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Old 01-22-2017, 06:09 AM   #21
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@DragonSin: "Let's use every trope we've ever used on Harry, on Ron, then bash Harry like he does Ron." That's hardly a fair summary of the plot, and not accurate in the slightest. Have you read it beyond the first chapter?

Honestly, the story is decent, but not much else. The fandom hasn't really had any great works recently, and because of its update rate people here seem to be dropping their standards and rating it higher than it deserves. The plot is interesting, but fairly predictable, the writing is acceptable but not particularly beautiful, and the characterization is all over the place. The attempts at humor is another issue altogether.

I read this story because Ron is an underutilized and under-appreciated character in fanfiction, but that one thing wasn't enough for me to overlook the rest of the story. 3/5 is the highest I can rate it in good conscience.
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Old 01-24-2017, 10:01 PM   #22
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Rating something higher than it deserves because it features Ron is stupid.

This story is full of cliches it plays entirely straight, and is just generally bad.

I'll give it a .5 for grammar, but that only raises it to a 1.5/5, because everything else is dire.

Additional points off for female Harry.

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Old 01-24-2017, 10:13 PM   #23
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I have yet to see someone make a good Harry-centric fic ... so why is anyone even attempting to touch Ron? I get that some people will give this fic a 5/5 just for showing Ron in a semi-decent light, despite all the glaring flaws, but c'mon, what is the point of it? "Let's use every trope we've ever used on Harry, on Ron, then bash Harry like he does Ron." 1/5
So you are saying that you've never read a good hp fanfic?

Why are you on a fanfic forum then?
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Old 01-26-2017, 06:02 AM   #24
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^Hunting for those tantalising Snape/Hermione fanfics maybe?
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Old 02-02-2017, 09:13 PM   #25
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I am trying to get through it because the idea behind it all intrigues me, but there's just a lot of pain to dig through. Can only hope it improves on all the issues everyone brought up above this because there's some serious improvements it could use.
Hope that was a decent first review/post..

3/5
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Old 02-08-2017, 12:57 PM   #26
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I am getting bored of this story even with its fairly good update rate. Too little is happening and Ron just seems to accept everything (greengrass secrets, allure attacks) without much of a emotional response or plan. I enjoyed this previously because it felt Ron was at least being somewhat proactive and trying to fix the issues that come up. I am seeing less of that now and I very much do not like characters that just go with the flow and not try to take initiative.

Lowering my rating down to 3.5 rounding it out to 4 due to how much I enjoyed the beginning.
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Old 02-16-2017, 02:25 AM   #27
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It seems this fanfiction has ignited quite a discussion, so I'm also contributing my share....

I like this fanfiction, it has quite a few interesting ideas, and those make it certainly worth reading, like a Ron-centric time travel story, the intermingling with other time travelers, the inclusion of famous fanfiction tropes... I must admit it i like it, even if it has its weak points, like the very uneven speed, and the "slytherin politics" need a bit of an upgrade....

But it is still quite an interesting read, and i think it will continue to be this way for quite some time. I would award it a 3.5 / 5
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Old 03-10-2017, 01:07 PM   #28
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The Red Knight has an interesting plot, good bit of mystery and a unique Ron-centric perspective that has been fun to read and has piqued my interest in reading Ron-centric fics more often.

That's what I would have said 10 chapters ago. The whole subplot that has occurred with the Dueling tournament and Greengrasses is the most asinine thing to slog through. At this point I'd rate it 3/5(and that's generous) only because I really enjoyed the first half of the fic.
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Old 03-10-2017, 05:05 PM   #29
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The author just doesn't know when to quit. They keep prolonging the drama (poorly written at that) on and on, because they either don't have any actual content to provide, so they use this filler bullshit that literally no one would care about if it had been revealed in one or two paragraphs, or they honest to God think this is good writing and totally needed to be there.

But yeah, 10 chapters of mind numbing boring shit.

