I was sure Alexandra would be awesome just because her name is the feminine version of Alexander, and the first famous one was Alexander of Macedon. Although the fact that she...
    Post by: Meneldur, Mar 23, 2012 in forum: The Alternates
  9. Meneldur
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    WIP Alexandra Quick and the Thorn Circle by Inverarity - K+

    Good points. I actually like Abraham, Diana, Lilith, and Livia, but I attribute that to the fact that I usually like dick characters if they've got good enough reasons for being dicks and are awesome while being such. And the four mentioned above are like that. Henry's a dick, but he's just not awesome enough and without good enough reasons for being so (so a 14-year old dropped you on the head. You're an auror, what did you expect from a duel, sparks?). In fact, exactly because it's all...
    Post by: Meneldur, Mar 19, 2012 in forum: The Alternates
  10. Meneldur
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    WIP Alexandra Quick and the Thorn Circle by Inverarity - K+

    Wait, what? You like Henry? The guy's a total asshole! Not only does he completely ignore whatever warnings Alexandra gives him, he acts like a major dick, and is so obviously racist, it's scary. And it's not like it's solely to scare Alexandra into being good - it's just what he does. "As if Hopi witches are any better"/"This is the boy who went to the white man's school and brought the white man's evil back to us", and so forth. It's even worse when you consider that apparently, he knew...
    Post by: Meneldur, Mar 19, 2012 in forum: The Alternates
  11. Meneldur
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    WIP Alexandra Quick and the Thorn Circle by Inverarity - K+

    I think the Charlie thing is not so much doggerel verse as it is her magic developing and her connection with her familiar deepening. We've seen what Abraham and Hagar can do - I assume Alexandra's powers are developing to a similar point. I think the part with John was that Quimley saw owls coming out of his house, and the driver who hit Bonnie saw owls which obscured his vision, causing him to hit Bonnie. In her anger and general lack of emotional control, Alexandra believes the owls were...
    Post by: Meneldur, Mar 12, 2012 in forum: The Alternates
  12. Meneldur
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    WIP Alexandra Quick and the Thorn Circle by Inverarity - K+

    Yeah, my question exactly. Especially since just last chapter, it said: "She wished she had worn the Seven-League Boots. Sweetmaple Avenue was only a couple of miles from the hospital, but that seemed like a very long way to walk in the freezing cold". Then again, in general Alexandra's judgement shouldn't be trusted when she's emotional, so maybe she just forgot in her anger and stuff?
    Post by: Meneldur, Mar 12, 2012 in forum: The Alternates
  13. Meneldur
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    WIP Alexandra Quick and the Thorn Circle by Inverarity - K+

    Laugh? Funny? It's horrible! Not only is her mother effectively a vegetable (and may have tried to eat her), her entire family, from any side you look at it, is horribly dysfunctional. On to other matters. This chapter has quite a few answers, but even more new questions arise. These are my primary ones: Who was Claudia's mother? What was really behind Desiree's death? WTF happened with Hecate?! Diana's version is slightly more believable, because why would WJD agents hunting an...
    Post by: Meneldur, Mar 9, 2012 in forum: The Alternates
  14. Meneldur
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    WIP Alexandra Quick and the Thorn Circle by Inverarity - K+

    Oh, are we planting Epileptic Trees now? You should have said: Abraham transformed himself into a woman and impregnated himself. Alexandra is the daughter of both Diana and Lilith through an obscure magical ritual which utilizes the power of twins. Abraham impregnated the spirit of the Earth Mother (she told him about the Lands Below), who gave birth to Alexandra. The Stars Above are the sworn enemies of the Earth Mother, so they're trying to do in Alexandra.
    Post by: Meneldur, Mar 6, 2012 in forum: The Alternates
  15. Meneldur
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    WIP Alexandra Quick and the Thorn Circle by Inverarity - K+

    It definitely makes a lot of sense, especially (as ray243 mentioned) considering the short story 'Don' Like Peas'. I have to wonder if Thalia knew... looking back on it, the off-screen conversation they had in the third book would be really interesting to read. Was it just an explanation on how Claudia should handle the Wizarding world, or might it have been an explanation on how to actually be a proper mother to Alexandra?
    Post by: Meneldur, Mar 6, 2012 in forum: The Alternates
  16. Meneldur
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    WIP Alexandra Quick and the Thorn Circle by Inverarity - K+

    You know, considering the old theory that Diana and Lilith were Abraham's daughters from the first marriage, that's ironically fitting. I suppose this new incarnation of the theory fits as much as the previous one did. Although again, I have to disagree with you. Maybe Claudia had the more important role, but if so, it was her natural starting point. Until now, Claudia's actions seem to have had little to no effect on Alexandra, whereas Diana is practically Alexandra's nemesis, and seems to...
    Post by: Meneldur, Mar 5, 2012 in forum: The Alternates
  17. Meneldur
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    WIP Alexandra Quick and the Thorn Circle by Inverarity - K+

