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  1. TheJackOFDiamonds
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    Abandoned Harry Potter and the Hero's Path by TheJackOfDiamonds - T

    Chapter 23 is up: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2869936/23/ For those that saw the draft, the only thing I changed was the scene towards the end with Daphne. I tried to make her intentions less obvious so that it was more in-character for her. Other than that, there's quite a few things going on this chapter, including the first task, and we learn a little more about Karkaroff as well. The situation with Daphne is also nearing a turning point, so for those of you who are worried...
    Post by: TheJackOFDiamonds, Dec 24, 2006 in forum: General Fics
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    Abandoned Harry Potter and the Hero's Path by TheJackOfDiamonds - T

    Thanks for the comments. I'm really happy with the reactions I've gotten to Fleur and Karkaroff, both of whom will get developed a little more next chapter, so thanks to everybody who commented on the two of them. To those wondering about the tasks, I've got something planned for the first task, but it's not going to be an elaborate prank so much as Harry giving the proverbial bird to everybody by putting in virtually no effort at all and flouting it. After the first task,...
    Post by: TheJackOFDiamonds, Dec 17, 2006 in forum: General Fics
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    Abandoned Harry Potter and the Hero's Path by TheJackOfDiamonds - T

    Chapter 22 is up: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2869936/22/ Plot wise, there's not too much going on in this chapter. There's some insight into the characters of Fleur and Karkaroff, and Harry finds out the real rules behind the Triwizard tournament. Overall it's becoming more and more clear that Harry is softening up a bit and interacting much more friendly with those around him. I know it feels like he's going soft, and that things are getting a little too fluffy for some tastes, but I...
    Post by: TheJackOFDiamonds, Dec 15, 2006 in forum: General Fics
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    Abandoned Harry Potter and the Hero's Path by TheJackOfDiamonds - T

    Chapter 21 is up officially: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2869936/21/ It's a long one, at over 16k words, and it covers quite a bit of ground. Thanks again to everyone who commented on the draft, especially ip82, who pointed out a couple of holes that needed fixing. As always, all comments welcome. -the Jack
    Post by: TheJackOFDiamonds, Nov 13, 2006 in forum: General Fics
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    Abandoned Harry Potter and the Hero's Path by TheJackOfDiamonds - T

    The draft of chapter 21 is up in the Work by Author section. http://forums.darklordpotter.net/showthread.php?t=3828 It's a beast at over 15k words, but it covers quite a bit of ground. As always, all comments appreciated. -the Jack
    Post by: TheJackOFDiamonds, Nov 9, 2006 in forum: General Fics
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    Abandoned Harry Potter and the Hero's Path by TheJackOfDiamonds - T

    Ok, chapter 20 is up officially: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2869936/20/ I didn't really change anything from the draft, aside from a couple of extra lines at the World Cup. As always, all comments welcome. -the Jack
    Post by: TheJackOFDiamonds, Oct 19, 2006 in forum: General Fics
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    Abandoned Harry Potter and the Hero's Path by TheJackOfDiamonds - T

    The rough draft of chapter 20 is up in the Work by Author section: http://forums.darklordpotter.net/showthread.php?t=3621 Thanks everybody for your comments on the story so far, I'm glad you're enjoying it. Darius_Darkmon - You're right about the story getting fluffier, but you're also right that it can't continue for too long. Harry is starting to come out of his shell because he has fewer and less serious things to deal with, but that will not always be the case. Think of this...
    Post by: TheJackOFDiamonds, Oct 19, 2006 in forum: General Fics
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    Abandoned Harry Potter and the Hero's Path by TheJackOfDiamonds - T

    On the occlumency issue, I'll attempt to deal with it in various conversations next chapter, but the basic idea is that is that the knowledge and practice of occlumency is not nearly as obscure in my story as it is in canon. It just doesn't make sense to me that a soceity that prides itself on old bloodlines and tries to remain archaic would somehow decide to ignore/not notice a branch of magic that allows people to read your mind, especially with so much political maneuvering between...
    Post by: TheJackOFDiamonds, Sep 6, 2006 in forum: General Fics
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    Abandoned Harry Potter and the Hero's Path by TheJackOfDiamonds - T

