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Complete Delenda Est by Lord Silvere - T

Discussion in 'Almost Recommended' started by craigery9700, Nov 19, 2009.

  1. craigery9700

    craigery9700 First Year DLP Supporter

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    Title: Delenda Est
    Author: Lord Silvere
    Rating: T
    Genre: General/Time Travel
    Pairing: Harry/Bellatrix
    Chapters: 46
    Words: 392,449
    Updated: Sep 22, 2013
    Published: Nov 15, 2009
    Status: Complete


    Summary:

    Harry is a prisoner, and Bellatrix has fallen from grace. The accidental activation of Bella’s treasured heirloom results in another chance for Harry. It also gives him the opportunity to make the acquaintance of the young and enigmatic Bellatrix Black.

    Link:
    http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5511855/1/

    Mostly posted it because i liked his first story way back when it was first posted. I also enjoy the Harry/Bellatrix ship.

    Time travel fic, not sure i like the get the wand from family vault, hopefully, it doesn't have a list of being owned by super-powered ancestors, or that he suddenly finds out from the goblins he is the heir to several ancient magical lines. If it avoids those it could be a rather good fic, too early to give a number rating yet.


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  2. Lincos

    Lincos Professor DLP Supporter

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    Care to give us a bit more information on the story from your point of view? I've seen this many times on FF.net when looking to see if there have been H/Bella updates, but the summary just never made it enticing enough to actually read.
     
  3. Tehan

    Tehan Avatar of Khorne DLP Supporter

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    Then too early to submit to For Review yet, you idiot.
     
  4. Moeed

    Moeed Third Year

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    Nice start. His last name is a nice touch and I like how Harry's shown to be mature. The coming Dumbledore talk though will either make or break the fic.
     
  5. Random Shinobi

    Random Shinobi Unspeakable DLP Supporter

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    This fic has potential.

    Unfortunately that is mostly because I happen to like Harry/Bellatrix, and not because any real accomplishments on the fic's part. The characters are all OoC, and I'm half-way expecting Dumbledore to open the upcoming conversation by "What the hell were you doing, you motherfuckers?"

    I will wait at least a few chapters more before rating the fic, but if I had to vote now, I would give it three stars.
     
  6. Vir

    Vir Centauri Ambassador Prestige DLP Supporter

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    I like it, although I wish there was more than two chapters. I especially like the title "must be destroyed"
     
  7. Andro

    Andro Master of Death DLP Supporter

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    Not bad at all. The author can't do witty banter to save his life, and Voldemort hunting down a few survivors after having destroyed the Order and the Ministry before executing Harry, the greatest existing threat, is contrived as hell.

    The writing's generally good though.

    3/5
     
  8. Nuhuh

    Nuhuh Dastardly Shadow Admin Moderator

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    I liked what is there of it so far. Level of writing is good, but not mindblowingly awesome. Environments are sparse and the general story telling is more or less skeletal. You don't really feel immersed. I feel that the introductory chapters are important in building the 'world' of the story, and that wasn't really done here.

    I enjoy time travel fics and this seems like it will develop into a guilty pleasure if nothing else. Several cliches have already popped up, and like Random said characters are all oc.

    I believe this will be Harry becomes his parent's teacher type deals, which is usually a turn off for me. Probably because I haven't seen it done well.

    Anyway, just two chapters, it's got me interested enough to look for updates but I can't give it an endorsement yet. 3/5 as it stands, but I expect will go to 4/5.
     
  9. Averis

    Averis Don of Delivery Prestige

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    I read it, but I can't say I was all that impressed with the first two chapters. As Andromalius said, the author is awful with witty banter - in fact, the dialogue is the worst part of the story thus far. It does have redeeming qualities and a potential to get better, but most of that comes due to the rare pairing.

    Is the Earl of the North any good? Regardless, this one will probably follow a similar path as that story, no matter how the author says they are different.

    I'll hold off on rating this, as it probably shouldn't be in For Review to start with, but if I had to, I wouldn't give it above a 3/5 as is.
     
  10. Galleon

    Galleon DA Member

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    In 2006? Without a doubt

    Now? Guilty pleasure at best
     
  11. SmileOfTheKill

    SmileOfTheKill Magical Amber

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    This is COMPLETELY AVERAGE!!!!
    awesome bold to make story remotely epic
     
  12. crazyfoxdemon

    crazyfoxdemon Muggle

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    For now at any rate... It does have some potential to become a fairly good fic.... Just gotta wait and see how the author writes up the future chapters...
     
  13. Nuhuh

    Nuhuh Dastardly Shadow Admin Moderator

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    It updated. We have had the Dumbledore meets AU Harry scene.

    So apparently young Bellatrix Black is a gestalt of Hermione, Ron, Ginny, and the twins, in the authors' words. (facepalm). Why is it that whenever there is someone curious about magic in HP fandom s/he has to be compared to Hermione. It would seem as if the only one actually interested in magic in all of Harry Potter was Hermione Granger and has forevermore claimed all rights to be excited about it. (/rant)

    Anywho, for someone who has just sprung out of captivity from god knows how long Harry is way too well put together. Bellatrix is already flat, using muggle phrases and cussing - oh yes, there is love in the air. Abusive ooc lover stereotype here we come.

    A couple of original characters were introduced and took up a lot of time in the chapter, I suppose they will be important.

    So far my hopes for this getting better are not materializing. That said, it is three chapters long.
     
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  14. Andro

    Andro Master of Death DLP Supporter

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    It doesn't matter whether this is three or thirty chapters, it won't get better.

    2/5 now. Hopes got shot down remarkably fast.
     
  15. Johnny Farrar

    Johnny Farrar Professor

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    An average story that might have been considered good a few years back.

    2/5 from me as well.
     
  16. Pyromaniac

    Pyromaniac Third Year

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    As far as I can tell, the only people in canon that are remotely interested in and curious about magic are Voldemort and Hermione.

    Anyway, while it's not library worthy, it's not heinous. I'll give it a 3/5 for the recycle bin.
     
  17. Johnny Farrar

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    What about Dumbledore? Or perhaps Snape. Even the Marauders. All of them were curious and interested in magic.
     
  18. Portus

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    Uhh, I would think that when talking about canon characters interested in magic, the Weasley twins would spring to mind fairly quickly, what with all the, you know, inventing they did with their joke shop stuff.
     
  19. SmileOfTheKill

    SmileOfTheKill Magical Amber

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    This is now BELOW AVERAGE!
    Read what N wrote. I don't go for abusive girls in stories that act ooc.
     
  20. Manatheron

    Manatheron Headmaster

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    Good Potential, but is running some serious cliche' including Deus Ex time travel Device and 'UBER' wand.

    3.5/5 if I rated it, but very much to short to do that.

    Edit: 'Ladykiller' Harry is pretty standard for IndyTimeTravel!Harry stories too.
     
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