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Complete A Wand for Skitter by ShayneT - T

Discussion in 'Trash Bin' started by Golgar, Apr 18, 2020.

  1. Golgar

    Golgar Second Year DLP Supporter

    Sep 18, 2011
    Title: A Wand for Skitter
    Author: ShayneT
    Rating: T (I would set a higher rating for brutality)
    Genre: Fantasy/Suspense
    Status: Complete
    Length: 359,078 Words
    Library Category: The Alternates
    Pairings: none
    Summary: Waking in the body of a murdered child, Taylor Hebert, once a super villain and later a super hero must discover who has been killing muggleborns while being forced to go to Hogwarts, among groups who are the most likely suspects.
    Link: https://www.fanfiction.net/s/13220537/1/A-Wand-for-Skitter

    A crossover between Worm and Harry Potter. The main character, as indiciated in the summary is Taylor. She does not replace Harry, but is dropped into the HP world just before Harry starts Hogwarts and the changes spiral out from there. Harry is not seen much initially but takes on bigger parts later. As it is Taylor post-Worm, she has of course a huge lead in terms of experience compared to her age cohort. She has to go to school with all the annoyances that would bring but it is not overblown. There is no bashing, and the characters are well portrayed.

    It is hopefully not too much to spoil, since it is already alluded in the author's summary: Much of the initial tension comes from Taylor being sorted into Slytherin. The conflict with the purebloods is one of the main sources of conflict. Because of this, there is nearly constant tension.

    This Taylor is extremely pragmatic and ruthless, perhaps more so than in canon. But it is still plausible. There was no time to recover, basically she is dropped from being shot by Contessa immediately into her new body. Expect much escalation. I am not sure I agree with the T rating, the story can be pretty brutal with detailed descriptions of gore.

    The story is written fast paced, and left me easily hooked to see what comes next. That is the main attraction of it in my view. While some predictability cannot be avoided by the constraints of the setting, the author managed to keep things interesting and often enough surprising.

    The spelling and grammar are mostly fine as far as I can tell. It was originally written rather fast, with an update often every other day on Spacebattles. The Fanfiction.net version seems a bit cleaner, and it was posted only after completion, therefore I would expect some improvement but I did not check in detail. The downside of this writing style, however, is that I think the author had not fully planned out where he wanted to go, or at least how to get there. It is complete, and not badly done, but there is a bit of a rush in the endgame.

    Especially memorable scenes were Taylor encountering a Boggort, and her interactions with Umbridge.

    I would give it 4/5. It is not perfect, but a good read. That said, I found it very entertaining to read. It explores the effects of a person such as Taylor dropped into Hogwarts well.
  2. Donimo

    Donimo Auror

    Jul 4, 2015
    This is a horrible Worm fic and an even worse HP fic.
  3. Zombie

    Zombie Black Philip Moderator DLP Supporter

    Apr 28, 2007
    I read Shaynes stories everytime thinking they're going to be different. I honestly liked The Many Deaths of HP and he's wrote some decent starts on other stories but the majority of his stuff is formulaic, needlessly excessive with gore, stupidity of main characters, among other things - - as well as self sabotaging. Usually he takes a interesting idea and just ruins it, like the fifth Indiana Jones movie.

    His worm stories are barely worm stories much like this is barely a HP story. It's not a 4/5, it's barely a 1/5. If you don't care that stuff doesn't make sense, can ignore his need to endlessly escalate with Taylor or whatever main character he's writing and total ooc characters then this is a good story to waste your time time with.
  4. Heather_Sinclair

    Heather_Sinclair Chief Warlock

    Jan 19, 2008
    The Eighth Circle of Hell
    I'm really curious if he's actually read Worm, or just relied on the wiki or FFs. Sometimes it doesn't seem like it. The first one he did where Taylor inherits Magneto's powers, it really showed. The characters were just place settings for whatever he needed them to do.

    Now it seems like he takes an idea or character and just bastardizes whatever cross he's doing with it. Like this one: she doesn't have her actual power, instead she magics it up from nothing. Sure, it's magic, but still. He twists HP magic into something that almost unrecognizable from canon.

    Though it's understandable that he relates so well with Taylor as a main character in whatever story he's writing. He escalates to the extreme almost as quick as she does. The bad guys are bad and deserve anything that's done to them, and he's gotten inventive in his literary bloodlust with each story he writes.

    The sad part is that he's got some good ideas, but they're buried in with all the slash/kill/murderize that it's become stale. Still, I read these stories when I have nothing else to read and I have a taste for a slasher fic.

