I liked it till the crossover. That just didn't appeal to me at all. It would've been better if it had like thrown him into a world where Voldemort had won the first war, or thrown him into the past against some other dark lord or something. I dunno, but it was really good till the crossover.

 

I thought the story was great until the future crap. It was just so out of no where. I was like "Hardcore, he transformed into his demon and now he's gonna escape." But I was wrong! He went into an AU or some crap. I just know it was lame. Like the author was just like "Hey...I gotta good story going, an eventually very dark Harry from the use of his demon...Lets throw him into a technologically advanced super magic society, and whats better, I won't hint at it at all!"

 

Ok, usually I'd be nice about this, but this pisses me off. What is with you people and the sudden flood of necro posts all the sudden? I could understand if the story was updated, but it's NOT, and that pisses me off because I LIKE this story and thought someone had cast a rez on it or something.

People have been doing it again and again lately, and it's making me VERY angry.

The reviews weren't even groundbreaking. There was no real critique either, just a bit of bitching about the storyline. QUIT. IT. Last warning to EVERYONE who's been doing this before I pull out the fucking shotgun.

 

It's been taken down, but there's a copy in the DLP archive.

 

Thanx, I updated the first post.

 

.epub downloads:
The Demon Within by Thor Nairda - (Mega, Mediafire)

 

I completely agree with you, but the ending is blurry