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Complete A Mother In Law's Love by Perspicacity - M

Discussion in 'Humor' started by Perspicacity, Jan 8, 2011.

  1. Perspicacity

    Perspicacity High Score: 3,994 Prestige DLP Supporter

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    I'm hesitant to submit one of my own stories for Library consideration, but I completed it not too long ago and I honestly think it's as good as some of my other stories in the Library.

    Title: A Mother In Law's Love
    Author: Perspicacity
    Rating: M
    Genre: Humor/Adventure
    DLP Category: Humor/Parody or maybe Time Travel
    Pairing: Harry/Ginny or Harry/Molly (I don't want to spoil it)
    Chapters: 7
    Words: 43,613
    Updated: November 5, 2010
    Published: March 6, 2009

    Status: Complete, novella length (45k words)
    Summary: Distraught over Ginny's death in the final battle, Harry gambles desperately and travels back in time to set things right. Unfortunately, not everything goes as planned. A twist on the classic Soul Bond tale.
    Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4905771/1/

    It's my irreverent take on time travel, Soul Bonds, Goblin etiquette, homunculi, the Weasleys, Harry's returning to Hogwarts as a teacher, etc. Told in first person narrative. I was aiming to make each chapter more audacious than the last. I figure it deserves placement in the Recycling Bin at least...



    Checked by Minion, February 15, 2013
     
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  2. Torak

    Torak Death Eater

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    You mad bro?

    This story has everything we in DLP look for in a fic. Consistent characterizations, gripping plot hooks, crippling humor, and a badass Harry. 5/5 man :awesome
     
  3. Jormungandr

    Jormungandr Prisoner

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    I've heard good things about this story, even if it personally isn't my cup of literary tea.

    Will have to read it in full after I wake up.
     
  4. Voice of the Nephilim

    Voice of the Nephilim Death Eater DLP Supporter

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    It's borderline criminal that this already isn't in the library. Fantastic job here, Pers.

    5/5
     
  5. Shouldabeenadog

    Shouldabeenadog High Inquisitor

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    Quality: 5/5
    Logic: -5/5
    characters: 5/5

    total:
    Q+C+|L|=5/5 rating
     
  6. pdo91

    pdo91 Professor DLP Supporter

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    Actually that's 15/5, but who cares because this story is awesome.
     
  7. Swimdraconian

    Swimdraconian Denarii Host DLP Supporter

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    You have nothing to worry about, Pers.

    5/5
     
  8. Jeram

    Jeram Elder of Zion DLP Supporter

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    Well.... it's decent enough, but if I must be honest, these days I often judge stories by how much I want to (or end up) skimming them. And to be frank, I found long stretches of the story quite boring, and I mainly finished because you're a DLP mainstay. Certainly better than much of the horrendous crap out there where I have to click "close" after 1000 words of nonsense, terrible writing, or both. But I wouldn't put it any higher than maybe 3.5/5 or so... although I suppose I can round up for the voting in the thread.
     
  9. Grinning Lizard

    Grinning Lizard Supreme Mugwump

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    Interesting, without a doubt.

    You are the only fanfic writer who parenthesises more than I do:

    I think a solid 4/5: Good.

    And I <3 that Less Wrong loved it.
     
  10. Unknown

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    I've read this story numerous times while being bored but these lines really got my goat. Good story and hope you write more on your others. 5/5.
     
  11. Fiat

    Fiat The Chosen One DLP Supporter

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    When I found this thread, I assumed a new user was reposting it, as it had never crossed my mind that this wasn't in the library already.

    Awesome as always Pers.
     
  12. CleanRag

    CleanRag Groundskeeper

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    This.

    However there were several moments when I cringed while reading this. When Harry asked Arthur permission to court his daughter, in front of everyone, right after she just got done telling him she didnt want to be with him.

    Library worthy but I think you tried a bit too hard to give this a 5/5.
     
  13. Sauce Bauss

    Sauce Bauss Order Member DLP Supporter

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    You're too humble Pers. Every time you post something you make sure to mention that you're not sure how good it is, or if it's library worthy. Even when people mention you in lists of authors they like, you say that you're not sure what you've done to be counted in their company. I can see why you're a little more hesitant to mention your IRL accomplishments as they're relatively well-known at this point, but there's no need to be so self-effacing. You're a good author, get over it. :)
     
  14. Republic

    Republic The Snow Queen Prestige DLP Supporter

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    I don't know. I see that it was expertly written, I can see that Pers is a genius, but still. While I laughed a lot, if it weren't Pers who wrote it, I would have stopped. T'was nice as a crack-fic, and it had these awesome moments, it just wasn't interesting during the rest of the time.
    That said, this is definitely worthy of a 4.5/5, because of the solid writing and the awesome moments here and there.
    Edit:I forgot to mention how weird it was, and my constant wtf state while reading it.
     
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  15. Stormey

    Stormey Groundskeeper

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    3.5/5 for me. Rounded to 4.
    I liked the fic, but to be honest, it wasn't a case of me itching to read more. I skimmed towards the end anyway. Only giving this 4 instead of 3 because it was written well enough.
     
  16. JenosIdanian

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    First of all, Pers, good show. I honestly hadn't read this all the way through until now. I know some people didn't like all the little details and skimmed through parts of your fic, and I regret that for them. It's the little things that I really appreciated about your fic here, most of all the occasional alliteration-laced curses (Mab's muff, for one, was lulz :D ).

    I thought the take on Soul Bonds was over the top and handled crack!enough to be hilarious, even all the way at the end. I enjoyed this romp through more minds (and whatever passes for a phoenix brain) more than I'll care to admit. Well played, indeed.
    5/5.
     
  17. Gulliver

    Gulliver Second Year

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    +3 points for awesome goblin scene
    +2 points for awesome Fawkes
    -1 point for Molly Weasley as a central character.

    Excellent work, chap.
     
  18. Portus

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    Good story, but there were times that I found myself skimming it. Easily a 4/5 though, and I may change my vote to a 5/5 after I reread it. I'm guessing that reading it all in one go will help it out since my memory may have forgotten some of the things in between chapter updates.
     
  20. Fenraellis

    Fenraellis Minister of Magic

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    Ah, it's nice to see this one here. I remember back when you first had the signature of Ginny asking Molly if she should swallow, and then finally reading the scene at last... hah.

    That said, humor abounds, and while I suppose that some polish is a given for most anything, I'll still go for 4.5/5, rounded up.