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Assassin's Apprentice by Fanfix - M

Discussion in 'Almost Recommended' started by Evil Shnitzel, Jan 18, 2006.

  1. Evil Shnitzel

    Evil Shnitzel High Inquisitor

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    Fics title: Assassin's Apprentice
    Author: Fanfix
    Rated: M
    Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2745392/1/
    Summary:
    Apprenticeships are given to all the students of sixth and seventh year at Hogwarts School of Witchcraft and Wizardry. The Board of Governors however aren’t pleased with Harry, and therefore, along with Blaise Zabini (for other reasons), is placed in the care of Hagrid, hoping to hamper Harry’s learning, and to be given a chance to oust the Care of Magical Creatures professor. Perhaps, though, they should have checked a little more about Hagrid’s life, and that of Harry’s. Because even fate isn’t about to try and stop Harry from becoming the best; the best of them all!


    A new fic by author of "Harry Potter and Azkaban Guards". Though there are many plot holes its still very enjoable story. Different from most of independent story's where Dumbledore is bastard to Harry. Though Dumbledore portrayed subtle manipulator here Harry doesnt fight with him and still makes his own desicions.
    Very good story so far.
     
  2. Xanos

    Xanos Card Captored and buttsecksed

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    do you have a link to it?
     
  3. Evil Shnitzel

    Evil Shnitzel High Inquisitor

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  4. DaytonDeusBlack

    DaytonDeusBlack Seventh Year

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    It starts off nicely. I'm waiting for an update. A few grammatical mistakes though. Maybe I'll offer to beta read it....
     
  5. ip82

    ip82 Prisoner

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    Added it to Author Alerts. I'll see if he breaks 20k marker before trying reading it...
     
  6. Mordecai

    Mordecai Drunken Scotsman Prestige DLP Supporter

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    only 2 chaptes just now, but actually quite good, though there are a couple of wtf! moments.
     
  7. Dark Syaoran

    Dark Syaoran Persona 4 Admin

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    It's pretty good. I havnt really given a crap about the few WTF!Moments because pretty much every story has them now days.
     
  8. sirius009

    sirius009 Minister of Magic

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    Pretty good, i'll also wait to see if the story breaks the 20k mark.. in other news, Ip82 hows your next chapter coming??
     
  9. Dark Syaoran

    Dark Syaoran Persona 4 Admin

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    What's with all these people demanding updates from Ip and Ravenclaw, lol. I think it's annoying them... maybe.

    *stares at Ip*
     
  10. MadEyes

    MadEyes Seventh Year

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    Yeah, I know what you mean. He's been trying to get me to read it for a while now, but I told him he has to have it well underway and completely sure that he won’t be leaving it, like a lot of his other stories, before I do read it.

    Anyways, I’ll get on his case with the updates if it’s any good, maybe he’ll see this one through. However, I won’t be very optimistic until I see it with my own eyes. :wink:
     
  11. ip82

    ip82 Prisoner

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    I'm trying, I'm trying... writter's block is damn annoying.
     
  12. MadEyes

    MadEyes Seventh Year

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    annoying bunch, arnt they? Dont give you or Raven a moments peace...
     
  13. TheIllusiveOne

    TheIllusiveOne Raptured to Hell

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    This has LOADS of potential. The only problems I see is that Harry is going to be relying a lot on Blaise by looks of the way Ron and Hermione are acting, and I think a fem!Blaise with a sorta love/hate relationship would be better suited. The whole 'The only person that I plan on talking to the whole year is a guy who I spend my every moment with' attitude is kinda gay.
     
  14. Lord Osiris

    Lord Osiris Auror

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    Well just read the 2 chapters and there pretty desent. I agree Illusive about that hanging around a dude for a year is quite gay, but im fond of the slower decline with the frindship between the mudblood, poor weasel and Harry instead of the quick betrayal. Has the potential to be a very good story, and a good Dumbles on Harry's side is always welcome.
     
  15. Xanatos

    Xanatos Professor

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    really gd start, but i jst wish it was a fem blaise
     
  16. Dark Syaoran

    Dark Syaoran Persona 4 Admin

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    He likes Fem!Blaise but I guess he didnt want to deal with relationship crap in this story. Wanted to stay away from romance I guess...
     
  17. Blackstar

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    I wouldve liked to see an argument atleast between ron and harry and perhaps a bit more dialogue more detail about the other subjects they are studying. I also wouldve expected hermione to get all fussy over harry over the poisoning and ron to talk about how he's learned oh so many poison detection charms.

    Other then that i like it, but id like to see more conflict
     
  18. parselmaster

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    This one has caught my interest. I just hope it's good.
     
  19. MadEyes

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    I still haven’t read it, but next time he logs on, I’ll let him know of all your comments. I’m still holding on to my promise that I won’t read it until I’m sure that he isn’t going to abandon the story. Who knows, I’ll even volunteer to help with the plot if he plans to finish this fic.
     
  20. Dark Syaoran

    Dark Syaoran Persona 4 Admin

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    Sounds good. Hopefully it'll keep going.