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WIP Ave Xia Rem Y by RedHazard - T - Original Fiction (Xanxia)

Discussion in 'Original Fiction' started by Spanks, Jul 21, 2020.

  1. Spanks

    Spanks Chief Warlock

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    Title: Ave Xia Rem Y
    Author: RedHazard
    Rating: T (so far)
    Genre: Xanxia, fantasy, adventure
    Wordcount: 200,000+
    Fandom: Original
    https://forums.spacebattles.com/threads/ave-xia-rem-y-a-very-cliche-xianxia-story.589587/

    Summary: This is one of those xanxia story's. It's about a boy named Liu Jin who is the son of a doctor in a boarder town. The world is filled with cultivators who can harness Qi and get stronger, and there are varying levels of Qi one can cultivate. Jin's father is a cripple because he is incapable of using Qi, but despite this he's a talented doctor who at one point saved the life of the local leader of a Sect. In return for doing this Jin is brought into the that Sect to properly learn cultivation. His goal is to become a doctor like his father, but using Qi to do it.

    I had a lot of fun reading this. The characters are well written, especially the relationship between Jin, his father and various members of the sect. Jin is your typical protag in power up stories, he excels beyond others his age, but he's not overpowered. He loses fights, he isn't the most powerful person in the room all the time, but his growth in power is well paced. Tho, I think he's due for major power boost soon. The most recent chapters shit hit the fan in a big way and he's gonna need to get stronger to fight in the big leagues. Also, the story is pretty fast paced too, which I understand is rare for these kind of story's.

    I'm new to this whole xanxia thing so I don't know many of the cliche's that go along with it. To me all the stuff in this story was original.

    I don't really have much negative to say. It took a few chapters for me to get used to the way the characters addressed one another as well as the very similar Chinese names sometimes popped up between different characters.

    But for me I loved it. 5/5
     
  2. Nuit

    Nuit Dark Lord

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    I also like this one. 4/5
     
  3. Erandil

    Erandil Minister of Magic

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    Well, if nobody else is giving a review it seems like I have to man up and at least attempt it. Spanks does a god job of summarizing it so i really don't have all that much to say. It is a solid xianxia story that so far at least has voided most of the big problems of the genre (toxic masculinity, one dimensional characters, everybody being an idiot/asshole etc.) while still being clearly xianxia. It still features some of the typical chliches, for example the main character location is comparatively weak compared to the true powers of the realm and said realm seems to be the weakest compared to its two rivals so I suspect we will still see some "in your hometown you might have been a protege but here people like you are as common as dirt" tropes (though to be fair the story has also featured that into the opposite direction).

    Still I feel comfortable giving this story 4/5 stars though with the story having arrived at a massive turning point we will have to see if it can keep that or not.
     
  4. PoshMafia

    PoshMafia First Year

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    I have read to the end of the first arc and into the beginning of the second. Chapter 55 or thereabouts.

    A very cliche XianXia story is what it is advertised to be.

    That said strong 4/5.

    It is good. Not great, however, the writing is competent. The expected strokes are hit and hit well, while the obvious pitfalls of the genre still exist and will still drive away readers who are not a fan of the genre.

    Examples of the strokes hit -

    Humble beginnings with a hidden background offering a natural transition into the high spheres of power with easily choreographed conflict. Check.

    A mentor who dies as our character is thrust into the greater world with a call to action. Check. (Father and Master in this case)

    Leaving behind the people you knew as you move into the next stage/area/world/whatever. Check.

    Fiance has some set of circumstances that ensures they cannot marry allowing the MC to go get more great beauties. Check.

    I could easily go on but suffice to say, these cliches are hit, and hit in a manner that isn't subtle doesn't force the reader to think. However, it never promised to be anything more than this. This is a competently written XianXia that does not try to differentiate itself from the genre.

    TL;DR
    It is honest and well written with an easily followable plot and no delusions of being more than it is.

    I would heartily recommend a read for those who enjoy XianXia / Xuanhua fiction.
     
    Last edited: Dec 24, 2020
  5. Ched

    Ched Da Trek Moderator DLP Supporter ⭐⭐

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    Can we get another review on this before it moves out of For Review?
     
  6. Mutton

    Mutton Order Member

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    It's a fine 4/5? Pacing is kind of off and the current arc was meh but overall enjoyable
     
  7. Sauce Bauss

    Sauce Bauss First Year ~ Prestige ~ DLP Supporter

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    I think it's a pretty inoffensive 3.5/5. It's well-written enough that I direct anyone with an interest in the genre towards it. The pacing is a bit laborious at times, but that's my biggest gripe.
     
    Last edited: Apr 23, 2021
  8. andy50

    andy50 Groundskeeper

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    I thought it was pretty mediocre in all aspects. I've read about 30 chapters? Nothing stood out as good, everything was just serviceable. Also the author has for some ungodly reasons written this to sound like a badly translated chinese webnovel. Which I think was a poor decision.

    3/5
     
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