    Possibly. But considering Claudia's role as Alexandra's mother, any revelation about her would have a large impact on the story. Frankly, I don't like it much either, especially since we already have way too many unsolved mysteries just for this book, and I can't help but fear the ending chapters will be packed with revelation upon revelation which will get tedious and boring. Still, I'm trying to reserve judgement, because a) we still don't know enough, and b) I don't think it really makes...
    Post by: Meneldur, Mar 5, 2012 in forum: The Alternates
  18. Meneldur
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    WIP Alexandra Quick and the Thorn Circle by Inverarity - K+

    Huh. Well, that's different, I guess. I was under the impression you weren't that sure it was about the fact itself ("Or maybe it is about the fact itself as well" is not a definite statement in any way). In any case, I still can't agree with you, since your reasoning seemed to be that Claudia was a main character, and I really don't see that. She's no more main character than Thalia, Archie, Brian, Bonnie or any other daughter of Abraham Thorn. In fact, (besides Max, who's dead) Julia is...
    Post by: Meneldur, Mar 5, 2012 in forum: The Alternates
  19. Meneldur
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    WIP Alexandra Quick and the Thorn Circle by Inverarity - K+

    I see where you're coming from Sesc, but I can't find myself agreeing completely. I agree about your first point, that it'll always seem like retconning. But you're judging too early to decide there's a problem with the fact itself. I've gone back a bit and re-read, and already I've seen stuff that makes a lot more sense with this explanation. And honestly - we don't know enough. I've offered a few ideas regarding why Claudia hid as Alexandra's mother, but until we're actually told why this...
    Post by: Meneldur, Mar 5, 2012 in forum: The Alternates
  20. Meneldur
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    WIP Alexandra Quick and the Thorn Circle by Inverarity - K+

    Alright, serious shit now: This has gone to hell. If something we all took for granted was wrong, how can any of our speculations, which may have no basis in fact, be correct? We're missing far too much information to truly learn anything. But nevertheless, I will make note of those facts we have, and a few extrapolations we can make: Livia was at Alexandra's birth. That means she knew her real mother. Since Claudia is a Pruett, she may have moved to Larkin Mills because of the...
    Post by: Meneldur, Mar 5, 2012 in forum: The Alternates
  21. Meneldur
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    WIP Alexandra Quick and the Thorn Circle by Inverarity - K+

    I'm with Cheddar on this. Although I blame logic failure as well. After the way Brian tore into her (especially considering their interaction previously), she must have felt at least somewhat guilty, and we know she has a tendency to blame herself over everything. Since she thinks she's at fault (Bonnie wouldn't have gone out if she hadn't, the owls were probably for her, etc.) she probably felt she was the one who had to fix it - alone, as always. What I'm worried about is that this...
    Post by: Meneldur, Mar 5, 2012 in forum: The Alternates
  22. Meneldur
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    WIP Alexandra Quick and the Thorn Circle by Inverarity - K+

    Unholy shit. Seriously? On the one hand, it explains so much. On the other, it calls into doubt everything we thought until now. Oh, and Cheddar, no offense, but I've always wanted to use this line, and I couldn't when I guessed right, but now, finally I can say it: "Don't gloat, child. It's a sign of poor upbringing." Which, actually, you know, explains a lot about Alexandra, especially in light of this revelation.
    Post by: Meneldur, Mar 5, 2012 in forum: The Alternates
  23. Meneldur
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    WIP Alexandra Quick and the Thorn Circle by Inverarity - K+

    So what, you think it's a complete coincidence Abraham married a Pruett, they had a storehouse/shop in Larkin Mills, and Claudia moved there after she hooked up with Abraham? There's obviously some connection here, and Martha seemed to be under the impression Abraham and the Dark Convention had some agreement over the place. I don't doubt a large part of the Dark Convention simply involves the Black Market trade - after all, dark items are illegal to trade, even if nobody's using them. So...
    Post by: Meneldur, Feb 27, 2012 in forum: The Alternates
  24. Meneldur
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    WIP Alexandra Quick and the Thorn Circle by Inverarity - K+

    Well, it may be an unreliable narrator, but: "She'd been wrong. Her wand wasn't here." So I guess it depends on whether we trust Alex's new Witch Sight or not. Alexandra was awesome in this chapter. Great bluffing skills. And it was all partly true, which always helps. I found the way she titled herself to be interesting - "eighth child of Abraham Thorn/seventh daughter/fate is written in the Stars Above" - because I do think these are all significant in some way. But without more on it, I...
    Post by: Meneldur, Feb 27, 2012 in forum: The Alternates
  25. Meneldur
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    WIP Alexandra Quick and the Thorn Circle by Inverarity - K+

