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WIP A Daring Synthesis - Ironypus - Worm/Gamer

Discussion in 'Other Fandoms Review Board' started by Zombie, Aug 6, 2019.

  1. Zombie

    Zombie John Waynes Teeth Moderator DLP Supporter

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    Title: A Daring Synthesis
    Author: Ironypus
    Rating: T
    Genre: Action/General/Adventure
    Chapters: 40
    Words: 79,554
    Status: WIP
    Fandom: Worm/Gamer

    Summary: It's Greg Veder but he's a Gamer.

    Link: FFN, SB

    I honestly feel like I posted this before, but I couldn't find any trace of it, so I must have linked it in chat.

    Before you get all over yourself, and tell me that this is nothing but a shit story, lemme tell you something. You're half-way right. But seriously, this is the Greg the Gamer that everyone on SB is obsessed with. I never really understood the fascination with it until I read this, and its basically because the people that write him over there want to turn him into a meme lord, or they identify with him in some way with all of his social inadequacies.

    But this isn't that.

    Its pretty much a deconstruction of the entire genre. If you take it seriously, you've already lost the game. What this story offers is funny bits of memery that is relevant to the fandom, and a depth of character in Greg that you really only see in A Bad Name.

    As Greg gets stronger and completes more tasks, he starts dumping points into his WIS. All the things he's done since the start of the story start to weigh on him, and his understanding of himself as a person before and after grows, and places him in mental agony as he reconciles himself with the larger cast.

    This is subtle. This isn't some kind of new technique if I'm totally honest, there are a few other stories that have utilized this concept. What makes this one work is that its subtle, and not so on the nose, its reflected in Greg's thoughts and his actions, and the entire tone of the chapter as you're going forward.

    His characterization of people like Armsmaster and the fact that he gave Weld a personality contrary to other examples in the fandom really sell it to me as well.

    I really like this. I've shared it with a few people, and its hit or miss on how they think about it, and not all the jokes within are perfect. Its rare that you see such an awareness from an author in regards to character development.

    I'd easily give it a 4/5.
     
  2. DrSarcasm

    DrSarcasm Unspeakable

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    I've been reading this story myself. Something I have to say about it is that it fucking nails the cringe-factor of the 'teenager with no self-awareness' that is Greg Veder. He makes bad (and horribly offensive) jokes that he thinks are funny, he relishes his weebness, and he's so unfiltered that when Gallant hits him with one of his emotion beams, well...
    Probably one of the best parts of it is how, as he slowly gains WISdom, he starts to become self-aware of his faults. Like how you look back on your actions as a teenager and cringe at yourself for all the idiotic shit that you did, but over the span of months instead of years. As unlike other Gamers, he lacks the Gamer's Mind that prevents negative mental status effects and ensures cold logic at all times, he is forced to deal with the PTSD from the fights he's been in with people who genuinely want to kill him and from the horrific injuries he's sustained or witnessed, the crippling depression and self-hatred from realizing what a piece of shit he was/is, and the alienation he feels at how his previous actions have soured his relationship with other people.

    My only complaint is that at times it's too subtle. Sometimes the trauma that Greg is feeling is pretty well clear-cut, while other times you have to read between the lines. It's a weakness, I think, of the fact that the story is written in first-person perspective, and Greg is often in denial or suppressing his issues.

    4/5
     
  3. Saez

    Saez Professor

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    This is the best Gamer!Greg hands down. It's pretty much perfect for what it is, the latest chapters that have him suicidal are a bit much though as I wouldn't want to see this end up like A Bad Name. Nice to see him going down the entertainer path again. The friendship online was a nice touch, the whole fic plays up on his fanon characterization and it really works.

    4/5
     
  4. Zombie

    Zombie John Waynes Teeth Moderator DLP Supporter

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    Come on guys, 6 votes, three reviews. The math doesn't work.
     
  5. Mutton

    Mutton Unspeakable

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    It's decent? Takes a while to get to the point where you don't want to choke the protagonist
     
  6. s0ng2Sing

    s0ng2Sing Second Year

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    One of the best Greg/Gamer fics that I follow. The character evolves as the story progresses. The protagonist comes to long for the days when his Wis was so low that he didn't really notice how much of an ass he was unintentionally. Also has some legit trauma and doesn't just go through horrible experiences with not problems what soever. Also, that Greg gets out of Brockton Bay and goes to a new team in a different city is nice and something that isn't often done.

    4/5
     
  7. Ceins

    Ceins Second Year

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    One of the rare SB stories I read immediately when I notice an update. So by that standard 5/5.
    The beginning was such a cringe fest, luckily that's gone away. But I really like that the story and the MC are both aware of the previous failings. Makes the change more real and earned.