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Complete A Bad Week at the Wizengamot by DisobedienceWriter - K

Discussion in 'Humor' started by MrINBN, Jul 28, 2007.

  1. MrINBN

    MrINBN Unspeakable

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    Title: A Bad Week at the Wizengamot
    Author: DisobedienceWriter
    Rating: T
    Genre: Humor/Parody
    DLP Category: Humor/Parody
    Pairing: None
    Chapters: 3
    Words: 22,251
    Updated: August 14, 2007
    Published: July 6, 2007

    Status: Complete.
    Summary: What would have happened if Harry had been convicted by the Wizengamot after defending himself from dementors before his fifth year at Hogwarts? Humorous!
    Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3639659/1/

    Got this in my inbox a couple days ago. I thought it was pretty funny, and decided to share with you fine fellows. And ladies.



    Checked by Minion, March 4, 2013
     
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  2. malaga

    malaga Auror

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    That was really good. It was the right length not to drag on too much, and I found the characterizations great. It didn't make me laugh out loud, but I grinned a bit. 4/5
     
  3. Richard

    Richard Supreme Mugwump

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    lol Funny story. 5/5 for me. Excellent writing!

    Richard.
     
  4. Antivash

    Antivash Until we meet again... DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    Not bad. Not bad at all. I enjoyed it.
     
  5. Jamven

    Jamven Headmaster DLP Supporter

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    I enjoyed reading it. Highly recommend to someone to past the time with. 4.5/5 stars.
     
  6. Mordecai

    Mordecai Drunken Scotsman Prestige DLP Supporter

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    Read this a couple of days ago, and thoroughly enjoyed it.

    4/5
     
  7. xcel

    xcel Looked into the void

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    Things wrong with this story

    1. Harry acts OOC in the beginning, lets face it he's not that eloquent.
    2. There were many plot holes. One of them being Dolores saying, "Who will tell anyone this happened? We won't, will you?"

    Err.. why won't they? Expelling someone is bound to leak out.

    3. That wasn't lying to the goblins when the previous minister wrote them a letter stating Sirius was guilty. They thought he was guilty, they didn't know he wasn't, therefore they weren't lying. There are much more plot holes, but I don't have the energy to go through the story with a comb.

    Not worth the library. 2.5/5
     
  8. malaga

    malaga Auror

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    1)Maybe Harry isn't that eloquent in cannon, but face it, if we wanted a cannon Harry we wouldn't be reading fanfiction would we? Plus Harry has had a while to plan this. I think he would make it good.
    2)Sure, the expelling will leak out, but what she is trying to say is that noone will know the whole wizengamot was there. The English public will think that it is just a normal trial, and was fair.
    3)It was lying. They claimed they were sure Sirius was guilty, as he had no trial they can't have been sure, and were deliberately misleading the goblins. Sounds like a lie to me.
     
  9. Jamven

    Jamven Headmaster DLP Supporter

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    *edit* malaga beat me to it.

    Just for the record, Reading any type of fiction is kind of like going to see a play. It requires an amount of "suspension of disbelief" for the audience to really enjoy the story that is being told. So what if Harry is a little OOC. If I wanted to read Pussy!Harry, I would reread the books. I have been looking through a couple of your reviews for some stories and it seems like all you want to read about is Canon!Harry and fuck anything else. If that is so, than kindly get the fuck off this website now, this a FAN FICTION website. That mean if you like Canon!Harry, the stories here will, for the most part, leave you severely wanting.
     
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  10. Cheyne

    Cheyne First Year

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    I don't know if it's the same across the pond, but isn't it 'Innocent until proven guilty by a jury of your peers'?
     
  11. KenderCleric

    KenderCleric Lord of Plot Bunnies

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    4/5

    It was a fun fic that amused. Worth the time to read.
     
  12. Jamven

    Jamven Headmaster DLP Supporter

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    Bah, remember the Salem witch trials?
     
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  13. Solomon

    Solomon Heir

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    The only problem I had with this story is the fact that there was more than one instance of "WHAT!" appearing in there; Mr. Punctuation wants to talk to that fellow.

    That fact alone couldn't drag down my enjoyment of the story, though. I absolutely loved it; 5/5.
     
  14. The Paper Blade

    The Paper Blade First Year

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    I was amused throughout. I liked it. 4/5

    How effective would it be, sinking dementors into the ocean?
     
  15. Snarf

    Snarf Squanchin' Party Bro! Prestige DLP Supporter

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    I thought it was kind of bland myself. Maybe I'll go back and reread it tomorrow, but right now it was very meh.
     
  16. LogrusMage

    LogrusMage Supreme Mugwump

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    Great story, while not particularly humorous, a hyper-fast summery of a well written Independent!Harry. The length was perfect, the pacing was spot on, and the idea's presented were brilliant.

    4.9/5

    -.1 for making the Potter's richer than sin.
     
  17. ip82

    ip82 Prisoner

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    Not the best story by DW, but like always, enjoyable enough.
     
  18. Sporangia

    Sporangia First Year

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    I found this story hilarious. Fudge was done nicely, portraying the ultimate incompetent fool.
    And the Intelligent!Harry is a nice change. Every single loose end is wrapped up: Death Eaters, Corrupt Ministry, Voldemort.

    5/5 :)
     
  19. SmileOfTheKill

    SmileOfTheKill Magical Amber

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    Well, besides Harry being intelligent as all of hell for the plan and being rich as anyone else ever there was massive problems.
    Everything and everyone needed the GRAND POTTER LINE! (Or Black line) Hogwarts, the Ministry, the government. (I almost forgot the Goblins here)
    They all ran off of the Potter and Black line and as soon as he left it all went downhill.
    They invested money, power, magic to everything! No way I could ever see that happening. It is a huge Deus ex machina.
    The humor was decent but the whole thing feels of bad plot.
    2/5 would be the rank but the spelling is good and the humor is decent. 3/5 here.
     
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  20. Rain

    Rain Pirate Navigator of the 7 Seas

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    I thought it was entertaining. It was well written, although I wish there was more detail, but hey, that might just be that I was looking for a long story and found an excellent oneshot instead. Recommended with a 4/5 rating.