Title:Eternally Yours
Authorrincess of Wands
Rating:T
Genre: Drama/Romance
DLP Category: Romance
Pairing:HP/LL
Status:Complete
Summary:Luna has a secret admirer whose gifts and letters cause the school to speculate. But as the messages become more sinister and even dangerous, it's up to Harry to save her before it's too late.

Link:http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2086137/1/Eternally_Yours

I've searched the library list and Dark Syaoran's list of rejected fics and didn't find this anywhere on either of them.

Minimal spelling and grammar problems as far as I could tell. It gets a bit angsty near the middle but it does have a satisfying end to wipe that away. It's only 31k words in 9 chapters, but the story told in that time was brilliant in my opinion.

 

I enjoyed it as a quick read. The mystery behind Luna's admirer was well paced and I particularly liked how Harry's feelings towards Luna changed over time.

Luna's character was a bit less eccentric than I liked, but pretty good compared to most portrayals.

I'd give it 4/5. It was a neat idea that was well executed, but it lacked anything truly outstanding happening to bump it up to a 5.

 

I swear I've read a short story almost exactly like this but with original characters. I even remember the balcony scene from the other story. Anyway... it's a good story but for the reason it is basically inserting HP characters into the positions of another story I give it a 2.5/5 rounded up to 3.

 

It wasn't bad. 3/5. There were some typical ideas, like where Harry was sort of overly concerned, Hermione lead everything bad to dissing homework and classes, and Ron was an overly protective big brother. But those are understandable.

What I didn't like about it was the fa la la lovey dovey stuff near the end where everythign was okay.

Meh. Soso.

 

Meh. The story didn't interest me.

 

Me neither. I didn't really like it. And it's basically CanonHarry anyway.

 

Eh, a strong beginning, but the story tapers off with

Spoiler

the bad guy being a death eater and Luna suddenly acting 'normal'.

The writing wasn't exactly bad, but I don't think it's worth putting in the library. It's pretty insubstantial, especially the ending, which feels rushed.

 

Nice spoiling there, buddy.

 

I tried to figure out why I had such a hard time with this, why I couldn’t even force myself to keep reading. Why even skimming over much of it, didn’t allow me to get to the end. I suspected that the story was shit, but I was blaming myself. I looked at it again. The story might be okay, but I don’t know if I have ever encountered less competent writing. There are over 80 adverbs in chapter two. I understand why my eyes keep closing. The constant qualifiers of, well, everything, are unbearable. I gave this 2/5 and am afraid that I might have been generous. Kill it with fire.

 

This is a great story. I really don't understand why everybody seems to be lukewarm to it.

The first chapter and its fairy-tale style is so different. It's not like fanfiction; it's the most professional level writing I've seen for a long time.

And in the first chapter, the author has already established Luna's character as a bullied figure masterfully.

It's comparable to Tehan's fic. The two draw upon such different interpretations of Luna Lovegood, and they have completely different styles of writing, but both are amazing stories. And somehow I feel that this interpretation of Luna is far more realistic.

The villain is extremely sympathetic. Luna is well characterized.

Finally, it's a short read - only 30,000 words. I find it particularly skillful when the author kept his chapters short and to the point and yet was still able to weave a fine tale.

Highly recommended. Fanfiction you do not see every month.

4/5

 

This wasn't a bad story, but I didn't feel as if it were great by any stretch. The last several paragraphs, in particular, were very awkward to read in their corniness.

The worst part, for me, though, was the contrived nature of the climax.

Spoiler

Why didn't Harry just go to Dumbledore and get a portkey for Luna and him? That should have been an obvious step. And why weren't any teachers at all bothered by what was going on with Luna and the anonymous gifts and messages, all of which were public and conspicuous?

These things just bugged me throughout and diminished my enjoyment of an otherwise decently written story. For a first effort, it was okay; it just rubbed me the wrong way, I suppose. 2.5/5.

 

Didn't read past chapter 8.

Perspicacity's spoiler problem pissed me of royally as well.

I hated Luna's charaterization.

Edit: It really irks me when people put emoticons in thread titles, I don't know why.