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  1. jbern
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    Complete Turn Me Loose: A Harry Potter Adventure by JBern - M

    Thanks. I thought about some kind of confrontation with Dumbledore in the end, but it just didn't seem like it fit. Dismissing him and having Harry essentially thumb his nose at Dumbledore seemed more appropriate. As for Bungle being better, it's tough for a sequel to live up to the original. I think that's part of the reason I'm reluctant to jump right into Lie's sequel. The bar is pretty high there. The good news in that regard is my stories seem to lag when I'm writing with...
    Post by: jbern, Nov 15, 2010 in forum: General Fics
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    Complete Turn Me Loose: A Harry Potter Adventure by JBern - M

    I was tempted to bring Baba Yaga in as part of the "reinforcements," but I didn't want to make the final battle more convoluted than it already was. In the epilogue, I thought about mentioning that Harry had a standing offer to replace one of her three wizards. I couldn't see him taking her up on it. As for Luna, I realized pretty quickly during the sequel that I couldn't make the relationship work during the story proper. He would have had to bring her in too close and she'd have...
    Post by: jbern, Nov 13, 2010 in forum: General Fics
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    Complete Turn Me Loose: A Harry Potter Adventure by JBern - M

    The finale is posted. I hope you enjoy. It's been a great run on this story.
    Post by: jbern, Nov 13, 2010 in forum: General Fics
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    Complete Turn Me Loose: A Harry Potter Adventure by JBern - M

    Glad you and your Grandma liked it. (Drop a review on Amazon - I'll take all the publicity I can get.) The sequel has been stuck on 1/2 way since June at about 35 thousand words. I'm going to pick it up next week and try to get some things rolling.
    Post by: jbern, Nov 12, 2010 in forum: General Fics
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    Complete Turn Me Loose: A Harry Potter Adventure by JBern - M

    Finally got the rough draft of the last chapter done. It'll go through a couple of days of editing and should be up by Sunday. Hopefully, the final battle meets everyone's expectations.
    Post by: jbern, Nov 12, 2010 in forum: General Fics
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    Complete Turn Me Loose: A Harry Potter Adventure by JBern - M

    Mine is actually a toss up between Heather Sinclair's and Clell's story, but don't sell yourself short Pers. Your's is very good as well.
    Post by: jbern, Oct 30, 2010 in forum: General Fics
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    Complete Turn Me Loose: A Harry Potter Adventure by JBern - M

    It had to happen someday, I finally added another chapter. There is one more chapter to finish this story and then the epilogue. I'm going to start on that chapter next week. After I wrap this one up, I'll do the final two chapters of Inner Eye. Once those two stories have wrapped, I'll either do a couple of long one shots or short chaptered stories before I start on the sequel to The Lie I've Lived. Hmm - my 1000th post.
    Post by: jbern, Jun 24, 2010 in forum: General Fics
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    Complete Turn Me Loose: A Harry Potter Adventure by JBern - M

    To answer the Snape question - he'd probably lose in a straight up fight with either Harry or Voldemort, but when has Snape ever done anything straight up? He's probably not quite as powerful as the one in TFtCD, but I don't really know that I've portrayed Harry as powerful as he was in TFtCD. I'll go through the chapter again and clean up errors that were mentioned. Thanks for pointing it out.
    Post by: jbern, Jan 8, 2010 in forum: General Fics
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    Complete Turn Me Loose: A Harry Potter Adventure by JBern - M

    I was thinking a little bit of Daemon (via one of his Dementors), mixed with golem, and infused with blood magic to go after Harry. It was similar to what I was trying to do with the bodies of James and Lily in To Fight the Coming Darkness. To answer the other question, TML has roughly three, maybe four chapters left. Expect a lot of fighting to occur. Getting my book in NZ? I know Dead Eye has shown up on an Aussie site or two and it's part of the Ingrams catalog, but your library...
    Post by: jbern, Jan 7, 2010 in forum: General Fics
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    Complete Turn Me Loose: A Harry Potter Adventure by JBern - M

    You can give them the isbn of Dead Eye and, because Amazon/Createspace cut a deal with Ingrams distribution, HHH will also be able to be ordered by the isbn. ---------- Post automerged 01-07-2010 at 01:31 AM ---------- Previous post was 01-06-2010 at 10:14 AM ---------- Chapter 13 came back from editing quicker than I expected and has been updated on both FF.net and FFA. Enjoy it.
    Post by: jbern, Jan 7, 2010 in forum: General Fics
  11. jbern
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    Complete Turn Me Loose: A Harry Potter Adventure by JBern - M