    In fact, it really reminds me of the old Friday the 13th movies I grew up on. Yes, they were awful. Yes, they were predictable, gore-filled, campy at times, and I left feeling like I needed a shower more often than not, but it served a need, I suppose.

    For that it gets a 2/5.
  5. Zombie

    Zombie Black Philip Moderator DLP Supporter

    Apr 28, 2007
    Pretty sure he's stated before that he has only ever read worm fanfic. Think in the one where Taylor was a Sayian he said that as a reply to someone's comment.
  6. Heleor

    Heleor EsperJones DLP Supporter

    Mar 3, 2006
    Seattle, WA
    For what it's worth, at least Shayne finishes his stories, which puts him ahead of most other fanfic authors out there. There are worse time-wasters than this.

  7. WrongWayJordan

    WrongWayJordan Squib

    Jan 24, 2015
    Eh, I guess I have lower standards. I agree with everything that’s been said above, but it doesn’t seem to bother me as much. The writing itself is certainly readable, and I read the whole thing, so that at least counts for something. Certainly no masterpiece, but if you’re looking for something to kill a day with and are willing to suspend your disbelief, you could do worse.

  8. TheWiseTomato

    TheWiseTomato Prestigious Tomato ~ Prestige ~ DLP Supporter

    Nov 11, 2009
    High Score:
    2/5. It's a time waster, and something that updated reliably, and it's finished. The prose is flat and workmanlike. The main character is not Taylor, however. They're more of a memetic exskalashion Taylor. To give you an idea of what that means, the 'final battle' was
    some full on Home Alone shit ramped up to 11 of Taylor vs Voldemort and his army of dastardly European mercenaries.

    It's something to read, and I was vaguely amused at times, but once again it's a fic that had an interesting premise that was buried under a tide of dumb plot twists and poor characterisations.
  9. Anarchy

    Anarchy Half-Blood Prince DLP Supporter

    Dec 12, 2009
    There's a reason this story has existed for a year and hasn't been posted here yet.
  10. Ched

    Ched Da Trek Moderator DLP Supporter ⭐⭐

    Jan 6, 2009
    The South
    I'm going with a 3.5/5 and I'm debating whether to round up or down depending on how it ends. I'm tempted to round up just because it appears to be finished. I'm on Chapter 73.

    I've read most of Worm. I was reading it on the plane back from China last year (May 2019) and when we landed I just sort of stopped at Speck 30.5 because I'd lost interest. That tab has been open on my phone ever since, because I always keep meaning to go back and finish it, but I just lost interest after a point.

    This isn't really Taylor. But if the author wanted to have a character like this in the HPverse then they could do worse. They basically took a lot of Dark/Indy!Harry tropes from numerous fanfics, dressed them up a bit nicer, and gave them all to Taylor instead of Harry.

    So she can run rings around all the adults and be clever and murder Death Eaters and get one over on everybody. In ways that are a little too convenient and work a little too well.

    There are times when it doesn't make sense or when the author is clearly letting things happen (or ignoring things) to make the narrative go how they want.

    I mean, FFS, Taylor has a bum bag / fanny pack full of bugs and other sundries and I swear that at least she's mentioned bugs crawling out of it in view of other people. And had it not been noticed or commented upon. And she gets 'lucky' about things like putting her friends into an expanded trunk, shrinking it, and sticking it into another expanded space - which even in story isn't supposed to work. It felt like extremely lazy writing to me.

    But it reminds me of the old days when Indy!Harry hadn't been done half to death and it's a bit like a fun train wreck to watch.

    It's 'above average' so I guess I need to round up if it's complete.

    If I hadn't been on this forum for more than a decade I might consider revising how I rate things. I rarely give things less than a 3 because at worst most of the crap people post for review are 'average' compared to the rest of the drivel out there. Something to think on.

    Edit: The quality started going down shortly after I wrote this - some of the interviews with the Death Eaters / Purebloods / etc. are cartoonish in how they are portraying their thoughts on muggles and muggleborn. Definitely went off the rails there and pulled me out of suspension of disbelief in a way this story hadn't before.

    Edit 2 - Good example of a story that started out close to a 4 but by chapter 80 this has gone down to a 2/5 at best. Everything Taylor does works and she’s so much better than the adults - it’s like all the bad Indy!Harry trope done badly whereas the story started out doing them decently.
    Last edited: Apr 19, 2020
  11. KaiDASH

    KaiDASH Auror DLP Supporter

    Oct 6, 2010
    Honestly, this is a much better story to read a little at a time via periodic updates than to read the entire thing at your own leisure.

    Reading a few thousand words in the occasional update was pretty good for most of the story but the big issues with characterization, 'Taylor' and everything else makes it something that I'll never reread.

    2/5 as a completed work.