    Ok, chapter 19 is up. http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2869936/19/ Thanks again to everyone who commented on the draft, I took a lot of your suggestions and made some changes (what happened to Buckbeak, Padma asks about the sword instead of Hermione, etc). I also edited the conversations with Sirius and Dumbledore to include more families than just the Weasleys, and I definitely think it works better this way (hopefully you agree). As always, all comments appreciated. -the Jack
    Post by: TheJackOFDiamonds, Aug 29, 2006 in forum: General Fics
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    Abandoned Harry Potter and the Hero's Path by TheJackOfDiamonds - T

    The rough draft of the next chapter is up in the work by author section: http://forums.darklordpotter.net/showthread.php?t=3165 If you can, check it out and let me know what you think. Also, thanks for all for the comments on the last chapter, and I'm glad to see that people liked the conversation between Harry and Blaise. Carnival - I know it may seem like Harry is too lenient with the twins, but you have to realize that he isn't blindly vindictive. Malfoy attacked him directly...
    Post by: TheJackOFDiamonds, Aug 27, 2006 in forum: General Fics
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    Abandoned Harry Potter and the Hero's Path by TheJackOfDiamonds - T

    Ok, chapter 18 is up (officially). http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2869936/18/ It's pretty much identical to the one in the work by author section, so if you read that one it's probably a waste of time to read it again. As always, all comments appreciated. -the Jack
    Post by: TheJackOFDiamonds, Aug 15, 2006 in forum: General Fics
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    Abandoned Harry Potter and the Hero's Path by TheJackOfDiamonds - T

    Ok, I'm back. It took much longer than expected, but chapter 18 is up in the work by author section. http://forums.darklordpotter.net/showthread.php?t=3018 Not the most exciting chapter (although it has a little action), but necessary in the overall scheme. It's probably a little bit rougher than normal in terms of spelling and such since I only re-read it once, so if you catch any errors feel free to point them out if you want, but don't feel obligated to. I'm hoping to wrap up the...
    Post by: TheJackOFDiamonds, Aug 14, 2006 in forum: General Fics
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    Abandoned Harry Potter and the Hero's Path by TheJackOfDiamonds - T

    Ok, chapter 17 is up. http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2869936/17/ Thanks again to everyone who commented on the draft. There were very few changes, I tweaked the scenes that were mentioned by most of you, but other than that everything is the same. As always, comments welcome. -the Jack
    Post by: TheJackOFDiamonds, Jun 30, 2006 in forum: General Fics
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    Abandoned Harry Potter and the Hero's Path by TheJackOfDiamonds - T

    Chapter 17 is up in the work by author section. http://forums.darklordpotter.net/showthread.php?t=2457 There's definitely some good action in this one, so I hope you guys enjoy. Again, if people could put their comments on the draft in that thread instead of this one, I'd appreciate it. -the Jack
    Post by: TheJackOFDiamonds, Jun 28, 2006 in forum: General Fics
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    Abandoned Harry Potter and the Hero's Path by TheJackOfDiamonds - T

    Yeah, I'm an idiot again. :wall: Thanks for pointing this out, I changed the scene so it's Hannah Abbott that's getting picked on, which actually makes the whole scene better, I think. One of the things I'm going to cover in the next chaper is that Malfoy was getting impatient waiting for Harry's to get his comeuppance, so he decided to ignore Daphne's advice and try to jump start things. The fact that he was willing to try it against an older student is even better, and it gives me...
    Post by: TheJackOFDiamonds, Jun 24, 2006 in forum: General Fics
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    Abandoned Harry Potter and the Hero's Path by TheJackOfDiamonds - T

    Ok, chapter 16 is up. http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2869936/16/ It's pretty long and a lot of it is plot development and set up, but I need it for the next chapter, which should be cool. As always, comments welcome. -the Jack
    Post by: TheJackOFDiamonds, Jun 23, 2006 in forum: General Fics
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    Abandoned Harry Potter and the Hero's Path by TheJackOfDiamonds - T