    Chapter 13 is in editing. I expect to be able to post it sometime before Saturday.
    Post by: jbern, Jan 6, 2010 in forum: General Fics
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    Complete Turn Me Loose: A Harry Potter Adventure by JBern - M

    There's probably about 5 chapters left.
    Post by: jbern, Oct 31, 2009 in forum: General Fics
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    Complete Turn Me Loose: A Harry Potter Adventure by JBern - M

    To answer Ragnon, I'll be finishing this and Inner Eye before starting on the sequel to Lie. Bungle and TML complete that cycle, there won't be a third story unless I come up with a compelling storyline to make a third. I hope everyone enjoys Dead Eye. You can drop the reviews on both smashwords and amazon. Review count on Amazon helps figure into their arcane book standing somehow. Edit - It's now up on FF.net and FFA.
    Post by: jbern, Oct 30, 2009 in forum: General Fics
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    Complete Turn Me Loose: A Harry Potter Adventure by JBern - M

    Chapter 12 is in editing. I'm hoping to have it up tomorrow. Those who are interested in getting a free e-copy of Dead Eye can get a copy on Halloween from Smashwords using a promo code. http://gryphonwood.blogspot.com/2009/10/free-e-books-happy-halloween-from.html
    Post by: jbern, Oct 30, 2009 in forum: General Fics
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    Complete Turn Me Loose: A Harry Potter Adventure by JBern - M

    It's still a working title and subject to change, but that's where we're at right now. I need to do a few rewrites today and send it off. After I get it back from editing, I'll start looking for a market for it and see if the name really needs to be changed. BTW - anyone in the US ( lower 48 ) who wants to try and win a signed copy of Dead Eye, I've donated one to www.booksandchat.net for their giveaway. They had a pair of reviews for Dead Eye and actually did an author interview...
    Post by: jbern, Oct 12, 2009 in forum: General Fics
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    Complete Turn Me Loose: A Harry Potter Adventure by JBern - M

    I've got some rewrites to do on my first original fantasy novel (it was originally called Battle Maidens, but has been retitled to Spirals of Destiny Book One: Rider). That will be finished and off to the person who offered up their editing services. I think it's good enough to shop to some of the major publishers. With the decks cleared, I'll be back on this story starting tomorrow. I'm not feeling the funny right now, so Inner Eye will have to wait. Hopefully a new chapter within...
    Post by: jbern, Oct 12, 2009 in forum: General Fics
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    Complete Turn Me Loose: A Harry Potter Adventure by JBern - M

    JUst a quick reminder that this story is temporarily on hiatus while I finish The Lie I've Lived. There are about 5-6 chapters more left in this one, but each story is at the point where I'm trying to bring it to conclusion and it requires extra attention to make certain that I'm getting it right. Since Lie has the momentum right now, who am I to argue. Still, if you are in dire need of 2nd person action, I am pleased to announce that the Gryphonwood Press Anthology containing my...
    Post by: jbern, Mar 2, 2009 in forum: General Fics
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    Complete Turn Me Loose: A Harry Potter Adventure by JBern - M

    It's Mechani-Cal, a guy in a cut rate set of powered armor. He's the lead character in the novella Confessions of a D-List Supervillain.
    Post by: jbern, Jan 25, 2009 in forum: General Fics
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    Complete Turn Me Loose: A Harry Potter Adventure by JBern - M

    No Amazon link to give just yet. The Createspace one is https://www.createspace.com/3370531. As you can see that one is pretty generic and if you're spending your money, I'd rather get the sales numbers from Amazon over the extra $1.50 or so I'd get if you bought it in Createspace's e-store. Trust me the linkage will be hard to miss when it does become available. I still have to approve the proof copy before everything is finalized. I've updated www.jimbernheimer.com with a larger...
    Post by: jbern, Jan 24, 2009 in forum: General Fics
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    Complete Turn Me Loose: A Harry Potter Adventure by JBern - M

    Thanks for all the comments. I'll be starting on the next chapter of Lie tomorrow or Monday. In publishing news, I just ordered my proof copy of Horror, Humor, and Heroes. I expect the book to go on sale by the first week in February. I ended up using Amazon's Createspace instead of Lulu to keep the cost reasonable. The cheapest I could price the book using Lulu's service (and still listing on Amazon) was about $15. That's too hight. Using the Createspace setup (along with the $39...
    Post by: jbern, Jan 24, 2009 in forum: General Fics
  21. jbern
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    Complete Turn Me Loose: A Harry Potter Adventure by JBern - M

