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Old 10-09-2012, 05:37 PM   #1
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The Havoc Side of the Force by Tsu Doh Nimh - T - HP/Star Wars

Title: The Havoc Side of the Force
Author: Tsu Doh Nimh
Rating: T
Genre: Fantasy/ Mystery
DLP Category: Alternative
Chapters: 7
Words: 31,217
Updated: October 24, 2012
Published: September 6, 2012

Status: Work in Progress
Summary: I have a singularly impressive talent for messing up the plans of very powerful people - both good and evil. Somehow, I'm always just in the right place at exactly the wrong time. What can I say? It's a gift.
Link: The Havoc Side of the Force



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Title: The Unsuspecting side of the Force
Rating: T
Genre: Fantasy/ Mystery
DLP Category: Alternative
Chapters: 3
Words: 11,450
Updated: November 2, 2012
Published: October 9, 2012
Summary: A companion fic to "The Havoc side of the Force". Extra scenes and different perspectives from that story.
Link: The Unsuspecting Side of the Force (Side Stories)
Harry Potter/ Star Wars cross.

I feel like nowadays it is next to impossible to find new stories worth reading anywhere but here at DLP. This story has proven me wrong.
It's still early days but the quality of the writing suggests that it could one day be a 5/5. At this point I will call it 4/5 until more of the actual plot is revealed. Writing is very solid. The characterization is strong, and Harry is suitably kick ass.
In fact, after reading it I kind of suspected it was Jbern writing under a psuedonym (something about this reminds me of Bungle/ Lie).



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Old 10-09-2012, 07:54 PM   #2
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Wasn't this in the Almost Recommended thread? It seems familiar.

Edit: Jbern with a Tsu Doh Nimh, eh? I see what you did there...

Just now read the fic. 5/5 for Harry's Droid friend alone.

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Old 10-09-2012, 08:19 PM   #3
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Absolutely love what I've seen so far. 5/5 from me. Plot hasn't been revealed yet, but everything else has been great.
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Old 10-09-2012, 09:11 PM   #4
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It's a bloody guilty pleasure. It is wildly different so as being amusing with decent writing, but Harry is one of those hurp a durp anti-heroes, murder and darkness is cool, and something else about acting awesome.
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Old 10-10-2012, 12:43 AM   #5
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Been following this since it showed up in the Almost Recommended thread, and I've enjoyed it, if for no other reason than it's a Star Wars crossover that doesn't suck.

4/5 for solid writing and HK-47. It really hasn't gone anywhere yet though - 6 chapters in and we only just figured out when in the SW universe it takes place.
 
Pretty sure it's Phantom Menace, given the discussion of a Trade Federation invasion.
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Old 10-10-2012, 03:24 AM   #6
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Excellent. I was planning to put this up for review, but wanted to wait till the story progressed a bit.

I enjoy the characters. HK-47's and Harry's dialogues are real fun to read. The chapters ending comments are usually great, but the reaction of the force sensitives to his appearance and later his apparation has me concerned that he might have too great an advantage.

A solid 4/5 right now. Looking forward for more.
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Old 10-10-2012, 06:58 AM   #7
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I rather like this story. One of the best SW crossovers, probably because there are almost no good ones to speak off.

It is a bit too focused on a dark Harry picture, and the added HK-47 does fit very well with the characterization but so far the characterization itself isn't anything miraculous.

Also, there's a companion(minion) piece to the story that's supposed to be focused on the other events at the same time, and I don't like the way certain things are written.
 
Apparently, upon the arrival of Harry Potter, someone else came as well, and both of their presence sent a tremor down the force powerful enough to knock out a bunch of Jedi and even the local Sith lord/emperor-wannabee.
And that handling of the 'signal' is something that I think was totally meaningless and doesn't really show any power on anyone's part, but is simply lousy writing, trying to get attention to things that shouldn't be as important.

So yeah, all in all it's somewhere ~3.5/5 and I think I'm going to wait a few updates to write a mark, but I am leaning towards 4, especially if ignoring the extra material.
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Old 10-10-2012, 06:59 AM   #8
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I don't know how he's going to get out of the corner he's written Harry into by not understanding the language.
At some point he has to do a time-skip of at least a couple of weeks to have Harry learn Basic.

