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A Twisted Timeline by madnesspersonified - R

Discussion in 'Almost Recommended' started by malaga, Dec 17, 2007.

  1. malaga

    malaga Auror

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    Title: A Twisted Timeline
    Author: madnesspersonified
    Rating: R
    Genre: Drama, Humour
    DLP Category: Alternates
    Pairing: HGHP
    Status: WIP
    Summary: Much to his displeasure, Harry is thrown back through time into his six year old body. As a result, Harry decides to contort the timeline, purely for his own amusement.

    Link: Link

    This fic isn't incredibly realistic (read: not realistic at all), and Dumbledore is very cookie cutter "For the greater good" "Sacrifice one for many" rahrahrah.

    However, mobsterboss!Harry is pretty cool, as are some of the minor characters depictions. The author is rather gifted with humor, but problems arise when they try to insert plot.

    If you are willing to suspend disbelief, it is a good little time killer, so I thought I'd see what you all think, and it contains some cool quotes like:
     
  2. Niffler Lord

    Niffler Lord Headmaster

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    This have been around for a while... I could have sworn that it was posted on DLP before...

    Having said that it is an awesomely funny fic... Mr. Fondlemember the goblin.... LOL

    4/5
     
  3. Memory King

    Memory King Order Member DLP Supporter

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    No, this hasn't been posted hear before, only the author's crossover fic.

    That said, this certainly isn't the best story ever, but it's very entertaining and funny. A lot of changes to canon safe it from the Recycling Bin. And I'm not sure this will become H/Hr, did I miss something or what?

    3.8/5, rounded up to a four.
     
  4. headbanger22

    headbanger22 Third Year

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    Quite a nice fic, I am enjoying it so far I will have to give it 4/5.
     
  5. Lincos

    Lincos Professor DLP Supporter

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    You know, I have tried to read this on multiple occasions and I just don't like it, 1/5. But I am not going to officially rate the thread because I generally don't like Humor fics.
     
  6. ip82

    ip82 Prisoner

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    I liked this well enough until he did the whole mafia-kid thing. Some people can pull off silly, but his attempt just came out ridiculous.
     
  7. Archer

    Archer Fourth Year DLP Supporter

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    Meh, it was kinda funny but I got bored pretty quickly.

    3/5
     
  8. Zephyrus

    Zephyrus Endlessly Tilting Windmills

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    This might have been a good fic. I don't know and never will know. The fact that I found three grammar errors right off the bat and the author couldn't decide how to properly spell the Killing Curse ticked me off. 2/5 for what might have been decent.
     
  9. ChaosWarrior

    ChaosWarrior Muggle

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    I found this to be a good fic, and any fic that calls Dumbledore a "manipulative young coot" and has a believable Girl!Blaise is good in my book, and while you may need to turn off disbelief a few times, its a great read IMO
    4.5/5
     
  10. PsyckoSama

    PsyckoSama Groundskeeper

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    Why is a 4 star story in the bin?
     
  11. Renzhoulawyers

    Renzhoulawyers Sent Back to India

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    Certainly better than some of the stuff in the library. Not the best, but readable
     
  12. Philly Homer

    Philly Homer What you call elephant cum I call mouthwash

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    I agree with ip82, the fic was pretty good until the kid mafia thing. Add that with 7 year old Hermione being uber smart, and I couldn't click the X button fast enough.

    Homer
     
  13. Bratling

    Bratling Professor

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    While this has definite flaws, it's a nice little vacation from reality. I've had a good time laughing at it, just as it's supposed to be. Because of the fact that it's in need of a beta reader who is good with grammar, (It has some errors. It's not as bad as about 75 percent of the stories out there, grammatically speaking, though.) and I've found a couple small plot holes, I can only give it 4/5.
     
  14. vorenus

    vorenus Squib

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    I thought it was entertaining and doesn't deserve to be binned 4/5
     
  15. HSRTG

    HSRTG First Year

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    Spelling and grammar are all right. The plot is generic, the characters are cookie cutter, and everyone except Harry is an idiot. Somehow, though, it amuses me.

    3/5
     
  16. Banner

    Banner Dark Lady

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    It's light, shallow fun. Some of the humor is being stretched too far, but I always love a smart, kickass Harry.

    3/5
     
  17. Bratling

    Bratling Professor

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    A light, entertaining read. It was finished today. 4/5
     
  18. Korisovra

    Korisovra Headmaster

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    I'll give the finished product a 4/5 for sheer entertainment value.