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Old 07-30-2007, 10:58 PM   #21
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Well, besides Harry being intelligent as all of hell for the plan and being rich as anyone else ever there was massive problems.
Everything and everyone needed the GRAND POTTER LINE! (Or Black line) Hogwarts, the Ministry, the government. (I almost forgot the Goblins here)
They all ran off of the Potter and Black line and as soon as he left it all went downhill.
They invested money, power, magic to everything! No way I could ever see that happening. It is a huge Deus ex machina.
The humor was decent but the whole thing feels of bad plot.
2/5 would be the rank but the spelling is good and the humor is decent. 3/5 here.
The Idea of a parady is to mock commonly used (Or misused as the case may be) Ideas, and I for one think the author did a fine job of that.

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Old 07-31-2007, 02:25 AM   #22
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The Idea of a parady is to mock commonly used (Or misused as the case may be) Ideas, and I for one think the author did a fine job of that.

Solid 4/5
True, a parody is made to fun of something. It is bad though, half way into it you get the joke. Then they do it again, again, and again. The cliche is old, and parodying the cliche can be amusing but it is no better if that is all they do for more than half the story.
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Old 07-31-2007, 04:05 AM   #23
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A very amusing and enjoyable read!

4/5 from me
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Old 07-31-2007, 11:49 AM   #24
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A great one-shot. Neatly done. I liked it, especially Fudge's point of view.

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Old 07-31-2007, 12:42 PM   #25
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True, a parody is made to fun of something. It is bad though, half way into it you get the joke. Then they do it again, again, and again. The cliche is old, and parodying the cliche can be amusing but it is no better if that is all they do for more than half the story.
Touche'

Sad as it is writing Parody's has, in and of itself, become a bit of a Cliche'. Everyone just HAS to try it...
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Old 08-01-2007, 05:28 AM   #26
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It's a good read to pass some time at the office, but not one the best parodies out there. The author could have worked a bit more on the language, most of the time it was normal story-telling mode. Still, very enjoyable. 3.5/5
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Old 08-11-2007, 05:10 AM   #27
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Not worth the library. 2.5/5
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5/5, fic had me grinning damn near the whole time.
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As far as I can tell, Sree is some kind of racist joke.
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Old 08-14-2007, 01:19 AM   #28
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For those that don't know, for whatever reason, there has been an addition to this story. I thought it was a one-shot, but this is apparently not the case.
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Old 08-14-2007, 05:51 AM   #29
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Said link to sequel.

Didn't really live up to the original, imo.
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Old 08-14-2007, 07:12 AM   #30
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Pretty good, not the best story in any particular area, but the author did a good job of making it enjoyable for the most part. 3.6/5 rounded to 4/5
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Old 08-14-2007, 08:01 AM   #31
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Starts good, but once again, preachy know-it-all attitude gets in the way of fun in the second half. This author obviously believes he has the answer to all the problems in the world, and he's not afraid to demonstrate it, this time by living viscerally through Sirius Black. Nothing wrong with that, it just gets annoying after a while.
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Old 08-14-2007, 05:44 PM   #32
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There's a Chapter Three, now. Looks like it's actually over with this one.
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Old 08-14-2007, 06:38 PM   #33
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The first part was good, the second part was okay, but the third part wasn't really anything special, I don't think.

I'll give it a 4/5 overall, but only because the first part should have got a 5 if that'd been the end of it.
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Old 08-14-2007, 08:35 PM   #34
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I'd rather read dobby/dumbledore slash than this crap.

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Old 08-14-2007, 10:09 PM   #35
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Starting with a great bit of fun, second chapter was okay, third chapter was a touch less than that. It just was a little "Okay, I get it, Fudge is stupid" over and over. By itself, first chapter is 4/5, with the new set, I think it averages a bit lower, but I think it can stay at 4/5.

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Old 08-15-2007, 11:21 AM   #36
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First chapter was real good idea and was handled pretty well. Then I think the author fell victim to receiving a lot of good reviews and writing more when it wasn't needed. The second chapter about Sirius the Minister was an okay idea, but got tedious. The third chapter was just tedious. But like everything else by DisobedienceWriter, it's got a little bit of preachiness and it's an easy, enjoyable read both in spite of and because of that preachiness. First chapter's definitely worth a read. The other two have moments, but at times seem to take away from the fun of the first one.

3/5 as a whole for me. 4/5 for the first chapter.
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Old 11-03-2007, 03:22 PM   #37
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wasent that bad 3/5 then again i was kinda a tired so i skipped a lot xd
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Extremely entertaining! The third chapter was forced as hell, but I enjoyed the first two enough to smile. 4.5/5
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Old 02-16-2008, 05:34 PM   #39
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The first chapter was nearly perfect - 4/5
The next was good was even better - Sirius Revenge! 4.5/5
The third was less good, but still made me smile in places. 3.5
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Old 02-17-2008, 05:18 PM   #40
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Very good story for laughs. 4/5

P.S. We need more stories that make me laugh...get cracking people.
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