Also, I completely agree with SmileOfTheKill on the anti-hero issue.
Harry is pretty much just an asshole and I haven't really seen anything that would make me want to stick with the character long-term.
It's like I said in the Almost Recommended thread: it's something that would have been popular on DLP 5 years ago - darkish, badass, anti-hero Harry - but nowadays I need something more.

The only thing that holds it together until now has been the setting and the suspense of where the plot will go in that setting.
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Old 10-10-2012, 07:00 AM   #9
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Old 10-10-2012, 10:09 AM   #10
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I really like this one. First of all, its a Star Wars crossover that is readable. Secondly, the main characters are written in a way that is highly entertaining to read. The problem is that Harry is completely unrecognizable.

The story seems to follow canon until the end of book 7, but then Harry does a complete 180. Sure, the author might justify the change as Harry getting a little pay back, but on arrival in the Star Wars universe you would think that would tone down a bit. The complete lack of empathy that this Harry exhibits is so far from canon Harry that I would say that he is simply an OC that happened to share a name and experience with canon Harry.

The one turn of events that the author uses to explain the shift is pretty weak as well.

Before I wrote this, I was going to give this a 4/5, but I think that it is closer to a 3/5 because of the complete lack of anything recognizable in Harry.

That doesn't mean that I am not sticking with it, though. It is decently written and fun to read if only for the simple fact that this Harry and HK-47 are hilarious.
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It's pretty short to try and rate, and the plot hasn't so much as reared its head yet, but I'd probably give it a 4/5.

I was expecting barely readable when I read it was a HP/SW crossover, and I was pleasantly surprised. Harry's characterization is a bit out there, but no more so than half the other stuff I like on this site. I'm not even sure I'd call it dark!Harry, exactly. Sure he's ruthless, but he's not waxing poetic about the Dark Arts or anything. He talks the talk, but I expect his people saving thing will reappear in some capacity at some point. At the moment he doesn't even really have anyone he can empathize with to want to save.

Anyway it's new, it's interesting, and I could use something on my favorites list that actually updates. I am pleased.
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Old 10-11-2012, 06:34 PM   #12
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I like it. 4/5
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Old 10-13-2012, 03:52 PM   #13
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4/5. If there is a deeper plot then what we have been shown so far then I'll give it 5.
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Old 10-14-2012, 01:24 PM   #14
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Plot issues aside, I'm really enjoying this so far, the dynamic between Harry and HK is particularly hilarious when mixed with the whole anti-hero shtick he has going on. Although I will admit, the lack of a hero complex is somewhat disappointing. 4/5
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Old 10-14-2012, 11:11 PM   #15
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This is about as good as a Star Wars cross can be. The universes are just way too incompatible. Science fiction and fantasy are like water and oil: similar in many ways but they don't mix well, unless you've got an egg to help create an emulsion...and some vinegar for flavour, perhaps spread on toast and topped with bacon, lettuce and tomatoes. Excuse me, I must leave--I've just made a discovery of great importance.

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Old 10-15-2012, 08:39 AM   #16
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It might be a good idea to add this link to the OP. I get the feeling this fic is going to be incomplete without the extra scenes.
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It might be a good idea to add this link to the OP. I get the feeling this fic is going to be incomplete without the extra scenes.
Added. Which makes me want to go add a bbcode for ffn links. >_>

[ffn]storyid[/ffn] would be awesome. >_>
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Old 10-16-2012, 06:36 PM   #18
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Example: For http://www.fanfiction.net/s/8591872/1/, you would enter [ffn]8591872[/ffn], which will result in Link being displayed.
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A fun read, with anti- hero Harry romping through the starting phase of the war against the Confederacy on Coruscant. The addition of the "side stories" has opened up a glimpse of the possible plot too, and it looks promising enough.

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Harry Potter kicking ass and taking names with the greatest droid ever invented as a sidekick?

Yeah this might just be the best starwars crossover ever written.
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