    The rough draft of chapter 16 is up in the work by author section. http://forums.darklordpotter.net/showthread.php?t=2376 I listed most of my concerns in that thread, and I'm anxious to see what people think. There isn't really anything exciting in this chapter, but I need it to set up chapter 17, which should be pretty cool. As always, I appreciate any comments you guys have, and please put all comments on the draft in THAT thread, and save this thread for comments about the...
    Post by: TheJackOFDiamonds, Jun 21, 2006 in forum: General Fics
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    Abandoned Harry Potter and the Hero's Path by TheJackOfDiamonds - T

    Ok, chapter 15 is up. http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2869936/15/ I didn't really change that much from the rough draft. I took out the scene with Lucius Malfoy and changed the conversation with Tracey around a little. I also put in a little more justification for why Harry was went into a coma. Other than that, all the changes were pretty minor, so it's basically the same chapter. Thanks again to everyone who commented. -the Jack
    Post by: TheJackOFDiamonds, Jun 8, 2006 in forum: General Fics
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    Abandoned Harry Potter and the Hero's Path by TheJackOfDiamonds - T

    On the whole romance thing, as of right now I'm not writing with any specific pairing in mind. I have a couple that I think might work, but really what I'm trying to do right now it to develop characters so that if they do get together later, it makes sense. The question you have to ask is: what type of girl would Harry go for? More importantly, what would have to happen for him and that girl to get together? Can anyone honestly see Harry walking up to Hermione like: "H-Hey,...
    Post by: TheJackOFDiamonds, Jun 8, 2006 in forum: General Fics
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    Abandoned Harry Potter and the Hero's Path by TheJackOfDiamonds - T

    Ok, I put the rough draft of chapter 15 in the work by author section. http://forums.darklordpotter.net/showthread.php?t=2210 I'm currently debating the merits of getting a beta versus just posting my chapters here first. I think a beta would help more with grammar and style, whereas posting here I get much more feedback on concepts, which I think is more important. I'm still thinking about it, though. Also, I'd appreciate it if all comments about the rough draft went into the...
    Post by: TheJackOFDiamonds, Jun 7, 2006 in forum: General Fics
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    Abandoned Harry Potter and the Hero's Path by TheJackOfDiamonds - T

    Ok, thanks to everyone who helped out, chapter 14 is up. http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2869936/14/ It's kind of funny what happened with the original chapter. Basically, I was recently reading a manipulative Dumbledore fic, so when I started writing the chapter I was really pissed at Dumbledore for being such an idiot, so what do I do? I write a chapter where he's an idiot. :wall: After ip's first post, I realized that all my scenes with Dumbledore were basically him saying...
    Post by: TheJackOFDiamonds, Jun 1, 2006 in forum: General Fics
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    Abandoned Harry Potter and the Hero's Path by TheJackOfDiamonds - T

    Ok, I put the first draft of chapter 14 in the work by author section. http://forums.darklordpotter.net/showthread.php?t=2095 The chapter just doesn't sit right with me, but I can't put my finger on why. I'm hoping somebody here will be able to point out what I'm missing. -the Jack
    Post by: TheJackOFDiamonds, May 29, 2006 in forum: General Fics
  23. TheJackOFDiamonds
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    Abandoned Harry Potter and the Hero's Path by TheJackOfDiamonds - T

    ip is right about the wandless magic. You're right that Row's friends found out she could do small levitations wandlessly, and they were amazed. What Harry needs to hide is the fact that he can do any magic wandless, since it's completely unheard for a fully grown wizard, much less a 13 year old. For the sake of the story, advanced wandless magic like curses are thought to be impossible for anyone, even somebody like Dumbledore. On the obliviating of Hermione, you can probably tell...
    Post by: TheJackOFDiamonds, May 28, 2006 in forum: General Fics
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    Abandoned Harry Potter and the Hero's Path by TheJackOfDiamonds - T