    Thanks for the comments. When I first started Bungle, I wanted to make a bastard Dumbledore that would be the standard which other bastard Dumbledores would be held up to. From the reaction for this chapter, I'm getting close to achieving my goal. Most evil bastard Dumbledore stories fall a little flat as SuperDuperIDon'tNeedNoStinkingHelp Harry constantly outwits the old coot's progressively more desperate manuevers. I don't want to do that. I want Harry to have to work to...
    Post by: jbern, Jan 16, 2009 in forum: General Fics
  22. jbern
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    Complete Turn Me Loose: A Harry Potter Adventure by JBern - M

    Chapter 10 is up - enjoy.
    Post by: jbern, Dec 5, 2008 in forum: General Fics
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    Complete Turn Me Loose: A Harry Potter Adventure by JBern - M

    Chapter 10 is finally done and off to editing. Expect to see it sometime during the week. It will definitively answer whether or not Svetlanna is Baba Yaga. While I wait on Dead Eye, I am thinking about a self-published project via Lulu containing somewhere between 10 and 12 of my short stories and 1 novella to test the waters and see how responsive the fandom will be. It would be around 50 thousand words total and be available in paperback (somewhere around $15) or ebook (somewhere...
    Post by: jbern, Dec 1, 2008 in forum: General Fics
  24. jbern
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    Complete Turn Me Loose: A Harry Potter Adventure by JBern - M

    For a password reset, you'd probably need to email Jeconais. There was a big problem with the server that finally got fixed allowing the updates to be sent. The update I sent out was to alert anyone who hadn't seen the chapter yet and to let people know that Drabblecast put out another of my stories. This year has been pretty good so far. I've sold 4 stories. (2 to Drabblecast, 1 to Necrotic Tissue, and 1 to Gryphonwood Press). I'm excited about the Gryphonwood one because it will be...
    Post by: jbern, Oct 16, 2008 in forum: General Fics
  25. jbern
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    Complete Turn Me Loose: A Harry Potter Adventure by JBern - M

    Chapter 9 is now posted. Sorry for the delay. I hope you enjoy.
    Post by: jbern, Oct 6, 2008 in forum: General Fics
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    Complete Turn Me Loose: A Harry Potter Adventure by JBern - M

    TML 8 is now up for your consumption. Enjoy.
    Post by: jbern, Aug 3, 2008 in forum: General Fics
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    Complete Turn Me Loose: A Harry Potter Adventure by JBern - M

    TML 8 Tease I'm at about 4000 words, this is the first 1700. I should have it done by the end of the weekend. Chapter 8 – Making Love to Whoever I Please Your problems are legion. Your allies are few. Its times like these that you know you're in over your head, but there's no one "above" you. Harry James Potter runs his own faction in this war. You have a serviceable alliance with Minister Dimperio and your adopted nation of Brazil, a loose alliance with Minister Scrimgeour and...
    Post by: jbern, Jul 24, 2008 in forum: General Fics
  28. jbern
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    Complete Turn Me Loose: A Harry Potter Adventure by JBern - M

    Just Wiki her and you'll get the gist. I was going to say that it's updated now, but I'm guessing people realize that now. Luna is a shy 15 year old who keeps herself distanced from anyone. She needs to grow up and Harry doesn't have the time to wait for her. He's got other problems. Back to Lie 14. I think I'm going to make my self imposed deadline.
    Post by: jbern, Jun 28, 2008 in forum: General Fics
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    Complete Turn Me Loose: A Harry Potter Adventure by JBern - M

    TML 7 is off to final edits. Expect to see it within the next 24 hours. Now onto Lie 14. In other news, visit www.drabblecast.org to hear my first professional work as an audiocast. Reality Bites is Episode 70 of Drabblecast. I hope you enjoy it.
    Post by: jbern, Jun 25, 2008 in forum: General Fics
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    Complete Turn Me Loose: A Harry Potter Adventure by JBern - M