    Mrs. Middle is no match for Alexandra. Not surprised at Alex's attitude. And I like how devious she is - the project is just another excuse to find out more about John. Forgiving Brian (or coming close to it) was a good thing. I feel that so far, this book has been (and that is as it should be) a lot less about 'someone trying to kill Alexandra' and a lot more about Alexandra accepting herself and the fact that she needs friends. And forgiving others is often key to forgiving...
    Post by: Meneldur, Feb 20, 2012 in forum: The Alternates
  26. Meneldur
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    WIP Alexandra Quick and the Thorn Circle by Inverarity - K+

    Why ever do you think so? Poor Julia. But I still expected more,of her and it will now take it longer... why hasn't Alex told her anything, at least about Livia? Although for some reason I doubt Mrs. King's only reason is punishment. Now I'm convinced Payton is an idiot. Using LOL in a letter, really? When will Alexandra dump him? I wonder what it means that Lilith and Diana went to separate schools. More of a break between them? Perhaps they were raised by different parents in...
    Post by: Meneldur, Feb 18, 2012 in forum: The Alternates
  27. Meneldur
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    WIP Alexandra Quick and the Thorn Circle by Inverarity - K+

    Well, I said I won't get into the whole Ozarker mystery until we know what secret they're actually hiding. But yeah, I see what you're saying. I think it's likely that they're betrothed, especially considering the way Constance speaks to them: "I told you I will not abide such hateful words." Considering what we know of Ozarker society, it seems very odd for her to say such a thing - unless they're betrothed or something. But really, I couldn't care less. We'll find out eventually, and I...
    Post by: Meneldur, Feb 14, 2012 in forum: The Alternates
  28. Meneldur
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    WIP Alexandra Quick and the Thorn Circle by Inverarity - K+

    [SPOILER] Alexandra's decision with Larry was also another sign of maturity (at least, I hope it's maturity and not guilt for not protecting Darla, so she has to protect Mary). By telling Larry he won, she admitted the whole rivalry had been stupid and due to their arrogance. I think it'll go a lot better from here. As we've seen last chapter, Larry isn't an idiot, and he can be human. I don't think he'll claim victory, or say that either Mary or Alexandra cursed him. I hope (and tend...
    Post by: Meneldur, Feb 6, 2012 in forum: The Alternates
  29. Meneldur
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    WIP Alexandra Quick and the Thorn Circle by Inverarity - K+

    Really? I was reminded of it when Innocence tried to join the Committee... Alexandra even mentioned it, though indirectly. Speaking of crushes/relationships, Larry's gallant but somewhat patronizing gesture towards his girlfriend was actually very interesting, but I assume it's par for the course in the Wizarding World. My main question for the chapter was actually: [SPOILER]
    Post by: Meneldur, Feb 4, 2012 in forum: The Alternates
  30. Meneldur
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    WIP Alexandra Quick and the Thorn Circle by Inverarity - K+

    [SPOILER] BTW, was it just me, or did William throw the match?
    Post by: Meneldur, Feb 4, 2012 in forum: The Alternates
  31. Meneldur
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    WIP Alexandra Quick and the Thorn Circle by Inverarity - K+

    What's the problem? Not to Wikibomb anyone, but The Pleiades (Star Cluster - Seven Sisters (in Greek Mythology): Daughters of the Titan Atlas and sea-nymph Pleione. Maia, Electra, Tayegete, Alcyone, Celaeno, Asterope and Merope. All of them bore sons to gods (mostly Zeus and Poseidon) except Merope. Merope married Sisyphus (he of the rolling rock up the hill in hell) and became mortal, fading away. Appropriately, Merope is the dimmest star in the cluster. I believe Mary is being used by or...
    Post by: Meneldur, Feb 1, 2012 in forum: The Alternates
  32. Meneldur
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    WIP Alexandra Quick and the Thorn Circle by Inverarity - K+

    I have a whole dissertation about Alexandra being the Seventh Sister (whose name, BTW, is Merope). But it's kind of pointless without knowing more. Suffice to say that as Forbearance said, Merope was the only sister who became mortal and died. What really bugs me is not Alexandra being reckless, because we know she has no problem doing dangerous stuff if she knows her friends won't get hurt (and they won't if she's dueling Larry outside), but her ignoring the vest source of information she...
    Post by: Meneldur, Jan 31, 2012 in forum: The Alternates
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