I want to write a movie screenplay. It would be written in my native language, Lithuanian as the Lithuanian movie "industry" doesn't really have many good screenwriters, resulting in 1 or 2 good movies made in the country each year. On the surface, the movie is about mental manipulation (hypnosis, suggestion and all that stuff) and it's consequences. The main character, a girl in her late teens/early twenties, has a mother with terminal cancer, brain tumors to be specific. Her father left after the cancer got diagnosed. She finds a hypnotist who claims to be able to cure addiction, lessen pain and make you see unicorns. The girl brings her half-dead mother to the guy, lets him know that she's not very hopeful that he will succeed, warns him that if his methods don't help but he takes her mother's money anyway, she will make him regret it. During the procedure, the girl is kept out of the room. Inside, everything seems to go well, until the mother seizes up and starts shaking. The hypnotist runs out, tells the daughter to call an ambulance. The mother dies en route to the hospital. Thinking that the hypnotist is at fault, she starts telling everybody who will listen that it was his fault. The hypnotist gets questioned by the police. They let him go. Coroner's report should come in a day or two later, funeral arrangements should be made so she goes home, has a drink. While going to get the report a day or two later, her car malfunctions, she has a very bad car crash, leaving her in a coma for some years. She almost miraculously wakes up. At first, she's groggy but when she gets her bearings, she remembers that the car was out of control. She contacts the police, asks them what was wrong with her car. The police found alcohol in her bloodstream so they didn't see the need to examine the totaled car. She tells them that she suspects the hypnotist of doing something to it but is brushed off because he's a well-liked celebrity of sorts these days, similar to Derren Brown in the UK. Now, the girl has two choices: move to another city to rehab together with her apologetic father and his new family; or seek revenge on the hypnotist. She chooses the second option, so on a deeper level, the movie is about revenge. Then, a couple of days later, the girl is approached by a dude her father's age who leads a group of people who's mission is to ruin psychics, hypnotists and all other "scam-artists" they deem dangerous enough. Here, she finds a new family of like-minded individuals and a new father figure in the leader. Using her sensational awakening from a coma as a springboard, the group picks the hypnotist as their next target. While publicly blaming him for the death of the girl's mother, the girl orders an examination of her totaled car. It seems that the public actually believes that the hypnotist is guilty. The group has won, they ruined the hypnotist but he can't be charged due to lack of evidence. The leader pushes for extreme measures - actually attacking the guy. The girl refuses. Secretly, the leader and a couple of his friends go through with his plan, severely beating him. After getting out of the hospital, the hypnotist thinks that it was the girl who planned the attack, goes to her place to confront her alone. At practically the same time, she receives the results of the examination, finds out her car WAS tampered with. During the confrontation, having heard the accusations, she immediately realizes what the leader did. He loses his moral high-ground in her eyes for going against her. The hypnotist swears that nothing went wrong during the hypnosis. The girl throws the results back in his face. He's confused. Turns out, the guy was attending a seminar on the other side of the country because he wanted to ask a mentor of his if he might have possibly had anything to do with the death of her mother. He's in the audience on the youtube video. The girl accepts that he's innocent. Tells him that she had nothing to do with the beating he took but she has a suspicion who did and poses the question of who messed with her car. The hypnotist asks her if she remembers something weird happening before the crash, she doesn't. He offers to hypnotize her to possibly help her remember. After thinking about it, she accepts. It doesn't take at first, they talk some more until she trusts him more, it finally succeeds. She remembers seeing a now familiar face at the police station - the leader. He was a cop at the time, could have easily got all the information about the case. One thing remaining in the mystery - why? After some digging around on the Internet, they find out that the guy had a bad experience with hypnosis, psychics or something similar (need to figure this out, guys). As Sherlock Holmes said, when you have eliminated the impossible, whatever remains, however improbable, must be the truth. The girl contacts the guys who advocated for milder approach vs. the hypnotist, gathers her allies and goes to confront the leader. Using some clever psychological tricks that the hypnotist taught her, she makes him admit everything. During the whole time, she was on a line with police, they heard everything. They storm the place, arrest the bad guy. After everything is over, the girl and her friends who helped with the confrontation of the leader, travel the world, busting psychics and similar quacks, she has mended her relationship with her father, forgiven the hypnotist. So basically, the movie looks like a story about hypnosis and all that stuff, when you go a little deeper, it's about revenge and if you dig further, it's about forgiveness and family (not necessarily of the blood-relation type) being the way to happiness. What do you guys think? Obviously, it needs much fleshing out. After I figure out these bare bones, I'm going to story board the hell out of it. When that is done, will start writing. What logical fallacies can you see? Is it too simplistic? Too complicated? Unoriginal? Boring? Too... all over the place? Shred it to pieces DLP-style, please Would you go see this movie if it was made? Would you like it? P.S. How's my English these days? Starting to feel as if it's atrophied a little bit in the last year or so.