    TML 7 Tease Here's the first 1500 words of chapter 7. I have about 7500 done and I plan on finishing the chapter in the next 24 hours and sending it off to final editing. Look for it by mid week. Thankfully, I'm finally able to get Harry out of Hogwarts for an extended period. Ironically, I had a similar problem of Harry stuck at Hogwarts in TFtCD. All this emo-90120 shit just must not be my thing. Chapter 7 – I’m Even on my Knees You’re standing over a hot cauldron feeling...
    Post by: jbern, Jun 24, 2008 in forum: General Fics
  31. jbern
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    Complete Turn Me Loose: A Harry Potter Adventure by JBern - M

    It'll be on Amazon and Barnes and Noble. Signed copies, I'll look into that. Some authors do this thing where you download a "bookplate" and print it out. Next you send it in a self addressed stamped envelope, I sign the bookplate and send it back to you. I dunno, sounds kind of hokey. Assuming things go well, I'll probably do a few conventions. I was originally hoping to do a "launch" at DragonCon in Atlanta over Labor Day Weekend, but given that daughter #2 is due in mid-August...
    Post by: jbern, Jun 13, 2008 in forum: General Fics
  32. jbern
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    Complete Turn Me Loose: A Harry Potter Adventure by JBern - M

    I guess I'll answer by saying, "So". Don't want to read my novel, don't buy it, but it's nice to know you're reading my fanfics otherwise you wouldn't have wandered into my profile. Since I'm not a fan of foriegn films, I didn't realize the Alba movie was a remake. Of course stories about people who can see an interact with ghosts predate Hollywood and can go all the way back to early mythology. Am I going to make millions? Unlikely. I could have spent a few years shopping it...
    Post by: jbern, Jun 12, 2008 in forum: General Fics
  33. jbern
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    Complete Turn Me Loose: A Harry Potter Adventure by JBern - M

    One point I forgot to mention is that Dumbledore's oath didn't prevent him from doing that to Harry. It was just a little harmless Transfiguration among friends right? Anyway to answer questions about future stories, Inner Eye is a straight humor piece along the lines of Baja B's Almost a Squib - meaning 1 chapter covering every year. I only plan for each chapter to be at most 5000 words. It's a Harry mentored by Sybil T. from an early age. He shows up at Hogwarts with an appreciation...
    Post by: jbern, May 19, 2008 in forum: General Fics
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    Complete Turn Me Loose: A Harry Potter Adventure by JBern - M

    The earlier post about Dumbledore being a Master of Transfiguration is what I was basing his ability to do this off of. Think about this - at the end of OOTP it states that Dumbledore incapacitates the remaining Death Eaters after Voldemort fled. Basically, that sounds like a massive can of whupass got opened. On the surface, Harry knows Dumbledore did it because. 1. He could. 2. To remind Harry that while Harry is capable of "running with the Big Dogs" the old mongrel still...
    Post by: jbern, May 19, 2008 in forum: General Fics
  35. jbern
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    Complete Turn Me Loose: A Harry Potter Adventure by JBern - M

    No delay on my part. Try FFA instead or give it some time and try again.
    Post by: jbern, May 18, 2008 in forum: General Fics
  36. jbern
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    Complete Turn Me Loose: A Harry Potter Adventure by JBern - M

    It's posted. Hope you enjoy.
    Post by: jbern, May 18, 2008 in forum: General Fics
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    Complete Turn Me Loose: A Harry Potter Adventure by JBern - M

    The chapter came back from final beta at around 1 am. I was asleep. Six year old daughter decided that 6:15 am was "morning enough" for us to get up. (She knows we're going to Busch Gardens today.) Fortunately cranky and very pregnant wife remains asleep. I'm going through the chapter right now and it should be up in a few hours. As for my original stuff, my vampire story will be on an upcoming episode of Drabblecast, which is a free audio fiction site. I'll let you know when...
    Post by: jbern, May 18, 2008 in forum: General Fics
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    Complete Turn Me Loose: A Harry Potter Adventure by JBern - M

    I'm about 4000 words into chapter 6 right now. There are some difficult to write scenes in there. Working on it.
    Post by: jbern, May 7, 2008 in forum: General Fics
  39. jbern
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    Complete Turn Me Loose: A Harry Potter Adventure by JBern - M

    Right now, I'm looking at August with no particular date in mind. Basically, the way I'm handling it is I write each episode (chapter) and then John comes along and rewrites it. We hash out the differences and then it's ready for first edits. Our first editors are Matthew and Lindsey Shocke (Virridian and Runsamok from FFA) They've already finished up through episode 6 and currently have 7-9. I go through their edits and make changes and give them to John for his second chop. John...
    Post by: jbern, Apr 16, 2008 in forum: General Fics
  40. jbern
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    Complete Turn Me Loose: A Harry Potter Adventure by JBern - M