At this rate, the fic will be 200 chapters long before Ron actually starts being proactive.
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Old 03-10-2017, 07:39 PM   #30
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I agree with the above sentiments, but I think that this is a problem most fics face in between years. Hopefully it'll pick up again when they get to second year.

And it is unfortunate that Ron is so lackadaisical in this, one of the better parts of the story was the confrontation with Hermione and Violet at the end of 1st year. I was hoping that he would tell Violet at least that he wasn't the Ron she knew, but he keeps stringing it along.
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Old 04-14-2017, 06:38 PM   #31
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Some things I've heard about this fic and it being a combination of peggy sue and reincarnation isekai (both genres being 95% awful) made me think that this fic will be a mess of bad writing and terrible ideas.

Surprisingly, it wasn't. Of course, it wasn't without its problems. The first and the most important one is that most of what I've heard were true, even though it wasn't so annoying as I expected it to be. Still, it's undeniable that the worldbuilding is largely a mess of bad fanon clishés. Magical cores, mana based magic, dodging being the main way of protection, handling of Veelas, Wizengamot Lords, Unspeakables being secret agents, all of those ideas that were done million times already, all regressive from canon.

On the other hand, it's nice to see elements from Cursed Child and Fantastic Beasts (other than obscuri) being incorporated. And I liked Ron's use of shikis. I hope we will see more "non-standard" magic.

But despite my problems with setting, the plot is interesting enough to get me hooked. Though I couldn't help but notice that in the last few chapters the pacing slowed significantly. I recommend cutting down the bloat, especially considering that there is a lot of characters basically repeating themselves. Also, the Ron's not knowing that Harry is a girl was really stupid, especially considering how public knowledge that was. I know that you've tried to explain that away, but that was flimsy, and the whole thing was unnecessary in the first place.

I have mixed feelings about the characterisation. Even though I know that people change (and considering setting elements Ron already came from the world that was significantly AU to the canon one), I would still prefer to have Ron be more Ron. Also Daphne, Tracey, and Blaise being the trio of nice Slytherins is also really tired by now. And especially disappointing considering that the brief scene that Zabini had in canon showed him as gloriously arrogant asshole thinking himself better than everybody else. Well, who can blame him, with a name like that?

Still, despite the problems, it's a decent fic, so 6/10 for now it is.

Also, it's guessing time. The "gift" of the Greengrasses females comes from them having succubi ancestor. It would fit with the seduction elements, explain the need to find some partner early (food) and fit nicely with one of the versions of the legend of Merlin's half-demonic origin having his father being an incubus.
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Old 04-15-2017, 02:55 AM   #32
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I don't like this fic anymore. The first few chapters had some fast moving plot points, a lot of intrigue, and things were progressing.

Now, chapters feel like they could be compressed into maybe 20-30 lines. Nothing happens. Struggling to find interest for it.

So much about the inner workings of people's minds. like a watered down Death Note where the characters are dumber, and fewer things are at stake.
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Old 04-15-2017, 03:22 AM   #33
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Yeah. I'm getting tired of it too. The update rate is slowing down, it used to be once every 2-4 days, now it's once every week to two weeks. That's fine, and normal, not many people can keep up such a fast update rate with chapters of his size, but the problem is that he's focusing more on character interactions than actual plot progression. So we're getting a lot of conversations with Ron and Violet, with Ron and Daphne, etc, instead of having the confrontation with Violet we've been waiting for when he reveals that he is also a time traveler.

So all we can expect with each new chapter is yet another long scene where Ron is setting the stage for his big plan and a boring conversation with another character, probably Violet or Daphne.
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Old 04-15-2017, 03:46 PM   #34
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This story had a fantastic start and I really enjoyed it. However, at the end of first year it really slowed down. The world building was OK, but things just dragged on and on without resolving any conflicts or causing any meaningful change. I still enjoy it, but it needs to pick up the pace again.

6/10, above average but not true greatness.
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