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Old 04-25-2017, 11:15 PM   #41
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Interesting, Harry survived for a long time now and another death has finally happened but we have hints not all is as it should be. This is what I feel the story needed; something to shake up the march of Harry's recent triumphs and drawbacks on his resurrection skill.
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Old 04-25-2017, 11:18 PM   #42
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I've enjoyed this as a guilty pleasure for awhile, but this latest chapter really highlights the problems already mentioned with the telling instead of showing.

 
He basically skips the entire resurrection scene. The guy is stumbling over to Harry to get the blood of the enemy, but then it skips to Voldemort being alive. No actual skip, just that the description goes from the guy walking towards Harry, skips any actual mention of a cut and instead just quotes the ritual line, then Harry hopes it fails, then Voldemort's alive. No hissing, bubbling, even dropping the blood into the cauldron. It's all very, very jarring.


In addition to that, the chapter delves into that tried and truly fucking annoying habit of science as a solution when it has Harry presumably kill Voldemort (and himself) by using transfiguring dirt into "an alloy of sodium and potassium" which is explosive with water, then tipping the cauldron towards himself. Because it's definitely water in the eldritch reanimation blood sacrifice ritual cauldron.


Decent time waster.
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Old 04-26-2017, 05:48 AM   #43
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Calling it now, something's fucky with the horcruxes and Voldemort's now sharing in the timetravel do-over thingy.
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Old 04-26-2017, 11:56 PM   #44
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Calling it now, something's fucky with the horcruxes and Voldemort's now sharing in the timetravel do-over thingy.
 
Yea you called it.


Did the chapters get shorter too?
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Old 04-27-2017, 11:23 PM   #45
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Now that Voldemort has started to go back with Harry, when he dies every time, there's not really much point to this fic. Harry didn't stand a fucking chance before and he stands even less now. I worry that this is just going to be resolved with some kind of stupid deus ex machina moment.
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That's not entirely true. I've seen good divergence stories where one small thing happened at one point and then what follows is an interesting story that explores a different Harry.

Even if Harry doesn't die again for the rest of the fic, it doesn't mean the fic is pointless. The deaths and paranoia changed him.

I do agree that the author's been cutting corners in his writing though which is quite annoying. Because he has a hell of a knack for a plot.
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I kind of feel that Harry needs to die more, or other consequences of him dying show up. Some interesting plot lines would be him going crazy slowly, or when he dies his soul is actually moving to a different harry in a different dimension and the differences are slowly building up behind the scenes until it's just a wasteland. I really hope it's not Voldemort joins the loop. That'd just be kind of boring.
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