    Sorry no time turner. The wife would just complain there are two lazy idiots sitting around on the computer. I've got about 5-6000 words left on Dead Eye just the finale and the epilogue and hopeful setup for book 2. As for TML, things will be shifting away from Hogwarts shortly (either this chapter or the next) as Harry needs to find Slytherin's Locket.
    Post by: jbern, Apr 15, 2008 in forum: General Fics
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    Complete Turn Me Loose: A Harry Potter Adventure by JBern - M

    Back writing this story by Wednesday not posting a new chapter on Wednesday. I'm starting to think about the Harry versus Snape confrontation already. Jim
    Post by: jbern, Apr 14, 2008 in forum: General Fics
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    Complete Turn Me Loose: A Harry Potter Adventure by JBern - M

    I'm almost done with the first draft of Dead Eye and should be back to this story by Wednesday. Jim
    Post by: jbern, Apr 13, 2008 in forum: General Fics
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    Complete Turn Me Loose: A Harry Potter Adventure by JBern - M

    As for updates. This one is actually about 6 weeks out. I have Lie chapter 12 almost ready, but plan on taking the next 4-6 weeks to crank out some original material. I do plan on coming back to this story at that time with my usual level of insanity... Jim
    Post by: jbern, Mar 8, 2008 in forum: General Fics
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    Complete Turn Me Loose: A Harry Potter Adventure by JBern - M

    Thanks for all the feedback. This was a difficult chapter to get going. It's tough to make a transitional chapter interesting, but I did my best. The other big issue was to tackle Harry and DD's relationship in this chapter by having them work closely alongside each other without a battle. The problem with those conversations is when is enough too much. Too little and it's a gloss over. Too much and it becomes a long drawn out angsty whine. The trick is finding a happy medium. It's...
    Post by: jbern, Feb 12, 2008 in forum: General Fics
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    Complete Turn Me Loose: A Harry Potter Adventure by JBern - M

    I'll default to Hack speaking English and say that the Goblins require all transactions in English for some stupid reason. Actually he would speak Portuguese in Brazil. Chapter 5 is coming along slowly. I have the outline of it done, but I need to get going on it. Jim
    Post by: jbern, Jan 21, 2008 in forum: General Fics
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    Complete Turn Me Loose: A Harry Potter Adventure by JBern - M

    I use these sites. http://www.translation-guide.com/free_online_translators.php?from=English&to=Latin http://archives.nd.edu/latgramm.htm and http://www.tranexp.com:2000/Translate/result.shtml
    Post by: jbern, Jan 13, 2008 in forum: General Fics
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    Complete Turn Me Loose: A Harry Potter Adventure by JBern - M

    I use a english to latin website. According to it, Tonare is Thunder. Kwan has better things to do than teach more stupid children, or at least that's what he would say. Jim
    Post by: jbern, Jan 13, 2008 in forum: General Fics
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    Complete Turn Me Loose: A Harry Potter Adventure by JBern - M

    Thanks again for the comments. Bill's got his flaws. He's not very good in a fight to be blunt. Cocky, arrogant and ultracompetitve can also describe him when it comes to Curse Breaking. Eventually there'll be a scene with Harry and Bill disagreeing over how to break into a place and you'll see some of that come to the surface. Beyond that, he's the "coolest guy" in England. Is he worried about Harry stealing his girl - nope. He's seen how Harry reacts to betrayal first hand and...
    Post by: jbern, Jan 3, 2008 in forum: General Fics
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    Complete Turn Me Loose: A Harry Potter Adventure by JBern - M

    Thanks for all the feedback. Harry has always had rumors following him from 2nd year on. He figures that he survived them. He can survive another bout of them especially if he has Scrimgeour supporting him. Consider how widely respected Lucius Malfoy was at the beginning of the series despite all those pesky rumors about him being a nasty person. Harry could of course be very wrong. From Harry's perspective Voldemort spent all of year 4 in some convulted master plot to get Harry's...
    Post by: jbern, Dec 30, 2007 in forum: General Fics
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    Complete Turn Me Loose: A Harry Potter Adventure by JBern - M

    I used a single * for scene breaks in the original document. I went back and did a find replace and switched it to my six dashes. It's fixed now. Jim
    Post by: jbern, Dec 27, 2007 in forum: General Fics
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