    For better or for worse, chapter 13 is up. http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2869936/13/ I took some liberties with the intelligence of the sorting hat for Harry's sorting, mainly because I thought it would be a cool conversation. The sword thing is cliche, but I've always liked it, so I put it in. I tried to keep Harry in character, in that he doesn't go around yelling and getting angry, but he doesn't take any shit either. I know some people were hoping for a big blowup with...
    Post by: TheJackOFDiamonds, May 28, 2006 in forum: General Fics
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    Abandoned Harry Potter and the Hero's Path by TheJackOfDiamonds - T

    I'm glad that people like the pace so far. I tried to spend enough time developing the personalities of the characters while at the same time not getting bogged down in detail before Harry even got to Hogwarts. I still feel like I could have done a better job, especially with Jack, but at this point I really don't want to go back and start over, so oh well, I guess. Actually, I'm really nervous about the next couple chapters because I think it will be a real test of whether or not I've...
    Post by: TheJackOFDiamonds, May 24, 2006 in forum: General Fics
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    Abandoned Harry Potter and the Hero's Path by TheJackOfDiamonds - T

    Chapter 12 is up. http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2869936/12/ The first time I tried to access it I got an error message, but I hit refresh and then it came up. Don't know what that was about. Notes about the chapter: I tried to keep everything with the press as realistic as I could. I think it's feasible that Dumbledore could keep the details about Harry and Row private, but not the fact that Harry is coming to Hogwarts. I also tried to keep Dumbledore and Lupin in character as...
    Post by: TheJackOFDiamonds, May 22, 2006 in forum: General Fics
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    Abandoned Harry Potter and the Hero's Path by TheJackOfDiamonds - T

    Yeah, I screwed that part up. :wall: I was trying to have Malfoy make a joke about Snape taking Row, but it ended up sounding like Snape was trying to adopt her. I changed it now though. Snape wants her away from Jack and Harry, but not with him since he hates kids (just like my 3rd grade teacher). I think that there are varying degrees of leglimency. For example, a leglimens can tell if someone is being truthful very easily using only a light probe. If they press slightly...
    Post by: TheJackOFDiamonds, May 15, 2006 in forum: General Fics
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    Abandoned Harry Potter and the Hero's Path by TheJackOfDiamonds - T

    Ok, Chapter 11 is up. Not a lot going on in this chapter, just a lot of stuff that had to be mentioned before Harry heads to Hogwarts. Snape is a bastard, and we see the beginnings of some future conflicts for Harry. I also tried to make the letters from Dumbledore realistic in that he has an agenda, but he's very subtle about it. Chapter 12 is coming along nicely, and I'll probably take it up through the Hogwarts Express so we get a little action. As always, comments welcome....
    Post by: TheJackOFDiamonds, May 14, 2006 in forum: General Fics
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    Abandoned Harry Potter and the Hero's Path by TheJackOfDiamonds - T

    There will be no killing off of Sirius, at least not for convenience. I'm not promising he'll make it all the way to the end, but he'll definitely be around for a while, at least. -the Jack
    Post by: TheJackOFDiamonds, May 11, 2006 in forum: General Fics
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    Abandoned Harry Potter and the Hero's Path by TheJackOfDiamonds - T

    It's funny for me to see other people arguing about this, because I had the same argument with myself not too long ago. I'll admit, originally I was going to put Harry in Gryffindor, until I realized that it would completely kill the story, both for me and the readers. So Harry will not be in Gryffindor, although he may end up being friends with some of the Weasleys at some point in the future. You’re right about not bringing Jack along. However, he’s 16 years old, with his own flat...
    Post by: TheJackOFDiamonds, May 11, 2006 in forum: General Fics
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    Abandoned Harry Potter and the Hero's Path by TheJackOfDiamonds - T

    Well, it looks like I found the party. Thanks for inviting me. I'll admit when someone first told me that my story was mentioned on darklordpotter, I was a little nervous. I've never really been a fan of evil Harry fics, and I thought that maybe I overdid the Dursley scene if people were thinking that Harry was going Dark Lord. As you can imagine, I was pleasantly surprised to find my story in a section devoted to independent Harry fics, which have always been my favorite. I'm still...
    Post by: TheJackOFDiamonds, May 9, 2006 in forum: General Fics
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